"Amy, the Little Necromancer who couldn't" - now that's a story title that I can get behind! ? ?

Your writing is excellent! Special mention should go to Amy's accent, of course. ? And I don't think the LL community has ever covered such important topics as lactose intolerance in dremora stuck in human bodies. Definitely merits further investigation and maybe even a research paper ?. We'll need to get more cheese though and possibly get Sheogorath involved! ?

Most of the authors here have been inspired by other writers that came before them (as well as other comics, stories, movies/cartoons and so on).  And all of us learn from each other (Divines know I'd never get those pesky speech bubbles right without SpyVsPie's help and technical side of publishing was a nightmare until Tirloque kindly suggested guides and instructions on how to do things properly ?). You have picked up on the screenshot composition, lighting, poses and dialogue flow extremely quickly. My sincerest compliments on that! One thing I would suggest is - don't be afraid to develop a style that is uniquely yours. Overly dramatic facial expressions, unusual outfits, particular language, curious scenarios - you already have a lot of those aspects and they are a great strength of your tales. You can definitely expand on that.  You are obviously extremely talented and I cannot wait to see what kinds of adventures await your heroines next!

And of course thank you for sharing your work with us! ?

21 hours ago, Devianna said:

"Amy, the Little Necromancer who couldn't" - now that's a story title that I can get behind! ? ?

 

Your writing is excellent! Special mention should go to Amy's accent, of course. ? And I don't think the LL community has ever covered such important topics as lactose intolerance in dremora stuck in human bodies. Definitely merits further investigation and maybe even a research paper ?. We'll need to get more cheese though and possibly get Sheogorath involved! ?

 

Most of the authors here have been inspired by other writers that came before them (as well as other comics, stories, movies/cartoons and so on).  And all of us learn from each other (Divines know I'd never get those pesky speech bubbles right without SpyVsPie's help and technical side of publishing was a nightmare until Tirloque kindly suggested guides and instructions on how to do things properly ?). You have picked up on the screenshot composition, lighting, poses and dialogue flow extremely quickly. My sincerest compliments on that! One thing I would suggest is - don't be afraid to develop a style that is uniquely yours. Overly dramatic facial expressions, unusual outfits, particular language, curious scenarios - you already have a lot of those aspects and they are a great strength of your tales. You can definitely expand on that.  You are obviously extremely talented and I cannot wait to see what kinds of adventures await your heroines next!

 

And of course thank you for sharing your work with us! ?

Thanks so much! The encouragement means a lot! 

Amy was really just supposed to be a support character, but she pretty much ends up stealing every scene she's in! I wonder how Aza feels about that? ? I really liked the idea of having like one thing Aza could nearly stand about being mortal, and then taking that away from her rather dramatically. The... humor entailed in that scenario isn't really my thing normally, but I couldn't resist the idea, and I'm pretty happy with the result! ?

Definitely been inspired by some other authors here, not just be their contents, but by the amount of support they've given. When you're just starting out and still finding your audience and not getting us much feedback, long ego stroking comments like this are gold! So thank you for that! Shout outs to: @Devianna, @Resdayn, @SpyVsPie, @Tirloque, @Alter Native, and @Crw for all being vocally supportive and helpful as I've started out here. You have all definitely had an effect on my tales... and my ego here! ? These are all wonderful authors by the way, so if somehow anybody reading this hasn't checked out their work yet, I highly recommend it!

As far as my style, it's constantly evolving and changing. There are quite a few things I'd like to do at the in game level that I'm still trying to figure out, such as outfits and whatnot. On the plus side, I think I learn at least one new thing with every chapter I put together, so things like that are mainly a, when I get time to sit down and figure it out, sort of thing.

Thanks again, I greatly enjoy sharing my work here!

I want to say that at first I had mixed feelings about this story. But the further the events unfold, the more I like it. Your dialogues are simply amazing, and I agree with every word of Devianna, You really have a talent.
And I believe that you can tell us a lot more interesting ^_^

and btw, to create a shout-outs with notification to someone you can use @, like this @LexiAJ82 ^_^

Great work ^_^

4 hours ago, Crw said:

I want to say that at first I had mixed feelings about this story. But the further the events unfold, the more I like it. Your dialogues are simply amazing, and I agree with every word of Devianna, You really have a talent.
And I believe that you can tell us a lot more interesting ^_^

and btw, to create a shout-outs with notification to someone you can use @, like this @LexiAJ82 ^_^

Great work ^_^

Thanks! Dialogue is easily my favorite aspect of writing, and the part I'm usually told Im best at. My dialogue style is heavily influenced by people like Joss Whedon, who writes fantastic snap dialogue btw!

I'm glad you're coming around to Aza's tale. It's definitely something a bit different. 

And thanks for the knowledge! I've actually been wondering how to do that! ? 

Edit: Shout outs fixed. ?

Good job with this entry!

On 5/5/2020 at 12:16 AM, LexiAJ82 said:

Definitely been inspired by some other authors here, not just be their contents, but by the amount of support they've given. When you're just starting out and still finding your audience and not getting us much feedback, long ego stroking comments like this are gold!

I understand what you're saying, but always remember that motivating nice comments are never a reason to keep working on a project like this.

And yes @Devianna is amazing at writing comments like these .

Doing a screenshot story in Skyrim takes a  lot of time, work and dedication and it's just not worth it for a couple of nice comments even though they do feeling nice.

Me personally I do these mostly for myself and I think this is a good motivation for doing this. If you're not happy with the work you're putting out you're working for the bin.

Btw. I'm in full support of this:

On 5/4/2020 at 11:03 PM, Devianna said:

Most of the authors here have been inspired by other writers that came before them (as well as other comics, stories, movies/cartoons and so on).  And all of us learn from each other.

There were a couple of stories that first got me into Skyrim stories when I discovered LoversLab for myselves and one motivation to write my guide was to help the next generation of authors.

1 hour ago, Alter Native said:

Good job with this entry!

 

I understand what you're saying, but always remember that motivating nice comments are never a reason to keep working on a project like this.

And yes @Devianna is amazing at writing comments like these .

Doing a screenshot story in Skyrim takes a  lot of time, work and dedication and it's just not worth it for a couple of nice comments even though they do feeling nice.

Me personally I do these mostly for myself and I think this is a good motivation for doing this. If you're not happy with the work you're putting out you're working for the bin.

 

Btw. I'm in full support of this:

There were a couple of stories that first got me into Skyrim stories when I discovered LoversLab for myselves and one motivation to write my guide was to help the next generation of authors.

 

Thanks. ?

The likes and comments aren't why I do this. Yes, it takes time and work to put these together, but having that finished chapter is rewarding on its own. It's also a fun, and interesting way to tell a story. 

I don't believe I've ever said I wasn't happy with my work. 

However, it's also nice to have that hard work acknowledged and appreciated, particularly by other authors whom I respect, and who's works I enjoy. ?

The dialogues are hilarious as usual, though the first part feels like a complete "short", while the second one ends on a fit of humor unrelated to the theme developed. Nice job on expressions, colors, and introspective thoughts once again. But it's definitely refreshing to have an author unafraid to go into that kind of direct humor, miles away from the hororable/sensual composure most protagonists do affect. Entertaining read !

On 5/4/2020 at 11:03 PM, Devianna said:

Most of the authors here have been inspired by other writers that came before them (as well as other comics, stories, movies/cartoons and so on).  And all of us learn from each other

Malicia : « That's all 'cause I'm the prettiest and most intelligent girl of my time. It's very inspiring, you see ?  »

On 5/5/2020 at 12:16 AM, LexiAJ82 said:

Definitely been inspired by some other authors here, not just be their contents, but by the amount of support they've given. When you're just starting out and still finding your audience and not getting us much feedback, long ego stroking comments like this are gold! So thank you for that! Shout outs to: @Devianna, @Resdayn, @SpyVsPie, @Tirloque, @Alter Native, and @Crw for all being vocally supportive and helpful as I've started out here. You have all definitely had an effect on my tales... and my ego here! ? These are all wonderful authors by the way, so if somehow anybody reading this hasn't checked out their work yet, I highly recommend it!

You're a quick learner. That's why our support gave results so fast, IMO.

47 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

The dialogues are hilarious as usual, though the first part feels like a complete "short", while the second one ends on a fit of humor unrelated to the theme developed. Nice job on expressions, colors, and introspective thoughts once again. But it's definitely refreshing to have an author unafraid to go into that kind of direct humor, miles away from the hororable/sensual composure most protagonists do affect. Entertaining read !

Malicia : « That's all 'cause I'm the prettiest and most intelligent girl of my time. It's very inspiring, you see ?  »

You're a quick learner. That's why our support gave results so fast, IMO.

Glad you enjoyed it! I honestly did think about scrapping the chapter at the end, but ultimately it made me laugh too hard and I wanted to share that.  ?  I personally like writing characters who are more down to Earth and not so glamorous. 

You are very pretty and intelligent ? 

As always thanks for your support and encouragement! 

7 hours ago, LexiAJ82 said:

Thanks. ?

 

The likes and comments aren't why I do this. Yes, it takes time and work to put these together, but having that finished chapter is rewarding on its own. It's also a fun, and interesting way to tell a story. 

 

I don't believe I've ever said I wasn't happy with my work. 

 

However, it's also nice to have that hard work acknowledged and appreciated, particularly by other authors whom I respect, and who's works I enjoy. ?

Yes, I understand. But everyone occasionally gets to the point where one is expecting a certain audience expectation yet it's not coming and in these moments it's good to remember why one is doing this to begin with.

38 minutes ago, Alter Native said:

Yes, I understand. But everyone occasionally gets to the point where one is expecting a certain audience expectation yet it's not coming and in these moments it's good to remember why one is doing this to begin with.

 

 

 

 

I'm sorry if my response came across as adversarial. It wasn't my intention, but it kind of reads that way. ? 

I do completely agree that if you're not doing this for yourself and your own enjoyment first, then you're just looking for dissapointment at some point. It is good to be reminded of that though. ?

Man I really love the cockney accent and you write it out very well. I'm a huge fan of using unconventional spellings and such to really convey a character's voice and exactly how they pronounce things.

The lactose intolerance plot was hilarious but I'd be careful going TOO gross if you're looking to expand your following, I don't think people are really in the mood for diarrhea when they come to LL ? (well except for some people if that time I accidentally clicked on the "most perverted thing you actually want to do" thread taught me anything... they're really in the mood for it ?)

4 minutes ago, SpyVsPie said:

Man I really love the cockney accent and you write it out very well. I'm a huge fan of using unconventional spellings and such to really convey a character's voice and exactly how they pronounce things.

 

The lactose intolerance plot was hilarious but I'd be careful going TOO gross if you're looking to expand your following, I don't think people are really in the mood for diarrhea when they come to LL ? (well except for some people if that time I accidentally clicked on the "most perverted thing you actually want to do" thread taught me anything... they're really in the mood for it ?)

Yeah. We've already gone a bit further with the lactose related gags than my normal comfort zone would typically allow. I think aside from references to her not being able to eat cheese and wanting it badly, that's about as far as that's going. ? 

Amy might be my favorite character to write dialogue for right now.