Great job!

I was a bit surprised you let them go that easily during the first encounter... just because it's not your usual style  but the second scene certainly made up for it. 

I'm curious, how did you do the open shirt scene? Two shots naked and not naked layered on top of each other? 

Looked pretty convincing!

As much as I enjoyed your last entries, I'm also looking forward for them to return back to their home world with some classic knightly order looks (even though the order is no more... ).

That's what I had in mind when I linked you that armor on Discord  .

Looking forward for your next entry!

There was to be a part 3 for this chapter where they do go into the Astral Chamber, but decided to move it to the next chapter as I want to release something. I’m finding that finishing and releasing these chapters are taking much longer. The challenge I’m facing now is maintaining  the momentum and by releasing chapters later is slowing that momentum down

You've really have acquired the use of the comic layout, Drunna. Yours has traditional cells, but with a black frame and more freedom with the bubbles sizes and layout. You also know how to give the right presence to onomatopoeia. About that, just a detail : I'm not sure if the « * » sign you're using a the start of onomatopoeia is inspired from others LL authors, but you don't need to use those when those do accurately reproduce the sound you have in mind. For example « CLUNK ! » sounds close enough to the real sound not to be forced to write a « *CLUNK ». Also, if you don't put another * at the end, it looks like an asterisk. Also careful about repeating the same dialogue over two successive bubbles, it happens more than once and leaves the reader somewhat puzzled.

Now on the technical side, you've got colored and vivid screens, which are even more amazing considering it's from your own worldspace. There are some minor clipping issues, but they don't avert from the essential. Liked how you dramatized the capture, yet allowed your protagonists to escape from their captors at the start. And Gabrielle tells us an intriguing story about Jenna's behavior during the fight. Great photoshopping for the forced undressing scenes btw, it increased significantly the effect of the whole scene. Now the second scene was well driven, and leaves us awaiting from the next step of the adventure !

Anyway, from the layout and story point of view, you're slowly getting close to professional level IMO.

Malicia : « Well if was a very good story, but people inside are very unprofessional ! They only think about boobies, and they honey-honey even though they're a work !

               They should call this place Udders-Wanting Planet, uh !  »

8 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

There was to be a part 3 for this chapter where they do go into the Astral Chamber, but decided to move it to the next chapter as I want to release something. I’m finding that finishing and releasing these chapters are taking much longer. The challenge I’m facing now is maintaining  the momentum and by releasing chapters later is slowing that momentum down

Yeah it just takes a lot of time to create these, I think the chapter length here was perfectly fine tbh. so don't worry too much about it. 
Also you had a lot of custom stuff build, which takes a lot of time as well, maybe if you want to speed up the progress you could revert back to Skyrim somewhat soon and make use of more of the vanilla/regular mods.

WOW! Great Work! ... ?If I remember correctly Afro Skeleton Bob made a tutorial on his blog on how to do edits in photoshop on how to do what you just did with the clothes. Did you learn from that or already knew yourself how to do it? 

1 hour ago, Jayomms said:

WOW! Great Work! ... ?If I remember correctly Afro Skeleton Bob made a tutorial on his blog on how to do edits in photoshop on how to do what you just did with the clothes. Did you learn from that or already knew yourself how to do it? 

Not sure. Been doing photo manips since Photoshop 6  (early 2000?). I’m still using Photoshop 7 for all of the screen edits and ingame retexture work. Videogame screens are soooooo much easier to edit than photos.

16 hours ago, Tirloque said:

.... Also careful about repeating the same dialogue over two successive bubbles, it happens more than once and leaves the reader somewhat puzzled.

 

Yeah, I caught and fixed three panels that had repeated bubbles or bubble/captions that didn’t make sense as they were originally placeholders. 

16 hours ago, Tirloque said:

....You also know how to give the right presence to onomatopoeia....

Also, struggled and took forever to find the right sound effect word to describe slow moving, rusty gears

16 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Liked how you dramatized the capture, yet allowed your protagonists to escape from their captors at the start. And Gabrielle tells us an intriguing story about Jenna's behavior during the fight. Great photoshopping for the forced undressing scenes btw, it increased significantly the effect of the whole scene. Now the second scene was well driven, and leaves us awaiting from the next step of the adventure !

 

Oh good, I was hoping the Jenna’s fight came across in developing some questionable intrigue. Thanks for the comments and tips!

On 2/3/2020 at 10:20 AM, Alter Native said:

Great job!

I was a bit surprised you let them go that easily during the first encounter... just because it's not your usual style  but the second scene certainly made up for it. 

The Scene with them being attacked in the alleyway was not planned and even up to the very last moments before exporting the strip, I still debated with keeping that scene and had them go straight to the observatory. The shots and comic panels were already set and written when they were inside the observatory (before the sex) when I released chapter 2.

On 2/3/2020 at 10:20 AM, Alter Native said:

As much as I enjoyed your last entries, I'm also looking forward for them to return back to their home world with some classic knightly order looks (even though the order is no more... ).

That's what I had in mind when I linked you that armor on Discord  .

Looking forward for your next entry!

I dont want to give away hints as I do have a long gameplan for the Dark Ascension series.  I do plan on using the armor in a future chapter.

On 2/3/2020 at 10:20 AM, Alter Native said:

I'm curious, how did you do the open shirt scene? Two shots naked and not naked layered on top of each other? 

Looked pretty convincing!

Thanks and you are correct. The hard part is recreating the clothes and matching the lighting.

5 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

The Scene with them being attacked in the alleyway was not planned and even up to the very last moments before exporting the strip, I still debated with keeping that scene and had them go straight to the observatory. The shots and comic panels were already set and written when they were inside the observatory (before the sex) when I released chapter 2.

I see, I was wondering why you didn't show the combat, but you address that later in the story yourself so it felt intentional.

5 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

I dont want to give away hints as I do have a long gameplan for the Dark Ascension series.  I do plan on using the armor in a future chapter.

Sounds good, looking forward to it.

This is incredible! With every entry your story looks more and more like a professionally-made comics.  The layout, the dialogues, the effect - everything looks amazing! ?

The story setup is rather intriguing - it looks like using Astral Chamber does not guarantee that the girls will end up in their own world. Which in turn allows you to send them on any amount of adventures, should you decide to do so. ? And Jenna seems to have some hidden abilities that she's unaware of.  Things are getting more and more curious.

Wonderful work! Thank you for sharing it with us. Really looking forward to the continuation of your tale. ?

You’re such a great story teller!

everything is on it’s best! Can’t wait to see the next chapter!????

On 2/13/2020 at 7:19 PM, Aphrodie said:

You’re such a great story teller!

everything is on it’s best! Can’t wait to see the next chapter!????

On 2/6/2020 at 2:00 AM, Devianna said:

This is incredible! With every entry your story looks more and more like a professionally-made comics.  The layout, the dialogues, the effect - everything looks amazing! ?

 

The story setup is rather intriguing - it looks like using Astral Chamber does not guarantee that the girls will end up in their own world. Which in turn allows you to send them on any amount of adventures, should you decide to do so. ? And Jenna seems to have some hidden abilities that she's unaware of.  Things are getting more and more curious.

 

Wonderful work! Thank you for sharing it with us. Really looking forward to the continuation of your tale. ?

Thank you so much guys!

I modeled the world with  Planescape Sigil and Numenera as the inspiration. As a result, it opens up to a much wider range of diverse settings! 

Finally got around to catch up ?

I already can see, they not gonna go home, instead go on a multi-dimensional adventure and well lot of non-con and con sex ?