Wooow! This episode is AWESOME!!! Very scary and dark. Can you imagine how much scarier it would be if followed by music?! The real fucking horror movie. 

Aria: Wow... very fucking wow.... that was so epic. No need for words just pure revenge.Nora is making her way up the list of most evil Vampires ever ha ha. I cant wait till she digs her fangs in me xD

 

Great work I love this and that bonus shot wow

 

Care to share how you did all of this so well?

Excellent!!!

Well Nora is quite Brutal in the recent sections  

 

Great work .

nice work alter native! looking forward to chapter 4 and 5!

Well done! The ambience in this section was phenomenal; the shots really displayed the dark atmosphere your story holds. I look forward to the next chapters!

that was crazy Nice work

Wooow! This episode is AWESOME!!! Very scary and dark. Can you imagine how much scarier it would be if followed by music?! The real fucking horror movie. 

 

Thanks. Indeed, some music would be great.

 

Aria: Wow... very fucking wow.... that was so epic. No need for words just pure revenge.Nora is making her way up the list of most evil Vampires ever ha ha. I cant wait till she digs her fangs in me xD

 

Great work I love this and that bonus shot wow

 

Care to share how you did all of this so well?

 

Thank you Tex.

Not sure if it was that well done, I mean the blood effects are really lackluster, but I like the ambiance and the location, which was custom build.

 

Excellent!!!

 

Thank you!

 

Well Nora is quite Brutal in the recent sections

 

Great work .

 

Thanks, yeah she was. As explained in the last part there will be a lot less gore in the next chapter, except for that one time...

 

nice work alter native! looking forward to chapter 4 and 5!

 

Thank you!

 

Well done! The ambience in this section was phenomenal; the shots really displayed the dark atmosphere your story holds. I look forward to the next chapters!

 

Thank you .

 

 

that was crazy Nice work

 

Thanks!

I'd *just* realised how much of custom posing work goes into your content. Gruesomely intense chapter, love it! The shots were dim, but set the tone right and not quite taking away too much from visibility of the characters' interactions.

Is that her heart?

I'd *just* realised how much of custom posing work goes into your content. Gruesomely intense chapter, love it! The shots were dim, but set the tone right and not quite taking away too much from visibility of the characters' interactions.

 

Is that her heart?

 

Thanks, I don't use any custom poses, these are all Halo's poses.

Yes, that's supposed to be her heart.

Will it surprise you if I say I've found it a bit too silent ? It makes it sometimes unnecessarily confusing. I'm thinking most particularly at two screens :

— one where there is a sort of blob of blood hanging upwards from a sort of cup : I was wondering in what direction it was flowing, if it was some sort of massive sucking or at the contrary some initiation ritual. Re-reading it I now think it was Nora's soiled hand, but then her hand seems clean the screen afterwards...

— another where she's showing a heart to the thrall, and the thrall stares at it for two screens long before lowering her head. Given the thrall wasn't instantly dead I wondered as well whose heart was it, until she said to Vasil she killed her (making me assume it was the thrall's).

 

I know you don't like intruding the image, and not using onomatopoeia is after all purely a matter of choice. But if you skip even the dialogs/narratives it gets confusing, even more with low luminosity screens : the readers thinks « what is this ? » which stops the story flow (which already isn't good but not critical), then thinks « Did I missed something » and scrolls backs into the story (which is a failure in terms of storytelling) searching for hints. :/

 

Now for the good sides : it's always « Of Blood and pleasure », always dark, always realistically cruel, always providing careful aesthetics (lightning games at the beginning of this episode were particularly good) and making you wonder what's gonna happen next. So I'll endorse anyway, even muted it's still among the worthiest series out there.

 

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Thanks, I don't use any custom poses, these are all Halo's poses.

 

Whoops! They fit so well with the theme and delivery, I'd thought they must've been custom tailored. In that case I'll commend how well you've made use of them

Will it surprise you if I say I've found it a bit too silent ? It makes it sometimes unnecessarily confusing. I'm thinking most particularly at two screens :

 

I was already expecting a commend like this

— one where there is a sort of blob of blood hanging upwards from a sort of cup : I was wondering in what direction it was flowing, if it was some sort of massive sucking or at the contrary some initiation ritual. Re-reading it I now think it was Nora's soiled hand, but then her hand seems clean the screen afterwards...

 

I'm really sure what you are referring to, in the middle of the first spoiler Nora scratches the girls back and her hand is still clean and at one point her right hand gets bloody but it's consistently bloody afterwards.

— another where she's showing a heart to the thrall, and the thrall stares at it for two screens long before lowering her head. Given the thrall wasn't instantly dead I wondered as well whose heart was it, until she said to Vasil she killed her (making me assume it was the thrall's).

 

I noticed that when I put together the screenshots for the section. I wanted to shoot another screenshots that shows how she gets the heart which is quite heart to do without just having it look like the scratch part. So eventually I decided against redoing this part with additional screenshots and though it'd be fine .

I know you don't like intruding the image, and not using onomatopoeia is after all purely a matter of choice. But if you skip even the dialogs/narratives it gets confusing, even more with low luminosity screens : the readers thinks « what is this ? » which stops the story flow (which already isn't good but not critical), then thinks « Did I missed something » and scrolls backs into the story (which is a failure in terms of storytelling) searching for hints. :/

 

The problem was that most of the screenshots where to close up showing the deatails without being to clear about the position of the actors in the room and clearly showing what exactly is going on. The scene can work the way I wanted it to work from a stylistic point of view but the screenshooting itself was done poorly. And yes you're right I could have saved the screen without redoing it by using onomatopoeia.

 

Now for the good sides : it's always « Of Blood and pleasure », always dark, always realistically cruel, always providing careful aesthetics (lightning games at the beginning of this episode were particularly good) and making you wonder what's gonna happen next. So I'll endorse anyway, even muted it's still among the worthiest series out there.

Thank you

I'm really sure what you are referring to, in the middle of the first spoiler Nora scratches the girls back and her hand is still clean and at one point her right hand gets bloody but it's consistently bloody afterwards.

It's that one.

 

 

Looking at it carefully, it seems to me that Nora was sucking her own soiled hand previously, but then she approaches her hand to the woman's mouth and I couldn't figure out if she was making her taste her own blood or getting some more blood for some kind of mouth bleeding.

 

The problem was that most of the screenshots where to close up showing the deatails without being to clear about the position of the actors in the room and clearly showing what exactly is going on. The scene can work the way I wanted it to work from a stylistic point of view but the screenshooting itself was done poorly. And yes you're right I could have saved the screen without redoing it by using onomatopoeia.

Well, I think that it must have been a combination of very dark/contrasted scenes and a lot of close-ups indeed. Maybe panning out before doing the close-ups could have helped indeed. If reducing text to its minimum is the bet, then let's see how far you can refine your way of doing things.

 

Thank you

Thank YOU for your work, and for considering my comments. As they contain some criticism I wasn't so sure how you would take them, I'm glad you did it the right way.