Great Chapter and funny... I just one problem.... Seeing my sister's name over and over again during sex scene. I pretty much felt like Thomas during that scene getting my face burned. 

> love the episode. Have one question thou. Does male vampires in your story always feed on opposite sex? it is interesting that female vampires feed on both sexes, but male vampires, doesn't. (Or I missed that part).  

> Thanks for very nice lesbian scenes. Enjoyed.

This was delicious. Beautiful and brutal in equal measure.

I see Thomas continues to love living dangerous. I mean, he outright stated, that the "official" truth is never true. And well within earshot of that black-clad vampire lying on the ground, leeching blood off of the thrall in the white dress. Not sure if that was a smart move on his part, regardless of how accurate his assessment may be. And even more so considering, that he is not excactly the queens favorite agent at the moment.

Next: Isabella and Diana deserve some sort of acting award. Their little theatre-play of "generous, forgiving queen and mean, bloodthirsty duchess" was quite a spectacle. I take it, that was the "unofficial" part of the queen's punishment for Thomas, the part, that was done off-the-books.

I like the subtle (?) threat conveyed in this screenshot. Isabella's clawed hand makes it look like she means "Be nice or I smack you." And a smack from her could likely break bones if not worse.

Also: Who is/was Kolfinna?! Teasing your readers like that isn't very nice of you Alter. ?

And lastly: Why did the queen and the duchess get a nosebleed  towards the end? Was that supposed to be the fault of the sunlight or was there something else going on? It seemed abit odd, since it only appeared on both of them after the queen started talking to Thomas. And the queen expicitly stated, that Thomas should be taken out of the sun before she went over to him.

Overall, a big thumbs-up from me.?

10 hours ago, Jay-Omms said:

Great Chapter and funny... I just one problem.... Seeing my sister's name over and over again during sex scene. I pretty much felt like Thomas during that scene getting my face burned. 

 

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AAAAAAAAH!!! MAKE IT STOP!!!

 

Thanks!

5 hours ago, Evaloves4 said:

> love the episode. Have one question thou. Does male vampires in your story always feed on opposite sex? it is interesting that female vampires feed on both sexes, but male vampires, doesn't. (Or I missed that part).  

> Thanks for very nice lesbian scenes. Enjoyed.

They both do, it's just much harder to show male-male action when you have a female protagonist (Also it's not the type of content people are interested in). But generally speaking there is no difference between genders in this story and gay sex+feeding is something they do both.

Thanks, glad you liked it.

3 hours ago, HM1919 said:

This was delicious. Beautiful and brutal in equal measure.

I see Thomas continues to love living dangerous. I mean, he outright stated, that the "official" truth is never true. And well within earshot of that black-clad vampire lying on the ground, leeching blood off of the thrall in the white dress. Not sure if that was a smart move on his part, regardless of how accurate his assessment may be. And even more so considering, that he is not excactly the queens favorite agent at the moment.

 

Next: Isabella and Diana deserve some sort of acting award. Their little theatre-play of "generous, forgiving queen and mean, bloodthirsty duchess" was quite a spectacle. I take it, that was the "unofficial" part of the queen's punishment for Thomas, the part, that was done off-the-books.

Thank you! Diana is responsible for enforcing the laws of the realm and she's indeed of the opinion Thomas got off to easy, whereas Isabella has a much more pragmatic approach. This scene between them was not planned.

3 hours ago, HM1919 said:

I like the subtle (?) threat conveyed in this screenshot. Isabella's clawed hand makes it look like she means "Be nice or I smack you." And a smack from her could likely break bones if not worse.

They are good friends (and roughly equally strong), so an open fight is unlikely, but Isabella is the boss in that relationship.

3 hours ago, HM1919 said:

Also: Who is/was Kolfinna?! Teasing your readers like that isn't very nice of you Alter. ?

Don't know him either, don't think they ever come up again. ?

3 hours ago, HM1919 said:

And lastly: Why did the queen and the duchess get a nosebleed  towards the end? Was that supposed to be the fault of the sunlight or was there something else going on? It seemed abit odd, since it only appeared on both of them after the queen started talking to Thomas. And the queen expicitly stated, that Thomas should be taken out of the sun before she went over to him.

The nosebleed comes when they start to become exposed to indirect sunlight. It could kill them eventually if the duration and intensity is high enough, but the first small sign is the nosebleed. (Thomas had it as well) It's also shown in the end of chapter 7 with Nora.

3 hours ago, HM1919 said:

Overall, a big thumbs-up from me.?

 

Thank you!

> Thanks for explanation @Alter Native. I didn't know it was the technical reason why male on male feeding isn't showed. indeed, most of male population prefer to see female o  female, than male on male (feeding).

2 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Diana is responsible for enforcing the laws of the realm and she's indeed of the opinion Thomas got off to easy, whereas Isabella has a much more pragmatic approach. This scene between them was not planned.

Then I suppose, I was too suspicious here. Because I figured, that Isabella was using Diana here to give Thomas a proper dressing down, while still retaining as much of his loyalty as possible. But perhaps such games are not needed with someone as devoted as Thomas.

And thanks for clearing up the nose-bleed question as well.

Good chapter. I'm in awe at how you manage to twist some sex scenes into psychological torture moments, it really infuses them both with suspense and story content. And this time it's Thomas who gets to nearly burn at the stake while his masters are donning into sapphism. And isn't even Nora's fault. ^^

On the more visual aspect, I appreciated how the countess mirrors the woman in the painting, and how the lighting emphasized the lesbian scene.  There were a bit more grammatical mistakes than the usual though, nothing dramatic but don't neglect your proof reading, as those break the immersion for a bit.

Thanks for sharing your continued excellent work anyway ! ?

On 5/1/2022 at 10:02 AM, Alter Native said:

The nosebleed comes when they start to become exposed to indirect sunlight. It could kill them eventually if the duration and intensity is high enough, but the first small sign is the nosebleed. (Thomas had it as well) It's also shown in the end of chapter 7 with Nora.

It was unclear before the countess had a nosebleed as well, as the queen felt somehow protected from sunlight by the panels.  Thanks to HM1919 for bringing that up, and you for clearing it.

« I very don't know what to say, uh. I've warned everyone about Chlamydia and pee-pee kissing, but they keep doing it.

               No wonder they've got nosebleeds and skin problems. That's what you get for not listening expert advice.  »

Well, that suerly was a great entry! Really sensual! And the outfits are just amazing!  Great work Alter Native! 

Although I did not fully understand why Thomas came into the light, was it his impulse to prove that he did not really value his life?
 

23 hours ago, Tirloque said:

« I very don't know what to say, uh. I've warned everyone about Chlamydia and pee-pee kissing, but they keep doing it.

               No wonder they've got nosebleeds and skin problems. That's what you get for not listening expert advice.  »

Here, take this, I believe it's going to improve your persuasion skills in this regard. ^_^ 
 

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I would add her name too: Dr. Malicious Malicija as my prince called her ?

On 5/3/2022 at 9:46 AM, Tirloque said:

« I very don't know what to say, uh. I've warned everyone about Chlamydia and pee-pee kissing, but they keep doing it.

               No wonder they've got nosebleeds and skin problems. That's what you get for not listening expert advice.  »

 

 

> I don't know why are you so against pee-pee kissing? If it would be bad or wrong than 99% of human population wouldn't do it. Even animals are doing it, Malicija

12 hours ago, Crw said:

Although I did not fully understand why Thomas came into the light, was it his impulse to prove that he did not really value his life?

I'd say it was out of respect for the intimacy of his superiors, as they were clearly going to have intercourse.

12 hours ago, Crw said:

 

Here, take this, I believe it's going to improve your persuasion skills in this regard. ^_^ 
 

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Most excellent ! I must admit that Malicia indeed seems quite concerned by medical topics. ^^

« I'm very not a doctor, more like a pharmacist, 'cause of alchemy you see ?

                 Though it could be a very good idea to dress as a nurse, yes. »

10 hours ago, Evaloves4 said:

 

> I don't know why are you so against pee-pee kissing? If it would be bad or wrong than 99% of human population wouldn't do it. Even animals are doing it, Malicija

 

« I'm very not sure 99% of the people do it, because otherwise, that means that even old grandmas did it you see ?

                Plus, people can get very dangerous illnesses when doing it. Specially if it's two gals who do the kissing.

                 Like  here  ┐

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                 That's why my expert advice is to avoid pee-pee kissing another gal, yes.   »

On 5/3/2022 at 9:46 AM, Tirloque said:

Good chapter. I'm in awe at how you manage to twist some sex scenes into psychological torture moments, it really infuses them both with suspense and story content. And this time it's Thomas who gets to nearly burn at the stake while his masters are donning into sapphism. And isn't even Nora's fault. ^^

Thank you very much!

On 5/3/2022 at 9:46 AM, Tirloque said:

On the more visual aspect, I appreciated how the countess mirrors the woman in the painting, and how the lighting emphasized the lesbian scene.

 

Thanks, this is just a coincidence, only the queen's painting is placed there intentionally. 

On 5/3/2022 at 9:46 AM, Tirloque said:

  There were a bit more grammatical mistakes than the usual though, nothing dramatic but don't neglect your proof reading, as those break the immersion for a bit.

Thanks for sharing your continued excellent work anyway ! ?

 

It was unclear before the countess had a nosebleed as well, as the queen felt somehow protected from sunlight by the panels.  Thanks to HM1919 for bringing that up, and you for clearing it.

They both get it, just a different times, so I think it's consistent with the rest of my world.

On 5/4/2022 at 9:18 AM, Crw said:

Well, that suerly was a great entry! Really sensual! And the outfits are just amazing!  Great work Alter Native! 

Thanks!

On 5/4/2022 at 9:18 AM, Crw said:

Although I did not fully understand why Thomas came into the light, was it his impulse to prove that he did not really value his life?

He was told to stand by the window intentionally and he was in no position in this conversation to just turn around and argue his case.  

Ah, finally!

Coffee  - check

Snacks - check

Actual time to properly enjoy Nora's (or in this case Thomas's) adventures - check ! ?

(Sorry it takes me forever to leave a comment these days. Real life responsibilities take way too much time ?)

You know, Alter, some of your screenshots really can be used as paintings! They are just so regal and so atmospheric.  And of course the locations that you've created for your story are simply top notch!

All the aesthetic beauty aside - poor Thomas is not having a good time at Isabelle's ?. I love how you showed a sort of subtle (or maybe not so subtle) punishment for him from Isa. I'm sure she knew well enough that he wouldn't disobey her and would stand by the window even as he was suffering from sunlight.  All the while she's having fun with Diana. The whole scene is interesting because it shows a sort of power-play between the Queen and her subjects.  No matter how capable Thomas might be, he's not even remotely a match to her, not in strength nor influence.

By the way, I am curious about something. Isabelle and Diana started showing signs of discomfort from the sunlight (nosebleed) much later than Thomas. Was it because they were partially in the shade or is it an indication that the older and the more powerful the vampire is the more light they can withstand?

And of course the sex scene was very sensual and captivating.  Great job on the beautiful screenshots!

As always, thank you for sharing your wonderful work with us. ?