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Omi City Heat (All Parts)


The Gauntman

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Done at last. Thank you all for the feedback, I am starting to like working with text. I know I need to get better at it with placement and size of the text. I will work on that more. My lighting got messed up at the end so it is darker than I would like, but it sets the mood I guess.

 

DL: http://www.mediafire.com/file/kj4xn9ldf87qsyy/Omi+City+Heat.7z

 

PS: This goes out to Tirloque for keeping a torch lit for all of us storytellers. 

 

 

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Finale? Finale! You must be kidding! Finale! Now it's getting interesting! That must be the finale of chapter one! Now the downturn of the characters can begin! Final revelation or damnation is at hand (long hand). All the possibilities! Please, don't let this be the last we've seen of both of them! PLEEAAASSE!

 

Nice work, of course. Short, but very spicy. Me likes.

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I like that you show the consequences of his actions for both of your characters, which unfortunately doesn't happen often on this website.

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Most excellent!!! Forgive me for saying this but this episode is your best epidemic for me.  I wish you will continue posting your stories. I love them very much because you are doing great job.

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Yeah, I expected a bit more « show » before the main act, but the ending is a logical catch-up with reality. Will you give it a sequel, Gauntman ? :)

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Finale? Finale! You must be kidding! Finale! Now it's getting interesting! That must be the finale of chapter one! Now the downturn of the characters can begin! Final revelation or damnation is at hand (long hand). All the possibilities! Please, don't let this be the last we've seen of both of them! PLEEAAASSE!

 

Nice work, of course. Short, but very spicy. Me likes.

 

 

Yes, it’s the finale that is as far as I have gotten story wise :) I am glad you liked it Swift, I may bounce ideas off you if that is ok.

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Yeah, I expected a bit more « show » before the main act, but the ending is a logical catch-up with reality. Will you give it a sequel, Gauntman ? :)

 

Yes, I did want to wrap it up by the third part. It was not my plan to continue but I will think on it.

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Thank you all, I am glad it has been received so well. And being asked to continue is a great feeling. I am more of a short story guy than a serial maker, I don’t know how Agent Tex and ther1pper do it- just to name a few. I will think on how to extend it and see what I come up with. I may try to finish the Omi Mahou Gakko story this summer and get that done.

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Glad to see that entry fully restored. Not only was the OMI setup rather original on LL, but the development of the human side of the characters and of their reactions made a lot of sense, making the whole thing, not only thrilling and enticing, but also very coherent. Smiley_jap_HFR.gif

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