I really must give credit to your world building. Both in the literal creation of it in game and story-wise. It's marvelously done. Great job!

And I think you may have duplicated an image? The scene with "Khol'bold silently glanced over to Selenia with a concerned gaze..." appeared twice. Unless you were trying for a weird, memory affect? Not sure, but wanted to point it out.

On 6/4/2021 at 3:41 PM, Collygon said:

I really must give credit to your world building. Both in the literal creation of it in game and story-wise. It's marvelously done. Great job!

 

And I think you may have duplicated an image? The scene with "Khol'bold silently glanced over to Selenia with a concerned gaze..." appeared twice. Unless you were trying for a weird, memory affect? Not sure, but wanted to point it out.

 

 

Do not know why as 3 pages of the comic that you read were supposed to be deleted and replaced - yet somehow those pages were still there. After seeing your post, it took me about 3 attempts of re-editing the blog to get rid of those 3 pages.

But thanks for the compliments on world building! The outside and inside locations were actual published mods I had used and were saving the locations for this chapter

-the train station was from Dwemer Railroad

-the two locations afterwards were from Project AHO

-only the train interior and the tracks were created by me

Nooice!  I can almost hear Khol'bold as he sees Jenna's nether regions pantyless.  I can just voice act his reaction out loud... Oh I slay me (quote from Cicero) The shots you did of that situation are marvelous, simply brilliant. Great Work.      

Wow, as always amazing work in terms of locations design and decorations! 
Although it seemed to me that the scene in the train was somewhat abruptly forced and ended as quickly as it began, in general I really liked where you going here ^_^ 
And I really love the dialogues between Jenna and Selenia! 
Great work here, devious-Drunna!

On 6/4/2021 at 8:11 PM, Jay-Omms said:

Nooice!  I can almost hear Khol'bold as he sees Jenna's nether regions pantyless.  I can just voice act his reaction out loud... Oh I slay me (quote from Cicero) The shots you did of that situation are marvelous, simply brilliant. Great Work.      

Thanks!

I was afraid the lighting was too bright that it would be hard to tell

6 hours ago, Crw said:

Wow, as always amazing work in terms of locations design and decorations! 
Although it seemed to me that the scene in the train was somewhat abruptly forced and ended as quickly as it began, in general I really liked where you going here ^_^ 
And I really love the dialogues between Jenna and Selenia! 
Great work here, devious-Drunna!

hey thanks!

I think I, getting the hang of decent dialogue writing so far.

The train scene was planned as mentioned at the end of the previous chapter. I guess when I was finishing up writing this part, I just wasn’t in the mood to be writing dirty sex talk or posing more sex scenes as I really wanted to get into the core story with chapter 14 part 2 almost ready in the next day or two. 
 

I thought about taking that train scene out as well, but I did spend a few days creating and texturing the train interior and positioning people inside that tiny space was a pain.

Regarding the world, I'm recognizing large chunks of what I believe to be AHO, an excellent adventure mod, with amazing visuals, immersion, and music. The hollow map of Erywon looks like an addition of yours however, and is very nicely done. Interesting turn of events, scenario-wise, though obviously staging for even more sexual engages. And great screens all along. Regarding the (mastered) comic layout, I'd strengthen the proofreading however, as there are still bubbles that are doubled from one board to the other ("Kho'bold sighed..." for example) from time to time. Yet, the metro representation is an amazing feat considering the Skyrim base. Great work !

« I don't wanna be meany, but that Jenna gal, she looks like she her panties are on fire... only she hasn't got panties, you see ?

                 Maybe she should start by curing herself from Chlamydiae before going honey-honey with everyone.  »

Catching back up with entries I've missed!

As others have said the comic layout and the world look great! The train interior and monorail effect are great and the more I try to improve my own comic editing the more I appreciate the more detailed elements of yours (like the shading beneath the square narration boxes).

I also liked the wanobi style two images blended cloth edits though if I was to be extra nit picky I'd say that you can see the transition between the two images extending onto the man's hand and lap on the middle panel of this one:

I usually use a feathered eraser brush (hope that's the right term haha, the one with the blurry edges) to blend up into the base image more.

Anyway great entry either way, I liked the world bulding and the sci fi elements!

1 hour ago, SpyVsPie said:

Catching back up with entries I've missed!

 

As others have said the comic layout and the world look great! The train interior and monorail effect are great and the more I try to improve my own comic editing the more I appreciate the more detailed elements of yours (like the shading beneath the square narration boxes).

 

I also liked the wanobi style two images blended cloth edits though if I was to be extra nit picky I'd say that you can see the transition between the two images extending onto the man's hand and lap on the middle panel of this one:

 

 

I usually use a feathered eraser brush (hope that's the right term haha, the one with the blurry edges) to blend up into the base image more.

 

Anyway great entry either way, I liked the world bulding and the sci fi elements!

Thanks so much! I can’t wait until you get to Part 2  and 3 and your reactions!
Those 2 have stuff I’m really proud of both adjusting existing cells and creating my own for world building. They also have the heaviest use of photoshop so far. 

On 6/11/2021 at 3:41 AM, Tirloque said:

Regarding the world, I'm recognizing large chunks of what I believe to be AHO, an excellent adventure mod, with amazing visuals, immersion, and music. The hollow map of Erywon looks like an addition of yours however, and is very nicely done. Interesting turn of events, scenario-wise, though obviously staging for even more sexual engages. And great screens all along. Regarding the (mastered) comic layout, I'd strengthen the proofreading however, as there are still bubbles that are doubled from one board to the other ("Kho'bold sighed..." for example) from time to time. Yet, the metro representation is an amazing feat considering the Skyrim base. Great work !

 

« I don't wanna be meany, but that Jenna gal, she looks like she her panties are on fire... only she hasn't got panties, you see ?

                 Maybe she should start by curing herself from Chlamydiae before going honey-honey with everyone.  »

My jaw dropped when I saw the worlds from Carved Brink. Then when I got to AHO and was blown away as there were so much that I knew I was going to use interior cells from AHO as it fits my world so well!