While I felt a bit disappointed not to get the next chapter of that promising Vvardenfell monastery plot, I have to admit that character development section was interesting. Of course, we knew Nora wasn't going to send the letter, but the perfectly manipulative manner in which she did so was a great moment (the cord plot in particular). We also have more insight on Amelie, but also quite a lot more on Fina. While the latter seems to have unheard of franchise when giving her opinion to the Baroness, it looks like Nora tolerates it because she appreciate her intelligence and the insight she can provide her regarding her servants of a more common level. Still a very high level graphical realization, though the Facelight intensity seems a bit strong on some shots. There are a bit more typos than the usual I'd say. On a scenario point of view, it felt perfect but for two points : the first is that Fina is supposed to be gone for a moment to raise her future child, and the second is the " I changed my mind, you can empty the bath again", which suggest either Nora being a bit careless, either Amelie not being to bright.

Anyway, great entry, as always.

Malicia : « Nora's being very meany when it come about letters, uh. Plus she doesn't really want to set Amelie free, no.

                  Instead she wants her to kiss her pee-pee until she turns into a draugr.  »

You know what's great about Nora? (besides the obvious answer of "everything") We, as the readers, can never feel a 100% safe about the well-being of the characters that surround her. Throughout the whole episode I had these thoughts: " wait, Nora is being nice...something is wrong...she's being EXTRA nice...something is really wrong...she's kind and attentive and yup, here we go, the letter isn't sent. Everything is back to normal."

Baroness Karlov is scary enough when she's being her regular partly-passionate/partly-cruel self. But when she's acting kind (even if she truly means it) she actually becomes quite terrifying because it leaves us guessing whether it's a genuine emotion or the person is about to become her next victim. I was seriously worried for Fina's life after she confronted Nora about the letter.

I'm also really curious about Amelie. ? One possibility is that the story seems to show the life of a young, subservient girl who is in love with her Mistress and who might slowly realize that Mistress does some pretty terrible things. The shocking realization will either destroy her or she'll learn to live with it. The other possibility that I periodically muse over is that Amelie is a double agent of sorts and the whole capture, slave-training, etc was set up by Vasil from the start.  Because she is just too perfect, too obedient, too innocent. 

I realize that as an author you're obviously not going to spoil the story, so I just want to compliment you on creating such fascinating and thought-provoking characters ?. Your tale is a real pleasure to read. And of course the screenshots are as gorgeous as ever. ?

6 hours ago, Devianna said:

You know what's great about Nora? (besides the obvious answer of "everything") We, as the readers, can never feel a 100% safe about the well-being of the characters that surround her. Throughout the whole episode I had these thoughts: " wait, Nora is being nice...something is wrong...she's being EXTRA nice...something is really wrong...

 

Hahahahahahahahahaha. I really like your comments.

Nora is a master of playing dirty games. She reminds me on my wife Ivy. She'll trick anyone. Hahaha.

But dat face ...maaaaan ... it makes you wanting to kiss her for eternity.

22 hours ago, Jayomms said:

15 hours ago, Tirloque said:

While I felt a bit disappointed not to get the next chapter of that promising Vvardenfell monastery plot, I have to admit that character development section was interesting. Of course, we knew Nora wasn't going to send the letter, but the perfectly manipulative manner in which she did so was a great moment (the cord plot in particular). We also have more insight on Amelie, but also quite a lot more on Fina. While the latter seems to have unheard of franchise when giving her opinion to the Baroness, it looks like Nora tolerates it because she appreciate her intelligence and the insight she can provide her regarding her servants of a more common level. Still a very high level graphical realization, though the Facelight intensity seems a bit strong on some shots. There are a bit more typos than the usual I'd say.

Thank you very much! Much appreciate your feedback! Tbh. I disagree on the facelight, I think the lightning was very good in this entry... maybe we have just different ideas oh how lightning should look, but there is very little I would change about the lightning in this entry.

Sure there might be one or two images of the 170 that are a tiny bit too bright or so, but tbh. I couldn't find one that I didn't like.  

15 hours ago, Tirloque said:

On a scenario point of view, it felt perfect but for two points : the first is that Fina is supposed to be gone for a moment to raise her future child, and the second is the " I changed my mind, you can empty the bath again", which suggest either Nora being a bit careless, either Amelie not being to bright.

I think you misunderstood that (or maybe I wasn't clear enough). But basically Nora wanted to have a word with Fina without Amelie being in the room for obvious reasons. Thus she have her some pointless task to do, she never intended to have a bath there. 

So she wasn't careless and Amelie might be used to a mood swing of Nora occasionally, so it's also not that odd from her perspective. 

15 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « Nora's being very meany when it come about letters, uh. Plus she doesn't really want to set Amelie free, no.

                  Instead she wants her to kiss her pee-pee until she turns into a draugr.  »

But Amelie doesn't want to be set free, she's very happy, at least that's what she thinks .

13 hours ago, Devianna said:

You know what's great about Nora? (besides the obvious answer of "everything") We, as the readers, can never feel a 100% safe about the well-being of the characters that surround her. Throughout the whole episode I had these thoughts: " wait, Nora is being nice...something is wrong...she's being EXTRA nice...something is really wrong...she's kind and attentive and yup, here we go, the letter isn't sent. Everything is back to normal."

 

Baroness Karlov is scary enough when she's being her regular partly-passionate/partly-cruel self. But when she's acting kind (even if she truly means it) she actually becomes quite terrifying because it leaves us guessing whether it's a genuine emotion or the person is about to become her next victim. I was seriously worried for Fina's life after she confronted Nora about the letter.

Thanks for your comment Devianna! It's always a blast to read them.- Even though Nora can be very cruel and brutal, she is rarely irrationally brutal. Killing Fina would need her to find another servant, having to explain Amelie why her best friend suddenly disappeared as well as lowering the moral of her other servants that would feel threatened as well. 

Of course there are boundaries, and lines Fina can't cross, but Nora is not a random comic book villain  .

13 hours ago, Devianna said:

I'm also really curious about Amelie. ? One possibility is that the story seems to show the life of a young, subservient girl who is in love with her Mistress and who might slowly realize that Mistress does some pretty terrible things. The shocking realization will either destroy her or she'll learn to live with it. The other possibility that I periodically muse over is that Amelie is a double agent of sorts and the whole capture, slave-training, etc was set up by Vasil from the start.  Because she is just too perfect, too obedient, too innocent. 

You got me, Amelie is a secret double Agent to reveal precious details about Nora's sex live and her wardrobe to Vasil .

In a way I like the idea, but that would require Nora being outsmarted and manipulated by a 21 year old girl . I think the other way is much more likely .

13 hours ago, Devianna said:

I realize that as an author you're obviously not going to spoil the story, so I just want to compliment you on creating such fascinating and thought-provoking characters ?. Your tale is a real pleasure to read. And of course the screenshots are as gorgeous as ever. ?

Thank you very much Devianna! Thank you for your kind words, glad you liked it!

7 hours ago, Elf Prince said:

Nora is a master of playing dirty games. She reminds me on my wife Ivy. She'll trick anyone. Hahaha.

But dat face ...maaaaan ... it makes you wanting to kiss her for eternity.

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Careful she doesn't kiss you back one to many times . But yeah, she likes playing dirty games in all facets. 

8 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Thank you very much! Much appreciate your feedback! Tbh. I disagree on the facelight, I think the lightning was very good in this entry... maybe we have just different ideas oh how lightning should look, but there is very little I would change about the lightning in this entry.

Sure there might be one or two images of the 170 that are a tiny bit too bright or so, but tbh. I couldn't find one that I didn't like. 

Well, it's very minor regardless, and you're the lighting specialist here. So you're probably right on this.

8 hours ago, Alter Native said:

I think you misunderstood that (or maybe I wasn't clear enough). But basically Nora wanted to have a word with Fina without Amelie being in the room for obvious reasons. Thus she have her some pointless task to do, she never intended to have a bath there. 

So she wasn't careless and Amelie might be used to a mood swing of Nora occasionally, so it's also not that odd from her perspective.

I understood that completely. The thing is that Amelie having objected that Nora already had a bath (so already thinking it's weird), Nora still being with Fina, and then cancelling the bath afterwards ; wouldn't it seem obvious to Amelie that her mistress wanted to talk without her being around ? 

8 hours ago, Alter Native said:

But Amelie doesn't want to be set free, she's very happy, at least that's what she thinks .

Malicia : « She's very happy crying 'cause of Thomas, and writing letters to her parents, uh. Plus it's not a problem if one is missing, she can still write one or two more to kill time. »

Oh man, it bothers me that Nora is right because I totally side with Fina. Gah! Fucking great though! I feel so frustrated and torn, and that's fantastic storytelling! Truly incredible job, as always Alter. I'm dying to see where this goes! Excellent TFOA shout out as well ^.^ Made me blush.

11 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Did you noticed I joined the Storytellers Discord server? 

Damn, that's really sensual and intriguing. Amazing job, as always, Alter Native ^_^
And they said that I'm the only one who making girls kissing each other without proper continuation

I'm always crazy about how much work you do with lighting, just amazing!

On 11/3/2019 at 12:12 PM, Tirloque said:

I understood that completely. The thing is that Amelie having objected that Nora already had a bath (so already thinking it's weird), Nora still being with Fina, and then cancelling the bath afterwards ; wouldn't it seem obvious to Amelie that her mistress wanted to talk without her being around ? 

You got a point, but without noting that Nora already had a bath it's not clear that she made Amelie pointlessly leave the room to have a word with Fina.

Amelie is probably used to a lot when it comes to Nora... also she's "trained" to not think too hard about Mistress instructions and just do them  .

18 hours ago, Collygon said:

Oh man, it bothers me that Nora is right because I totally side with Fina. Gah! Fucking great though! I feel so frustrated and torn, and that's fantastic storytelling! Truly incredible job, as always Alter. I'm dying to see where this goes! Excellent TFOA shout out as well ^.^ Made me blush.

I guess everybody sides with Fina in that situations . Thank you for your comment. 

13 hours ago, Jayomms said:

Did you noticed I joined the Storytellers Discord server? 

 I did, yes.

4 hours ago, Crw said:

Damn, that's really sensual and intriguing. Amazing job, as always, Alter Native ^_^
And they said that I'm the only one who making girls kissing each other without proper continuation

I'm always crazy about how much work you do with lighting, just amazing!

Thanks! But they have been kissing since chapter 2 of my story so I would argue their relationship and kissing did have a continuation. 

Welll definetly not the session I expected, I hope we get back to the monastery part, since its pretty intriguing.

However we get a lot of scenes and interaction from Amelia, which suprisingly became pretty rare nowadays in the recent chapters.

We saw her feelings toward Nora and in generally of her role and her life.

Conflict between Fina and Nora was rather interesting one, but Nora is right about the situation, while not nice from her to not send the lette..

Generally make sense, althought her wanting to stay kinda suggest, her life there probably may not was the best..

Skyrim in civil war and her family on the Stormcloak side, since its from Windhelm, consequences would be far more bigger already then Nora presented.

Lies and deceit are bad, but in that case was the best decision for everyone..

As for the Mistress relationship, ohhhh dear, that kinda reminded a lot of my actual experiences. for me it was a cute to see that ?

The shot of Nora in profile, when she is talking to Fina after placing Amelie's letter on the table. The composition, lighting, expression and pose. That's some masterful work Alter Native. The rest is also amazing. UwU This is my second read-thru of B and P. Trying to pay more attention to details.

7 hours ago, Skyrimshaw said:

The shot of Nora in profile, when she is talking to Fina after placing Amelie's letter on the table. The composition, lighting, expression and pose. That's some masterful work Alter Native. The rest is also amazing. UwU This is my second read-thru of B and P. Trying to pay more attention to details.

Thank you! 

Never imagined people would read those entries several times. There are actually a lot of small hints and references to future entries. For example Damon was already mentioned in chapter 7 long before he appeared on screen. 

Also half the story of Chapter 9 is already spoiled in an old entry... .

Warum mich dieses Bild so beeindruckt hat?

weil es einen sonst vernachlässigt bzw. oft glatt ignorierten Teil einer dominant-submessiven Beziehung zeigt -> ohne die freiwillige Hingabe des submessiven Part kann der dominante Part seine "Profession" (Sadismus, Unterwerfung usw.) gar nicht ausüben denn er wäre alleine!

ja - sicherlich ist es Teil von Noras Manipulation - aber eben nur ein Teil welcher untrennbar mit diesem anderen Aspekt verkoppelt ist.