god I love reading these~

Most excellent

Wow Nice...

This chapter also reminded me of....

Wow  

One of your most impressive stories. Really well done. 

I love how we finally get some insight on how the different versions of Jenny are connected to build a larger story. Also I'm glad to see the order again, I was hoping there would be more of this again once she is back in her world, but I assume the story won't return to that, right?

Also really great job with the scene building of the different locations during the different times.

Ohhhh damn, Drunna! This is amazing entry! I really love the way you mix all the Jenna variations and all this multiverse theme that your setting allows for! 

And that final location, and Jenna (Angel?) standing tall, just looks super-sexy and fantastic! I always got this heavy metal\old dark fantasy vibes from your entries, like those

Great work! 

23 hours ago, JessTheNerd said:

god I love reading these~

HEy Thanks SoOOOO Much!
Its awesome to hear new commenters!!!! IT helps so much getting through the story writing ruts and walls I often hit!

23 hours ago, EvalovesEP said:

Most excellent

Thank you!

On 6/8/2021 at 12:10 AM, Jay-Omms said:

Wow Nice...

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Is Jenna the Scarlet Witch or God Angel?

 

This chapter also reminded me of....

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LOL!
Im trying to remember what inspired me to do alternate dimensions with this story, but it was setup way before the start of Book 2. The voices in the end of Book 1 were also part of Jenny’s different lives.

  but yeah, I have watched quite a bit of multiverse stuff from various documentaries in past

19 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Wow  

One of your most impressive stories. Really well done. 

I love how we finally get some insight on how the different versions of Jenny are connected to build a larger story. Also I'm glad to see the order again, I was hoping there would be more of this again once she is back in her world, but I assume the story won't return to that, right?

Also really great job with the scene building of the different locations during the different times.

Thanks so much!

This part of the story was one of my favorite and anticipated parts to write and shoot!

The room Jenna was hooked up to was custom built and I am so proud and happy how it looked with the right lighting (by accident)

I admit, the  scifi one i think couldve looked a bit more scifi.

On 6/8/2021 at 8:58 AM, Crw said:

Ohhhh damn, Drunna! This is amazing entry! I really love the way you mix all the Jenna variations and all this multiverse theme that your setting allows for!

On 6/8/2021 at 4:07 AM, Alter Native said:

Wow  

One of your most impressive stories. Really well done. 

I love how we finally get some insight on how the different versions of Jenny are connected to build a larger story

Thanks so much! This was exciting to write as I was able to start pulling the many different threads throughout Book 2 towards each other, revealing her existence in multiple dimensions

That's why when many of you were thrown off by the modern school setting in a medieval focused world, I got really excited as it was supposed to be a WTH moment that I was hoping would show something was extra abnormal with Jenna.

This may also be the reason why @Crw I had a hard time expanding that Train Groping/Sex Scene in Part 1 as my mind was too focused on Parts 2 and 3

19 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Wow  

Also I'm glad to see the order again, I was hoping there would be more of this again once she is back in her world, but I assume the story won't return to that, right?

 

It was a big part of Jenny's life so there will be a few times where parts of that world show up through the story.
I also have a few more "Tales of the Initiates" storyline drafts  that are decently fleshed out that I can continue from those. Also debating about renaming it "Tales from the Clit" as suggested by @WANOBI12

10 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

HEy Thanks SoOOOO Much!
Its awesome to hear new commenters!!!! IT helps so much getting through the story writing ruts and walls I often hit!

Ive been reading for almost a year or so now finally got the courage to comment~ cx

On 6/8/2021 at 12:10 AM, Jay-Omms said:

Wow Nice...

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Is Jenna the Scarlet Witch or God Angel?

 

This chapter also reminded me of....

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 Just watched Loki show....so Jenna is probably an agent for the TVA ?

Damn, what the heck??? Okay, NOW I have to really give credits to your world building. This is just staggering. I got serious chills from reading this. Freaking well done! Well done!

So we finally get the keys to the mystery of Jenna having memories such different worlds/lives during her encounter with the darkness. It explains a lots of things, and feels just as satisfying to read than clenching a key into car. Though in a way more sensual pattern of course, that intertwining of sex and story being a nice idea. Great work with the screens and custom setup, there are so many custom things that it's becoming hard to tell which one are imported, tuned or used as is. The colors  and crispiness of the images are also excellent, making it a spectacle for the eyes ; not even mentioning the effects (the "toys", the electrical power, etc.) and the different ambiances (wonder where the last one with the wood crosses are ?). Scenario wise, the eyes change is different from the previous one, so it might lead somewhere different as well. Some minor proofreading mistakes though (one caption box is empty), but that doesn't change it's an excellent entry. ?

« Looks like she went honey-honey with lots of people in her different lives, uh.

               Maybe she's someone's grandma without even knowing it.  »

On 6/9/2021 at 5:40 PM, Collygon said:

Damn, what the heck??? Okay, NOW I have to really give credits to your world building. This is just staggering. I got serious chills from reading this. Freaking well done! Well done!

 Hey thanks so much! It did take a while for me to narrow the lore so that the world building would make sense and at the same not set myself up into plot hole corner

On 6/15/2021 at 3:42 AM, Tirloque said:

So we finally get the keys to the mystery of Jenna having memories such different worlds/lives during her encounter with the darkness. It explains a lots of things, and feels just as satisfying to read than clenching a key into car. Though in a way more sensual pattern of course, that intertwining of sex and story being a nice idea.

 

thanks so much!

When you mentioned back around chapter 11 about the modern school being out of place, that scene and the modern apartment scenes were intentionally added to be jarring

On 6/15/2021 at 3:42 AM, Tirloque said:

.....Great work with the screens and custom setup, there are so many custom things that it's becoming hard to tell which one are imported, tuned or used as is. The colors  and crispiness of the images are also excellent, making it a spectacle for the eyes ; not even mentioning the effects (the "toys", the electrical power, etc.) and the different ambiances (wonder where the last one with the wood crosses are ?)

 

Thanks so much! There were concerns I had where I was worried characters would be lost to the background (especially in the holo pad scenes). 
 

The Hellscape with the floating crosses was from a very old mod called “Shards of Oblivion” which I had well before the idea if the Dark Ascension story even came about.  I get story inspirations from a location’s atmosphere and setting and “Shards of Oblivion” and “Darkend” were the two that originally inspired the initial framework for Jenna’s journey in the  Dark Ascension comic. 
 

On 6/15/2021 at 3:42 AM, Tirloque said:

....Scenario wise, the eyes change is different from the previous one, so it might lead somewhere different as well.

 Yep...????

On 6/9/2021 at 5:40 PM, Collygon said:

Damn, what the heck??? Okay, NOW I have to really give credits to your world building. This is just staggering. I got serious chills from reading this. Freaking well done! Well done!

thanks! 
While the previous part used established stuff (though modified) from AHO, many of the stuff esp the flashbacks were created from scratch. It’s great to hear comments of appreciation as it makes the work more satisfying! 

Good ol' Dwemer pipes, what can't they do!?

The lightning effect on the probes looks great and were the holographic floating computer screens shopped in or done in game? They look really good too.

That ending bit was quite cinematic and the final shot is fantastic with the framing and everything. Really setting up an epic battle from the looks of things!

If I had one criticism it would be that the modern day/ school scene dialogue felt a little bit cheesy in an 80s porno kind of way . Still all the effects and custom stuff more than make up for it, good job!

Thanks Spy. This may be one of my favorite chapters in regards to the world building as the ending scene of some pre-ancient plane was a fun place to screenshot. But the Dwemer conduit Jenna was strapped in was one of my favorite things I created from scratch and it turned out beyond better than expected!