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Dark Ascension - Book 1: Chapter 14, Lascivious Connections


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Chapter 14: Lascivious Connection

Trapped inside the church at Port Laride, the Sisters discover an artifact that may stop Neverine. But the main doors of the church are blocked and the church is filled with a never ending horde of feral villagers charging towards the Sisters. Significantly outnumbered and with their armor and most of their clothes gone, the Sisters make a stand in hopes to save their world.

 

*this chapter is about 70 pages long, so I divided the chapter up into three shorter parts, each part has its own "issue" style cover page

 

Chapter 14

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Chapter 14: Part 2

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Chapter 14: Part 3

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Chapter 1: Fortune's Bedfellows

 

Chapter 2: Reaper's Covenant

 

Chapter 3: Journey's Shadowed Path

 

Chapter 4: Essence Awakenings

 

Chapter 5:Secrets Under the Stairs


Chapter 6: Vestal's Order

 

Chapter 7: Veracity’s Twilight

 

Chapter 8: Pawns in Portension’s Shadow

 

Chapter 9: Hath Thee in Thrall

 

Chapter 10: No Tomorrow

 

Chapter 11: In the Mouth of Chaos and Lust

 

Chapter 12: The Laconic Pathway

 

Chapter 13: Divine Pestilence


Chapter 14: Lascivious Connections

 

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-Sorry for those of you who saw this comic pop up on the blog feed Monday afternoon. After publishing, I noticed a page where the bubbles were empty which also happened to be an important character point.

 

Adventures in writing hell: How this became its own chapter

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-So this whole part of the story was originally a few pages at the end of chapter 13, where the two still escaped through the side door, but the door lead to the outside.

-Then I had the idea of them going through the church crypt, to explore more of Lovcraftian eroticism as the first half of the next chapter, taking only at most 15 pages.

-Dont know why, but I decided to include a bit of character development of the protagonist, making her question herself, and that blew the comic up close to 80 pages. So  I went ahead and edited, rewrote some things and removed sections so not to bog the story down too much.

-I am using a new program for this and the previous chapter. I'm still trying to figure things out with the program, but so far the page setting i can get is at a whopping 11x17, yet i have to export using medium settings to keep each page under 10mb. Also, most of the time, I'm looking through using my iPad. Let me know how the picture quality is for you guys.

 

-Also let me know if you prefer that I separate the chapter into two or three spoiler tagged sections, Im not sure how bad the loading of my comics are.

 In addition, is it better i separate them into sections if i have comics 40 plus pages long?

 

-Other type of feedback is welcomed as well

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1. I like it very much. Finally some characters without oversized boobies as my Prince would say and like. :)

2. Putting your story in spoiler is helpful. Opens much faster because pictures are "heavy" for opening.

3.  The blond in your header in chapter 14, part 3 is very beautiful. I like her.

4. All compliments for this chapter.

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Great chapter! Once again I repeat - I damn like your setting and the degree of violence and cruelty, with notes of eroticism in the events.
Although it seemed to me that in this chapter the erotic events themselves, reaching their climax and then very quickly collapses, without proper revealing (I'm talking about Lila and other girls in the church). Well, it's just from where I sit ^_^ 
 

16 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

Dont know why, but I decided to include a bit of character development of the protagonist

The disclosure and development of characters is always pleasant and interesting. It helps to feel their story. ^_^

As for the division of the entire chapter into spoilers, for some of us, this makes loading easier so it's really great, and for me, as an example, it's creating some-sort of a structure of the whole chapter ^_^
Well-p once again, thats all just imho ^_^

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wow what an intense story i am lost for words that was some fantastic chapter you created here and i hope the two lovers can come together again ?

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Even though this whole episode took place mainly indoors, somehow it really conveys the feeling that the world is ending. Wave after wave of the undead, the hopelessness of the situation, the unimaginable odds stacked against your characters - everything works perfectly together to create the atmosphere of supernatural dread.  And Jenny's sudden emotions towards Aidan fit very well within this scenario. Whether it is an adrenaline, lustful spell aura or genuine attraction - it makes the young paladin seem more human and more vulnerable.  

 

Excellent episode! My deepest compliments~ ?

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Great job! Some really stunning visuals with great atmosphere! 

 

21 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

Adventures in writing hell: How this became its own chapter

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-So this whole part of the story was originally a few pages at the end of chapter 13, where the two still escaped through the side door, but the door lead to the outside.

-Then I had the idea of them going through the church crypt, to explore more of Lovcraftian eroticism as the first half of the next chapter, taking only at most 15 pages.

-Dont know why, but I decided to include a bit of character development of the protagonist, making her question herself, and that blew the comic up close to 80 pages. So  I went ahead and edited, rewrote some things and removed sections so not to bog the story down too much.

Classic, happens to me all the time, but I always feel it's worth it to go for spontanious ideas even it it means delaying the chapter, or moving parts of the story. Because most of the time planning a story is something completely different than seeing it play out in front of you and thus you have a much better feeling of what the story needs to be at its best. So I think you did the right thing.

 

 

21 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

-Also let me know if you prefer that I separate the chapter into two or three spoiler tagged sections, Im not sure how bad the loading of my comics are.

 In addition, is it better i separate them into sections if i have comics 40 plus pages long?

The loading is perfectly fine for me, I don't think the splitting of the story in various spoilers is that important. To the best of my knowledge the spoilers don't have an impact on loading the images, it's really just cosmetic or a handy way to separat scenes. 

 

21 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

-Other type of feedback is welcomed as well

Even though the athmosphere and the visuals in your fights are stunning I sometimes feel a bit lost or without orientation. You mostly show reactions shots or details like which zombie hand goes where, or what a sword hits, but I think it's just as important to give some kind of overview of how the scene actually looks, sth. like this:

 

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Before that it wasn't clear (to me) that there were zombies on both sides and how the scene looked in total. Afterwards the orientation was much better and the whole fight became much clearer. Also this way you can better show of your amazing zombie posing at the lattices and their hands gabbing for them. I know that these shots are technically harder, because the whole scene has to be lit correctly and you can't just cut "bad" posing away, but a shot like this from time to time is very much appreciated.

 

Besides that, the zombie scene is amazingly posed, I'm not sure how you did it, but the linked image above looks fantastic (from a technical perspective ;) )!

 

 

 

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6 hours ago, Crw said:

Although it seemed to me that in this chapter the erotic events themselves, reaching their climax and then very quickly collapses, without proper revealing (I'm talking about Lila and other girls in the church). Well, it's just from where I sit ^_^ 
 

I had a few panels and shots made of the other sisters, mostly of Lila being ravished more but then I couldn’t find a way to include them without making it look like Jenny was standing at the other side of the door for the whole thing (beginning to climax). Those were the pages I did cut from the original.

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7 hours ago, wilson99 said:

wow what an intense story i am lost for words that was some fantastic chapter you created here and i hope the two lovers can come together again ?

Thanks so much! I glad you felt the connection the two had

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10 hours ago, EvalovesEP said:

1. I like it very much. Finally some characters without oversized boobies as my Prince would say and like. :)

2. Putting your story in spoiler is helpful. Opens much faster because pictures are "heavy" for opening.

3.  The blond in your header in chapter 14, part 3 is very beautiful. I like her.

4. All compliments for this chapter.

I’m glad you enjoyed Aidan’s character. I will say, it is much easier to pose women with smaller breasts holding swords as it doesn’t clip as much.

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Such great shots, and arrangement, So awesome to look at!

The sheer number of villagers, and how they all seem meticulously placed is mind boggling to me!!

Shame about Jenny and Aiden's short lived romance, but at least they'll avoid that awkward moment later in life around the fire, when their grandchildren ask,

"Tell us the story about how you two fell in love!!"

Great work! ?

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On 6/11/2019 at 9:58 AM, Devianna said:

 ...and Jenny's sudden emotions towards Aidan fit very well within this scenario. Whether it is an adrenaline, lustful spell aura or genuine attraction - it makes the young paladin seem more human and more vulnerable.  

 

Excellent episode! My deepest compliments~ ?

Thanks so much!  I was really bogged down with several pages of the comic, trying to make Jenny’s sudden feelings of emotional love seem natural as if young teen love, and being 19 years old, hopefully it shows more of her innocence and lack of experience in love. 

 

Infact, it was two key pages where  where Aidan addressed their sexual connection, possibly love that was left incomplete when I accidentally published this chapter.

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16 hours ago, WANOBI12 said:

Such great shots, and arrangement, So awesome to look at!

The sheer number of villagers, and how they all seem meticulously placed is mind boggling to me!!

Shame about Jenny and Aiden's short lived romance, but at least they'll avoid that awkward moment later in life around the fire, when their grandchildren ask,

"Tell us the story about how you two fell in love!!"

Great work! ?

OMG, leave it to you to turn to a light hearted tone! Love it!

I may need you to help punch up write some of my later stories so they are all not so overkill, drab and bleak :)

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On 6/11/2019 at 1:42 PM, Alter Native said:

Even though the athmosphere and the visuals in your fights are stunning I sometimes feel a bit lost or without orientation. You mostly show reactions shots or details like which zombie hand goes where, or what a sword hits, but I think it's just as important to give some kind of overview of how the scene actually looks, sth. like this:

 

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Before that it wasn't clear (to me) that there were zombies on both sides and how the scene looked in total. Afterwards the orientation was much better and the whole fight became much clearer. Also this way you can better show of your amazing zombie posing at the lattices and their hands gabbing for them. I know that these shots are technically harder, because the whole scene has to be lit correctly and you can't just cut "bad" posing away, but a shot like this from time to time is very much appreciated.

 

Besides that, the zombie scene is amazingly posed, I'm not sure how you did it, but the linked image above looks fantastic (from a technical perspective ;) )!

 

 

 

 

Oh wow, thanks for catching that! I will definitely keep that in mid next time, guess I was too focused on the inner thoughts.  But thanks for the feedback, always looking for technical feedback like yours to make my comics better!

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Technically, this chapter is excellent : as Wanobi said the sheer amount of actors to pose for each scene, and the to twists those so that they nearly perfectly suit the action is excellent. Those numbers, combined to the blood effects (which were ingame if I recall, which adds to the shooting difficulty), the lighting, backgrounds, and the rapes created an excellent "thriller" atmosphere, as the protagonists are nearly constantly being threatened, pressured to escape. From this point of view, you reached the desperate-horror erotic situations were you wanted to get I think. 

Now, for the first part the quality of the narration is somewhat underwhelming compared to what you're used to, with frequent repetitions worsening it ; but that flaw is corrected in part 2. The second default is Aidan looking more like doing a touristic walk in the catacombs (walking poses, detailed explanations) where both of the sisters should've been running for their lives since the very start. That decreased the dramatic tension you had built so well previously, with the rest of the order sacrificing themselves in order to give those two a chance of escape.

On the contrary, the sex scene of the hands was psychologically and graphically excellent, making the reader realizing fully the "lascivious connection" between Aidan and Jenny. So overall, excellent chapter, as usual ! :smiley::thumbsup:

 

 

Malicia : « Smiley-ummon-HFR.gif

 

               I must warn Tryade not to accept jobs from this sister's order, 'cause those are very bad ! »

On 6/10/2019 at 9:45 PM, devious-Drunna said:

-Also let me know if you prefer that I separate the chapter into two or three spoiler tagged sections, Im not sure how bad the loading of my comics are.

As Alter said, spoilers don't influence loading times, as all the images withing an entry get loaded upon arriving on the page. This has changed with LL's boards versions though, but that's how it is currently. That doesn't prevents the spoilers being helpful to pace and present your entries though, and I liked that 3 parts division.

On 6/12/2019 at 3:47 AM, WANOBI12 said:

Shame about Jenny and Aiden's short lived romance, but at least they'll avoid that awkward moment later in life around the fire, when their grandchildren ask,

"Tell us the story about how you two fell in love!!"

Malicia : « But even if they escaped very quickly and very fast... They couldn't make babies together, Mr Wanobi, 'cause they're both gals, you see ? :classic_lightbulb: »

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5 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « But even if they escaped very quickly and very fast... They couldn't make babies together, Mr Wanobi, 'cause they're both gals, you see ? :classic_lightbulb: »

Someone fell asleep in Alteration class ?

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7 hours ago, WANOBI12 said:

Someone fell asleep in Alteration class ?

Malicia : « I was very not asleep, no ! You're the one who needs expert advice, yes ! :classic_angry: »

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That's a lot of zombies. The idea of the ladies held across from each other like that and forced to watch each other was quite hot, good job!

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On 6/15/2019 at 4:25 PM, Tirloque said:

...combined to the blood effects (which were ingame if I recall, which adds to the shooting difficulty), 

...with frequent repetitions worsening it ; but that flaw is corrected in part 2.

 

....The second default is Aidan looking more like doing a touristic walk in the catacombs

 

Im always on the lookout for your critique & thoughts as you and few others offer some great criticism that either I myself also struggled with or more importantly. things I did not catch. 

 

——-The blood effects were in game as I tried to photoshop blood and they never seem to fit the look of the Skyrim screenshots...So I just insert a NPC, hack at it and “tfc 1” until I get the right splatter pattern. 

 

——-I went back and reRead the beginning with your critique that I was repetitive in several spots. I’m assuming you mean the spots where my captions would state something and then I have a character state the exact thing in dialogue bubbles? That one I definitely did not catch and I will keep an eye out for that. 

 

——Aidan’s Tour: that I agree was just poor writing, and what would’ve made it more trope-y was if they just sat at a table and did the same :P

The idea of using of this moment to develop Jenny was a good idea, and their walking scene was used to develop and give hints of  her personality/character/background. But but this part I really struggled and eventually turned it into a side, plot exposition. 

 

On 6/15/2019 at 4:25 PM, Tirloque said:

...That doesn't prevents the spoilers being helpful to pace and present your entries though, and I liked that 3 parts division.

Malicia : « But even if they escaped very quickly and very fast... They couldn't make babies together, Mr Wanobi, 'cause they're both gals, you see ? :classic_lightbulb: »

I kinda like the separation of the chapter myself. Since most of my chapters are between 30-60 pages long, and without page numbers, I think it would help readers go back and continue reading the chapter at the later time rather reading all at once. I noticed that was helpful for me when I was reading other blog stories.

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10 hours ago, SpyVsPie said:

That's a lot of zombies. The idea of the ladies held across from each other like that and forced to watch each other was quite hot, good job!

 

Forced/reluctant voyeurism/exhibitionism with female protagonists is one of my fav. 

 

The idea of the heroine being grabbed by a wall of faceless hands is also a favorite and probably another variation of that may return in a future chapter. 

 

I blame Jim Henson for instilling those kinks in me: grabbed by faceless hands and overtaken by tiny goblins

 

 

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15 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

——-I went back and reRead the beginning with your critique that I was repetitive in several spots. I’m assuming you mean the spots where my captions would state something and then I have a character state the exact thing in dialogue bubbles? That one I definitely did not catch and I will keep an eye out for that. 

Well the "Hold the line ! " image and dialogues look reused as is, without image variation, and the writing seemed to settle more on straight description on that first part, so it felt a bit repetitive. Nothing too serious though upon re-reading.

15 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

 

Im always on the lookout for your critique & thoughts as you and few others offer some great criticism that either I myself also struggled with or more importantly. things I did not catch. 

 

——-The blood effects were in game as I tried to photoshop blood and they never seem to fit the look of the Skyrim screenshots...So I just insert a NPC, hack at it and “tfc 1” until I get the right splatter pattern.

Interesting technique !

 

15 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

——Aidan’s Tour: that I agree was just poor writing, and what would’ve made it more trope-y was if they just sat at a table and did the same :P

The idea of using of this moment to develop Jenny was a good idea, and their walking scene was used to develop and give hints of  her personality/character/background. But but this part I really struggled and eventually turned it into a side, plot exposition. 

 

I kinda like the separation of the chapter myself. Since most of my chapters are between 30-60 pages long, and without page numbers, I think it would help readers go back and continue reading the chapter at the later time rather reading all at once. I noticed that was helpful for me when I was reading other blog stories.

Indeed. I may do so myself upon publishing longer entries. Smiley_jap_HFR.gif

 

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On 6/19/2019 at 5:03 PM, devious-Drunna said:

 

I blame Jim Henson for instilling those kinks in me: grabbed by faceless hands and overtaken by tiny goblins

 

Yeah, I hear that. He was behind my snuffleupagus fetish too ?

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Holy shit....I came here to find mods for Starbound, and instead found this story...I like it alot, although the logical side of me is SCREAMING lol. Good stuff!

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Great work Drunna ❤️

 

Truly terrifying chapter with many excelent and wonderful poses and disguisting zombies :3, this was epic.

 

My favorite the scene is when zombies grab them from the cages, that was just great, reminded me many classic zombie horror scene.

 

Side note, is it me, but these girls are terrible Paladins?

 

They lack holy magic and various anti undead and evil techniches, no wonder these girl sucks.

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On 7/1/2019 at 5:12 PM, KillinCuzICan said:

Holy shit....I came here to find mods for Starbound, and instead found this story...I like it alot, although the logical side of me is SCREAMING lol. Good stuff!

So glad you stumbled upon my stories! Thank you so much for leaving a comment too!

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