Well shit, she's a dark one isn't she? The shots really do set the tone of the story, good job!

Edit by Alter Native: Referring to the old version of Chapter 1 Section 1.

On 1/12/2017 at 2:14 PM, KillinCuzICan said:

Well shit, she's a dark one isn't she? The shots really do set the tone of the story, good job!

Thanks, I was never a fan of all the "good" Vampire characters that popped up since Twilight.

But the lightning is a bit to dark, at least on the faces. I probably I didn't know about the Facelight mod when I took the screenshots.

Edit by Alter Native: Referring to the old version of Chapter 1 Section 1.

Wow thats very fucking good. 

What mod is that place and the vampire blood on her lips

Great work 

Edit by Alter Native: Referring to the old version of Chapter 1 Section 1.

On 1/15/2017 at 1:38 AM, Agent Tex said:

Wow thats very fucking good. 

What mod is that place and the vampire blood on her lips

Great work 

Thanks you. The blood was from DVA Dynamic Vampire Appearance. 

Edit by Alter Native: Referring to the old version of Chapter 1 Section 1.

I like this girl.

Edit by Alter Native: Referring to the old version of Chapter 1 Section 1.

A quite peculiar mix of vampirism and sub/dom, with nice setup and ambiance. Well done. ?

Edit by Alter Native: Referring to the old version of Chapter 1 Section 1.

Brilliant work Alter Native! the blood looks amazing!

Felt slightly bad for Mjoll, but hey, vamp's gotta eat too!!! Good shit Alter!

Comment for Remake:

Was Mjoll magically entranced? She seemed to carefree about having her blood sucked the first time

I can see you did put lots of work into it. The blood effects on the bed are really nice.

I went back and reread the original as well. I gotta admit, you've changed quite a bit since then. Incredible improvement! I've always regarded you as a consistently talented story teller, but now with this, I see that you're a consistently improving one. This section, though remade, is one of your best, I think. The shots were excellent along with all the blood. I also liked the formatting style when Nora and Mjoll first met; it was like a comic. Great work, Alter!  

12 hours ago, xGHoSTx said:

Brilliant work Alter Native! the blood looks amazing!

Thank you  . 

8 hours ago, Rattlesnark said:

Was Mjoll magically entranced? She seemed to carefree about having her blood sucked the first time

Yeah she was falling for the typical vampire aura thing. Like a minute before she was having her blood sucked for the first time she was still sane and trying to kill Nora, so she wasn't that carefree.

10 hours ago, KillinCuzICan said:

Felt slightly bad for Mjoll, but hey, vamp's gotta eat too!!! Good shit Alter!

Haven't seen you in a while on this blog, glad you're still around  . Thank you.

3 hours ago, Cema said:

I can see you did put lots of work into it. The blood effects on the bed are really nice.

Thanks. I tried decals on the bed first, but later edited the texture directly. 

24 minutes ago, Collygon said:

I went back and reread the original as well. I gotta admit, you've changed quite a bit since then. Incredible improvement! I've always regarded you as a consistently talented story teller, but now with this, I see that you're a consistently improving one. This section, though remade, is one of your best, I think. The shots were excellent along with all the blood. I also liked the formatting style when Nora and Mjoll first met; it was like a comic. Great work, Alter!  

Thank you very much, It's always interesting to go back to someones old work and see how much one has changed/ improved. 

I'm trying to figure out for a while if - and if yes, how to use vertical images in stories like this. So I was trying different things in this section.

Nice redoing some chapters I see ok then 

Thanks for this new upload, You are one of the best story teller of this whole universe including Nirn.. 

But why this remake ? If, I may ask... 

A delightful remake. You have done a huge amount of work. I bow to your patience and skill.

Wow great work  

Will you keep the necromancer concent of chapter I?

7 hours ago, Jayomms said:

Nice redoing some chapters I see ok then 

Thanks, the next section 2 will diverge stronger from the original version.

6 hours ago, death8981 said:

Thanks for this new upload, You are one of the best story teller of this whole universe including Nirn.. 

But why this remake ? If, I may ask... 

Thank you very much death  . 

The answer is more or less given in the first paragraph I wrote. I already redid some parts of chapter 2 before I posted them and was never really happy with chapter 1 and wanted to redo it all the time. But instead I always preferred to create new content instead of improving old one. But now I just felt like it was time to redo some of the old stuff. I also just had a chapter break which made it easier to post this content before moving on.

4 hours ago, Crw said:

A delightful remake. You have done a huge amount of work. I bow to your patience and skill.

Thank you very much  

Uh uh, so after saying so many times you weren't satisfied about this chapter, you went for a remake ! Which was excellent btw, with a full demonstration of vampiric seduction at work. not to mention the effects of blood on vampire's sex drive, and the care put into every detail of the environment. And the torrid erotism of course. Plus, at first, the interesting tries about a comic layout, added with the voices at the end, it seems you've set up for a more story-oriented format after all.

Awaiting for chapter 1 section 2 !

Malicia : « She killed the Mjoll girl ! That was very meany ! I knew kissing a girl on the mouth was a bad idea... ?

Well if she kills everyone I'm NOT awaiting for the next episode, no !  »

1 hour ago, Resdayn said:

Wow great work  

 

Will you keep the necromancer concent of chapter I?

Thanks. 

I guess you have to wait and see how the next section turns out in detail, but there will be at least one necromancer.

32 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Uh uh, so after saying so many times you weren't satisfied about this chapter, you went for a remake ! Which was excellent btw, with a full demonstration of vampiric seduction at work. not to mention the effects of blood on vampire's sex drive, and the care put into every detail of the environment. And the torrid erotism of course. Plus, at first, the interesting tries about a comic layout, added with the voices at the end, it seems you've set up for a more story-oriented format after all.

 

Awaiting for chapter 1 section 2 !

 

Malicia : « She killed the Mjoll girl ! That was very meany ! I knew kissing a girl on the mouth was a bad idea... ?

Well if she kills everyone I'm NOT awaiting for the next chapter, no !  »

A post by Tirloque and it's all positive! ?

I think I said this in the end, but this is supposed to work as an introduction point for the blog so it made sense to be a bit more conservative and show the "rules" of my world.  

It's not that I defenitly want to try to stick with the format per se, I just don't want to draw over the images.

Also I'm trying to figure out how to best incorporate vertical images. 

@Malicia, she's going to kill someone in the next entry and you'll be happy about it, I promise. So there is your reason to look forward for the next section  .

1 hour ago, Tirloque said:

 

Malicia : « She killed the Mjoll girl ! That was very meany ! I knew kissing a girl on the mouth was a bad idea... ?

 

She kissed the from girl, now Malicia go kiss Gwynolda.

That is one hell of a remake. 

5 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Thanks. 

I guess you have to wait and see how the next section turns out in detail, but there will be at least one necromancer.

A post by Tirloque and it's all positive! ?

Well... Malicia wanted to point out you forgot the number of the era for "4E 201" but I thought that'd break the mood.

5 hours ago, Alter Native said:

I think I said this in the end, but this is supposed to work as an introduction point for the blog so it made sense to be a bit more conservative and show the "rules" of my world.  

It's not that I defenitly want to try to stick with the format per se, I just don't want to draw over the images.

Also I'm trying to figure out how to best incorporate vertical images.

So that's whats going on.. Anyway, with verticals and smaller images, inbuilt in the same drawing board, you'll end up with an hybrid Michael Corvin subtitled comic layout sooner than you think. Which was quite pleasant to follow.

5 hours ago, Alter Native said:

@Malicia, she's going to kill someone in the next entry and you'll be happy about it, I promise. So there is your reason to look forward for the next section  .

Malicia : « If it's the panther, It's okay then. »

4 hours ago, Resdayn said:

She kissed the from girl, now Malicia go kiss Gwynolda.

Malicia : «  Why, she became a vampire too ? She's gonna kiss me on the neck while a guy with yellow eyes tries to go honey-honey with her ? ? »

8 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : «  Why, she became a vampire too ? She's gonna kiss me on the neck while a guy with yellow eyes tries to go honey-honey with her ? ? »

 

Gwynolda is not vampire, she is not degrade herself for that heretical life.

8 hours ago, The Gauntman said:

That is one hell of a remake. 

Thank you  

5 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Well... Malicia wanted to point out you forgot the number of the era for "4E 201" but I thought that'd break the mood.

So that's whats going on.. Anyway, with verticals and smaller images, inbuilt in the same drawing board, you'll end up with an hybrid Michael Corvin subtitled comic layout sooner than you think. Which was quite pleasant to follow.

 

Dam'it you're right, I'll fix the fist line. It's literally the first sentence of this blog so it should be correct.

16 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Thank you very much death  . 

The answer is more or less given in the first paragraph I wrote. I already redid some parts of chapter 2 before I posted them and was never really happy with chapter 1 and wanted to redo it all the time. But instead I always preferred to create new content instead of improving old one. But now I just felt like it was time to redo some of the old stuff. I also just had a chapter break which made it easier to post this content before moving on

Oh ok. though I love both (old & new) them but you know it better.. So keep UP your Great work.. ?