This chapter looks even more amazing than the previous one. It seems like if you used Ravenrock as a base, but with custom retextured assets and added lights and dwemer objects. Add to that the screens holograph, the outfit/weapons, and most of the customized dunmer, and this indeed looks like a convincing steampunk universe. Storywise you did very well not only in the discovery aspect, but also playing over the two lonely women exploring the unknown land, at the mercy of ill-minded foreigners. The twist of the guard captain having a change of heart was nice from that point of view, but I don't think our raptor (who looks more like an classic dunmer) will show the same mercy. And all of that with an impeccable posing/screenshooting, nice facial expressions, and immersive colors. The dialogues were also nicely written, with a rich and immersive vocabulary. Not to mention the adapted comic layout. Great work !

Malicia : « Following strangers into dark places... Jenna and Gabrielle are very nice, but they're not very smart, no. They very need to call the police now.  »

Well that was interesting, city itself and the whole tech stuffs looks amazing, feels really alien and quite high tech like another world.

Now events played out interesting at the guards, I expected things go sexual, as literally everything toward them, so them being ended up that way and treated that like that wasn't too suprising.

So the last pics wasn't too suprising.

Seems you kind of reduced the cast number to quite small, that was a good decision, cause honestly that entire order and lot of girls was hard to remember who was they etc...

2 main protag is easier to handle for you and the audience.

I personally sad the horror and the creepy elements are not a thing anymore, sure new themes and subjects are nice..

Overall great work ?

6 hours ago, Tirloque said:

This chapter looks even more amazing than the previous one. It seems like if you used Ravenrock as a base, but with custom retextured assets and added lights and dwemer objects. Add to that the screens holograph, the outfit/weapons, and most of the customized dunmer, and this indeed looks like a convincing steampunk universe.

I think all of this is custom built. At least drunna mentioned building that world from scratch, and it looks pretty damn impressive.

Great job with the world and also the story of the two girls. I actually enjoy having only two protagonists to focus on compared to your previous cast of at least half a dozen. Even though the story (and screenshots ) were very enjoyable some of the characters felt a bit generic and exchangeable. Having only two right now feels much better to me and you have more space to focus on the details of each of them. 

Really hope we see more of Korinth and the new world you created. 

Wow Look at the colors!  I'm finally caught up in your story. Wow I can't believe I missed this stuff! I could of swore I was following your blog. I was wondering why I wasn't getting any notifications. Turns out you weren't the only one I wasn't getting any notifications from so I had to go through everything and find out what I missed.  Great Yob by the way. 

Those sentry guns on the gate were impressive, very nicely done. hmm  Speaking of guns, that shot of the Regent looking down Jenna's top was pretty impressive as well   also very well done shot.  Looking forward to more.

R.

I need to re-read this story from the start. I forgot most of it ^^

Holy cow, thank you so much for the comments everyone! I was expecting so many responses within a day of me posting the chapter. Also thank you for the patience as the chapter was finally finished almost 3 months since the last chapter. In addition to creating an entire new world(space) and creating new textures, I had two or three major scenes that  were shot and put into a comic layout draft, but then had to drop the scenes as they didn’t work well with the pacing and/or character development. 

I am so glad the chapter worked well for you guys for my fear was the pacing and flow of the story was going to be disjointed especially as the “Regent” scene and “Alleyway” scene were very late addition ideas to this chapter.

I have a feeling these guys are about to have an eye opening experience...and not in the way they're expecting!

On 12/19/2019 at 3:12 AM, Tirloque said:

 The twist of the guard captain having a change of heart was nice from that point of view, but I don't think our raptor (who looks more like an classic dunmer) will show the same mercy. And all of that with an impeccable posing/screenshooting, nice facial expressions, and immersive colors. The dialogues were also nicely written, with a rich and immersive vocabulary. Not to mention the adapted comic layout. Great work !

 

Malicia : « Following strangers into dark places... Jenna and Gabrielle are very nice, but they're not very smart, no. They very need to call the police now.  »

On 12/19/2019 at 6:09 AM, Resdayn said:

Now events played out interesting at the guards, I expected things go sexual, as literally everything toward them, so them being ended up that way and treated that like that wasn't too suprising.

 

Overall great work ?

Originally, things were to go sexual with the guards and was a big part of the chapter that I have 2.17GB worth of screenshots just for the sex scenes. Decided to drop it a few weeks ago for reasons. It did result in my fears of releasing a  chapter that had pretty much no sex/nudity but heavy in world building dialogue (Star Wars prequel syndrome)

On 12/19/2019 at 6:09 AM, Resdayn said:

 

 

I personally sad the horror and the creepy elements are not a thing anymore, sure new themes and subjects are nice..

 

Overall great work ?

Remember, they are on a world where outside is littered with gravestones everywhere  

I've been wanting to comment for a few days now but I can't come up with any words other than " Oh My Gods!!!". This does not feel like Skyrim anymore. This is like Cyberpunk Dwemer Edition. ? You managed to show that world as being really alien both to us as readers and to the girls who are stuck there.  (By the way, things are really not looking good for Jenna and Gabrielle ?)

It's nice to know that there are some decent people there, like the guard and Soran the tavern keeper. The girls will need all the help they can get.

One of the guards was hinting that previous civilizations were destroyed due to their own hubris. Will we learn more about it in the story? It sounds very curious. ?

Wonderful and absolutely amazing work! As always, thank you for sharing it with us. ?

thank you for creating more of your fantastic stories and Pictures , Looking Forward for more excitements  ?

On 12/24/2019 at 7:37 PM, Devianna said:

I've been wanting to comment for a few days now but I can't come up with any words other than " Oh My Gods!!!". This does not feel like Skyrim anymore. This is like Cyberpunk Dwemer Edition. ? You managed to show that world as being really alien both to us as readers and to the girls who are stuck there.  (By the way, things are really not looking good for Jenna and Gabrielle ?)

It's nice to know that there are some decent people there, like the guard and Soran the tavern keeper. The girls will need all the help they can get.

One of the guards was hinting that previous civilizations were destroyed due to their own hubris. Will we learn more about it in the story? It sounds very curious. ?

 

Wonderful and absolutely amazing work! As always, thank you for sharing it with us. ?

-I love fantasy games set in more unusual, almost alien like settings but still retaining a fantasy type feel/foundation. That’s why I still prefer Morrowind over Oblivion and Skyrim because of its settings rather than the European medieval cookie cutter looks of most fantasy games.

-in addition to Numenera and Dark Souls as major inspirations, Gothic is another as it focuses on actual racism among races  which to me feels more realistic than Elder Scrolls.

On 12/21/2019 at 11:49 PM, demonryupriest said:

I have a feeling these guys are about to have an eye opening experience...and not in the way they're expecting!

They will get an opening experience, however it may not be their eyes that will be forced open

On 12/19/2019 at 3:12 AM, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « Following strangers into dark places... Jenna and Gabrielle are very nice, but they're not very smart, no....

You could say the same about forming a system of government based on strange women distributing  swords