Hey everyone!

Chapter 15 is finally out. There are a few spots where I need to go back and fix some typos I’ve noticed despite several proofreads prior to release.

The release took much longer as I mentioned as far back since  chapter 11, I had to rethink/rewrite the final chapters of this storyline due to some changed plot points and characters that eventually played a bigger role. In addition, you may noticed that several shots required photoshoping several screenshots.

Also some more thoughts in spoilers if you have finished reading chapter 15

Wooooow. I hate raping and almost topped watching but was intrigued about what will happen. Jenny is my hero. Sticking the sword in old rapist bastard's ass was awesome.

Compliments for the episode and beautiful girls and hot outfits.

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> Same thinking as my Prince Many compliments.

53 minutes ago, Elf Prince said:

Wooooow. I hate raping and almost topped watching but was intrigued about what will happen. Jenny is my hero. Sticking the sword in old rapist bastard's ass was awesome.

Compliments for the episode and beautiful girls and hot outfits.

Thanks for reading through the story. I’m actually pulling back quite a bit on that stuff in the next chapter/book; also why I started the Tales of the Initiates.

Wow! Amazing job! You put a tone of work into this and it clearly shows! The location, the ambiance it created together with the all the corpses etc. was fantastic! 

For a long time I was worried the "good guys" would still win in the end, but I'm glad they didn't, it's much more interesting this way.

I may have wished that one of the sisters got "converted" by Neve, as her right hand or so, but that's of course up too you. I think there'd be a lot of potential with having Jenny or so have to face one of her friends that has switched sides. It'll also probably give the "villains" a bit more profile, but as said it's your story, do what you want :). 

I would have loved to see Jenny killing the mind controlled guy immediately instead of being raped, I think she kind of deserved it at that point.... Also how can she still be a virgin after that? 

Nonetheless great job and a great finale for the first book! I'm really looking forward to your next entries. 

38 minutes ago, Alter Native said:

Wow! Amazing job! You put a tone of work into this and it clearly shows! The location, the ambiance it created together with the all the corpses etc. was fantastic! 

For a long time I was worried the "good guys" would still win in the end, but I'm glad they didn't, it's much more interesting this way.

I may have wished that one of the sisters got "converted" by Neve, as her right hand or so, but that's of course up too you. I think there'd be a lot of potential with having Jenny or so have to face one of her friends that has switched sides. It'll also probably give the "villains" a bit more profile, but as said it's your story, do what you want :). 

 

I would have loved to see Jenny killing the mind controlled guy immediately instead of being raped, I think she kind of deserved it at that point.... Also how can she still be a virgin after that? 

 

Nonetheless great job and a great finale for the first book! I'm really looking forward to your next entries. 

-holy cow, the dead corpses scared me as I have found that having too many would crash my game, even in an interior cell!

My work around? I moved the corpses to each room.

-Sera ran the sword through him before Jodin could get in Jenny.  I also wanted to give Sera the moment of initially stopping Jodin, but Jenny the final kill. Sera was a character I was not planning on having at the finale chapter but after writing her for chapters 9 and 10, I wanted to add her to the end.

- hmmmmm......fate must really be in Jenny’s favor as she is often  saved by circumstance , luck, or someone else ??

5 minutes ago, devious-Drunna said:

-Sera ran the sword through him before Jodin could get in Jenny.  I also wanted to give Sera the moment of initially stopping Jodin, but Jenny the final kill. Sera was a character I was not planning on having at the finale chapter but after writing her for chapters 9 and 10, I wanted to add her to the end.

Well he comments on "her pussy being tight" so... something was in there I guess.  But sure, I understand  

I agree with what's been said, and the fact you've spent so much time adjusting the scenery (from a Dark End base ?) just for the sake of storytelling forces the admiration. Compliments for the effects as well, the photoshopped ones (Jenny's clothes pulled apart), as well as the ingame ones (the rest of Neverine's powers). Now, scenario-wise the behavior of the protagonists in horror fictions is often a bit lacking (blindly charging, going around without plans (and panties)...), but I did appreciate the main double twist about the key, which I did not foresee. 

As for the comic layouts and effects, they seem mastered,  and even though the end result can get a bit "busy" sometimes you create a lot of emphasis with them. Regarding the writing style, it varies from good to average, probably due to you rushing to publish this after pulling that much work on the previous steps. I noticed again a few repetitions on the 3-4 page following that one, in the captions. So, don't rush it !

But anyway, excellent work overall, to the point each time I see a Dark Ascension new entry I know it's going to be a great read. And even better news, there'll be a sequel.

Props for your book one !

Malicia : « I know that Neverine gal is very meany and all, but if Jenny finds her boobies-growing spell, maybe she can share it with everyone ? Thanks ! »

4 hours ago, Alter Native said:

For a long time I was worried the "good guys" would still win in the end, but I'm glad they didn't, it's much more interesting this way.

Malicia : « That's 'cause you spent too much time with guys eating people like tin cans. You're becoming interested in bad things, yes !  »

17 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « That's 'cause you spent too much time with guyes eating people like tin cans. You're becoming interested in bad things, yes !  »

Just you wait until the guys eating people like tin cans do good things, you'll see tomorrow. 

Oh my, this is an incredible entry. I shudder to think on just how many hours it took you not only to screenshoot everything, but to actually write the story. It is beyond epic, it's world-shattering (literally ?).

Some things got through proofreading but it tends to happen when the chapter is that large and it's easily fixable. 

The colors and the setting of the world that Jenny and Gabrielle find themselves in remind me of the Fade (from Dragon Age series). Whatever that place is it promises incredible adventures. 

I agree with AlterNative, I am very glad that the good guys didn't win just yet. Your story is a horror-fantasy and a sudden "happy ending" at least at this point would feel out of place. (Of course I am secretly hoping Jenny will find a way to return everything back to the time 'before Neverine' at a later date, but that's just me ?).

Thank you so much for sharing your work with us.

7 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

Thanks for reading through the story. I’m actually pulling back quite a bit on that stuff in the next chapter/book; also why I started the Tales of the Initiates.

Well I'm glad to hear it too. Sometimes it's all too much for my delicate sensibilities ?

17 hours ago, devious-Drunna said:

Hey everyone!

Chapter 15 is finally out. There are a few spots where I need to go back and fix some typos I’ve noticed despite several proofreads prior to release.

The release took much longer as I mentioned as far back since  chapter 11, I had to rethink/rewrite the final chapters of this storyline due to some changed plot points and characters that eventually played a bigger role. In addition, you may noticed that several shots required photoshoping several screenshots.

 

Also some more thoughts in spoilers if you have finished reading chapter 15

  Reveal hidden contents

-the bulk of the Dark Ascension storyline will take place in this world, hence one of the reasons why I was trying to get to the end of this "prologue"

-I am going to try my best to get one brief chapter out for Book 2 so many of you will get a taste of this new world, but then a break until the next chapter as this location requires creation of lots of new land masses and interiors.

-hopefully you noticed especially at the end of the chapter, a major inspiration of the Dark Ascension story comes from the  Dark Souls settings.

-the new land Jenny and Gabrielle are trapped is also inspired by another known RPG setting which I will reveal in the next chapter. 

 

Congrats on finishing your first part/season! Quite an epic conclusion. 

On 7/26/2019 at 8:45 PM, Devianna said:

Oh my, this is an incredible entry. I shudder to think on just how many hours it took you not only to screenshoot everything, but to actually write the story. It is beyond epic, it's world-shattering (literally ?).

Some things got through proofreading but it tends to happen when the chapter is that large and it's easily fixable. 

On 7/26/2019 at 6:20 PM, Tirloque said:

Regarding the writing style, it varies from good to average, probably due to you rushing to publish this after pulling that much work on the previous steps. I noticed again a few repetitions on the 3-4 page following that one, in the captions. So, don't rush it !

 Yeah, I believe proofing may be my weakness with this comic as I try to get myself to finish comics by a certain time. The timeframe i place on myself has been a challenge as I’m the type who works better with a deadline or else it will never finish. 

The other reason is especially with these longer comics, I’m having PTSD from my thesis research paper writing days where my mind glazes over and at that point proofing becomes moot

On 7/26/2019 at 1:51 PM, Alter Native said:

 

For a long time I was worried the "good guys" would still win in the end, but I'm glad they didn't, it's much more interesting this way.

On 7/26/2019 at 8:45 PM, Devianna said:

I agree with AlterNative, I am very glad that the good guys didn't win just yet. Your story is a horror-fantasy and a sudden "happy ending" at least at this point would feel out of place. (Of course I am secretly hoping Jenny will find a way to return everything back to the time 'before Neverine' at a later date, but that's just me ?).

On 7/26/2019 at 6:20 PM, Tirloque said:

 ... but I did appreciate the main double twist about the key, which I did not foresee. 

Thanks for those compliments guys!  It went through extra planning to make sure the twists and plot points were built up well and not hopefully not something that felt predictable or twists from nowhere. I’m so glad the extra time spent planning paid off!

That was interesting chapter, seems the first book is over.

I wonder what happens next in the coming second book.

I had fun reading it :3

On 7/26/2019 at 6:20 PM, Tirloque said:

I agree with what's been said, and the fact you've spent so much time adjusting the scenery (from a Dark End base ?)

It’s from  Vigilant

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what are the armors your characters were wearing during the story?

On 1/3/2021 at 1:56 PM, Electric Aether said:

what are the armors your characters were wearing during the story?

Most the armors in Book 1 are the Bless Armors. I forget if it’s from the TAL team or Nini specifically. I did have to do a little bit of mesh removing/adjusting in nifSkope..But the base is different sets of the Bless armors