Wow. 

Nora is as always gorgeous. Moreover, you managed to convey her emotions about Eric, it feels that she "does not give a damn"

And I was shivered to the stage with an orc and two vampires.
Bloodthirst and lust straight from this page. Well, or I'm impressionable.

Mmm. Delicious ^ _ ^

Very interesting session, let the Rule of Baroness Karlov begin.

Ok this was one of the most epic tales I have ever had the pleasure of reading here on LL, not is it just full of amazing sex scenes but the characters ,the lore it all works so well and that only boosts the effectiveness of your story telling.

Nora has come so far since Chapter 1, and now I feel like she is a very interesting character compared to how she used to be, you did a great way of showing her mature (I guess, shes a Vampire so she doesn't age of course) Now I see her as a necessary Evil (Sorta) Shes someone who plays both sides of the law, but isnt say a evil person at heart just a Vampire trying to make it in the Vampirc Word. 

The screenshots in this chapter were perfection, from the burned skin to the moving of ashes, I really felt in those scenes for Nora, and the fact you were doing that thing were in Video games: "Its like you need this much to repair this oh and this much for this oh and this will bring income  but its 10,000 septims so maybe do that last but hey its up to you" 

Aria: Nora your home is better then mine! I aspect an invite to your first Ball or you know party thing, I'll be bring a plus one too. XXX

? welldone!

1 hour ago, Agent Tex said:

Ok this was one of the most epic tales I have ever had the pleasure of reading here on LL, not is it just full of amazing sex scenes but the characters ,the lore it all works so well and that only boosts the effectiveness of your story telling.

 

Nora has come so far since Chapter 1, and now I feel like she is a very interesting character compared to how she used to be, you did a great way of showing her mature (I guess, shes a Vampire so she doesn't age of course) Now I see her as a necessary Evil (Sorta) Shes someone who plays both sides of the law, but isnt say a evil person at heart just a Vampire trying to make it in the Vampirc Word. 

 

The screenshots in this chapter were perfection, from the burned skin to the moving of ashes, I really felt in those scenes for Nora, and the fact you were doing that thing were in Video games: "Its like you need this much to repair this oh and this much for this oh and this will bring income  but its 10,000 septims so maybe do that last but hey its up to you" 

 

Aria: Nora your home is better then mine! I aspect an invite to your first Ball or you know party thing, I'll be bring a plus one too. XXX

Completely agree with Tex, except Tex said it far better than I could. And your Nora isn't a high functioning psychopath. In fact she's a beautiful gem. Just don't let her get too close.

Shea: High functioning psychopath? Is that what I seem like?   {Insecurities intensify}

2 hours ago, Crw said:

Wow. 

Nora is as always gorgeous. Moreover, you managed to convey her emotions about Eric, it feels that she "does not give a damn"

And I was shivered to the stage with an orc and two vampires.
Bloodthirst and lust straight from this page. Well, or I'm impressionable.

Mmm. Delicious ^ _ ^

Thank you Crw. I think she does give a damn about Eric, as seen in the last part of this entry, this was difficult for her and not just some random floor cleaning .

Thanks, I like the last screenshots as well, the two vampires introduced in this entry are here to stay, they are going to be Nora's employees from now on. 

Thank you very much .

1 hour ago, Resdayn said:

Very interesting session, let the Rule of Baroness Karlov begin.

Haha, so true

1 hour ago, Agent Tex said:

Ok this was one of the most epic tales I have ever had the pleasure of reading here on LL, not is it just full of amazing sex scenes but the characters ,the lore it all works so well and that only boosts the effectiveness of your story telling.

 

Nora has come so far since Chapter 1, and now I feel like she is a very interesting character compared to how she used to be, you did a great way of showing her mature (I guess, shes a Vampire so she doesn't age of course) Now I see her as a necessary Evil (Sorta) Shes someone who plays both sides of the law, but isnt say a evil person at heart just a Vampire trying to make it in the Vampirc Word. 

 

The screenshots in this chapter were perfection, from the burned skin to the moving of ashes, I really felt in those scenes for Nora, and the fact you were doing that thing were in Video games: "Its like you need this much to repair this oh and this much for this oh and this will bring income  but its 10,000 septims so maybe do that last but hey its up to you" 

 

Aria: Nora your home is better then mine! I aspect an invite to your first Ball or you know party thing, I'll be bring a plus one too. XXX

Thanks a lot Tex and I really mean it. I'm not sure why all of a sudden I earn so much praise, but thanks a lot. The story has changed quite a bit from the beginning, even though she herself is still the same character that she was in the beginning, we just a lot of time to see her react to a lot of different situations. 

Overhaul Nora is mostly driven by selfishness, which is not the same as being evil.

The burned skin was more something I always wanted to do. By itself it adds very little to the story, but I wanted to do something like this eventually and this felt like a good opportunity. 

Thanks again! 

@ Aria, the first ball is coming in chapter 6 with some super classy vampire dinner and everything that belongs to it... There will be someone you know or at least appeared on the Child of Darkness :), not sure if you know this person personally ;).

1 hour ago, Lynx2k10 said:

? welldone!

 

Thank you

20 minutes ago, BoLtStEr2002 said:

Completely agree with Tex, except Tex said it far better than I could. And your Nora isn't a high functioning psychopath. In fact she's a beautiful gem. Just don't let her get too close.

 

Shea: High functioning psychopath? Is that what I seem like?   {Insecurities intensify}

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it :).

Less sex makes it more meaningfull when it happens. Very good chapter ! I wish I had more time to release stuff that fast.

59 minutes ago, Alter Native said:

Thank you Crw. I think she does give a damn about Eric, as seen in the last part of this entry, this was difficult for her and not just some random floor cleaning .

Thanks, I like the last screenshots as well, the two vampires introduced in this entry are here to stay, they are going to be Nora's employees from now on. 

Thank you very much .

Damn. I apologize.
This was the first and last time I used Google translator to check myself -_-

 I felt that something was wrong.

But I hope you get my meaning ^_^ It's clear that she loves him and cares about him. And you showed it in a good way

Terrific entry, Alter! Don't you dare call your writing crappy again! You construct some of the best dialogue on here, it guides your story along excellently with the photos. Also, I agree with what Cema says above. Less sex means it is more meaningful when it happens.

I gotta say too, Nora earned a lot of my respect in this part as well. Her decision on how to handle the thralls and the respect she gave to Eric's ashes were great touches. I'm very much looking forward to see how she develops with the new responsibilities and duties. Keep it up!

Very nice Alter Native! i must admit i like both the sex filled scenes and the more story based parts you have me hooked until you stop posting these

3 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Thanks a lot Tex and I really mean it. I'm not sure why all of a sudden I earn so much praise, but thanks a lot. The story has changed quite a bit from the beginning, even though she herself is still the same character that she was in the beginning, we just a lot of time to see her react to a lot of different situations. 

Overhaul Nora is mostly driven by selfishness, which is not the same as being evil.

Well this entry was way more emotional and well  done screenshots, the ones with the ashes and the way Nora handled it was very impressive. 

3 hours ago, Alter Native said:

The burned skin was more something I always wanted to do. By itself it adds very little to the story, but I wanted to do something like this eventually and this felt like a good opportunity. 

Thanks again! 

It paid off well, did u make the skin? Download t? I could use something like that too

3 hours ago, Alter Native said:

@ Aria, the first ball is coming in chapter 6 with some super classy vampire dinner and everything that belongs to it... There will be someone you know or at least appeared on the Child of Darkness :), not sure if you know this person personally ;).

Aria: Someone I know? Hmm, what Vampires do I know other then Sahe, Mileena and Nora. Hmm, wait... cant I come? I'm like you know the Daughter of Molag Bal, dont you Vampires like worship him, maybe worship me haha I kid, just thougt it was funny.

3 hours ago, Cema said:

Less sex makes it more meaningfull when it happens. Very good chapter ! I wish I had more time to release stuff that fast.

Thanks, and your definitely right. Typically I have weeks were I work quite a lot on these stories and really large breaks in between these, so in some way most of this is preproduced month in advance and later consistent released.

3 hours ago, Crw said:

Damn. I apologize.
This was the first and last time I used Google translator to check myself -_-

 I felt that something was wrong.

But I hope you get my meaning ^_^ It's clear that she loves him and cares about him. And you showed it in a good way

 

I was already assuming you meant the opposite  .

3 hours ago, Collygon said:

Terrific entry, Alter! Don't you dare call your writing crappy again! You construct some of the best dialogue on here, it guides your story along excellently with the photos. Also, I agree with what Cema says above. Less sex means it is more meaningful when it happens.

 

I gotta say too, Nora earned a lot of my respect in this part as well. Her decision on how to handle the thralls and the respect she gave to Eric's ashes were great touches. I'm very much looking forward to see how she develops with the new responsibilities and duties. Keep it up!

Thank you very much! My writing has improved quite a bit compared to the first dialogues of chapter 1, but still it's not as good as I want it to be.

The Thrall discussion was loosely based on some notes you could find in the Blood and Wine DLC for the Witcher 3. There is some old vampire castle / dungeon where Geralt could find some lore notes, which discussed the advantages of different forms of imprisonments.

2 hours ago, xGHoSTx said:

Very nice Alter Native! i must admit i like both the sex filled scenes and the more story based parts you have me hooked until you stop posting these

Since Chapter 5 I try to find a good balance between sex and story. Increasing the entry length helped quite a bit. 

24 minutes ago, Agent Tex said:

Well this entry was way more emotional and well  done screenshots, the ones with the ashes and the way Nora handled it was very impressive. 

It paid off well, did u make the skin? Download t? I could use something like that too

I can't really remember I think the diffuse map was based on the vanilla Astrid skin and I reused the vanilla Astrid normalmap and Specular map, thus it looks really low res. I can send this to you if you are interested, just PM me.

57 minutes ago, Alter Native said:

I can't really remember I think the diffuse map was based on the vanilla Astrid skin and I reused the vanilla Astrid normalmap and Specular map, thus it looks really low res. I can send this to you if you are interested, just PM me.

Fun fact you can get that skin . armour by console commands though I am yet to work out how. I could be useful for something I need down the road though

I'm gonna have to agree with everyone else here, you did great. ?

It's normal for authors to think they did a crappy job when they stray from the norm of their content when comparing the statistics with worry about the viewer's interest of their work. And set a low bar so they won't be too disappointed but they end up doing better than expected.    

5 hours ago, Jayomms said:

I'm gonna have to agree with everyone else here, you did great. ?

 

It's normal for authors to think they did a crappy job when they stray from the norm of their content when comparing the statistics with worry about the viewer's interest of their work. And set a low bar so they won't be too disappointed but they end up doing better than expected.    

Thank you. What I was mostly trying to say is that I think of my screenshots higher than of my writing, as I don't really enjoy the latter.

Does Nora have something like a out-of-body sight/vision power? When she closes her eyes, the scene changes, and Nora has a reactive expression.
If so, what are the limitations of this ability?

This is the Nora I remember well - the one you know not whether to love or hate! ?

As the others said, I don't see why you'd blame your writing. Sure, pure story entries do get less likes, but the writing was excellent. I liked how she took the reins of the barony's management, the scene of the bowing was great, not to mention the fate of the orc murderer. So I'd added the 20th like, to make sure your victory over my tiny entries was official.

Malicia : «

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Don't worry, Nora ! I too have skin problems when getting up, yes ! All you need is a good bath and a bit of make-up you see ? Or a bit more, depends... »

18 hours ago, Alter Native said:

20 hours ago, Agent Tex said:

Ok this was one of the most epic tales I have ever had the pleasure of reading here on LL, not is it just full of amazing sex scenes but the characters ,the lore it all works so well and that only boosts the effectiveness of your story telling.

 

Nora has come so far since Chapter 1, and now I feel like she is a very interesting character compared to how she used to be, you did a great way of showing her mature (I guess, shes a Vampire so she doesn't age of course) Now I see her as a necessary Evil (Sorta) Shes someone who plays both sides of the law, but isnt say a evil person at heart just a Vampire trying to make it in the Vampirc Word.

Thanks a lot Tex and I really mean it. I'm not sure why all of a sudden I earn so much praise, but thanks a lot. The story has changed quite a bit from the beginning, even though she herself is still the same character that she was in the beginning, we just a lot of time to see her react to a lot of different situations. 

Overhaul Nora is mostly driven by selfishness, which is not the same as being evil.

What makes that praise is that since chapter 5 you've improved your storytelling quite a lot. There is action, drama, different places. You made the effort to refrain from doing what you were comfortable with, and thus gradually improved.

18 hours ago, Cema said:

Less sex makes it more meaningfull when it happens. Very good chapter ! I wish I had more time to release stuff that fast.

I agree. Constant sex makes it lose value. Whereas, well brought one... Only makes it more meaningful, at least as reader.

4 hours ago, Rattlesnark said:

Does Nora have something like a out-of-body sight/vision power? When she closes her eyes, the scene changes, and Nora has a reactive expression.
If so, what are the limitations of this ability?

This is the Nora I remember well - the one you know not whether to love or hate! ?

She does not see the scene, I was trying to show that she is listening to what is going on. Very typical for vampires she has sharpened senses, especially an increased sense of hearing. I'm not sure if there was a better way of showing this, without any kind of "thought bubbles" that make it super obvious.

Thus she had her eyes closed and was slowly turning her head. We the viewer of course see the whole scene that she can only hear.

3 hours ago, Tirloque said:

As the others said, I don't see why you'd blame your writing. Sure, pure story entries do get less likes, but the writing was excellent. I liked how she took the reins of the barony's management, the scene of the bowing was great, not to mention the fate of the orc murderer. So I'd added the 20th like, to make sure your victory over my tiny entries was official.

 

Malicia : «

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Don't worry, Nora ! I too have skin problems when getting up, yes ! All you need is a good bath and a bit of make-up you see ? Or a bit more, depends... »

What makes that praise is that since chapter 5 you've improved your storytelling quite a lot. There is action, drama, different places. You made the effort to refrain from doing what you were comfortable with, and thus gradually improved.

I agree. Constant sex makes it lose value. Whereas, well brought one... Only makes it more meaningful, at least as reader.

I think most of the improvements came from the different setup of chapter 5. As said in another entry before, there was just so much stuff that I wanted to do in chapter 4 that wasn't good in a story, but were imo cool scenes, such as the vampire party or the Nora Queen scene. 

Thanks for your comment Tirloque.

I know I repeat myself, but I just don't know what else to say!  Awsome chapter, as always and you really get the image of Nora to the reader that she has a lot of self control while in public.  

18 hours ago, bodabira 01 said:

I know I repeat myself, but I just don't know what else to say!  Awsome chapter, as always and you really get the image of Nora to the reader that she has a lot of self control while in public.  

Thanks and I'm still undecided whether the last sentence is ironic or not... 

6 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Thanks and I'm still undecided whether the last sentence is ironic or not... 

No, it's not. I should have written it more clearly: I think she has a lot of self control regarding Eric.