Great, I see you very shortly took the advice's you got into practice ?

I really appreciate the dialogues, they are not too big and get the point on what is happening across, and the cum edit you made looked very nice.

I found out some effects even look better if you gave them a shadow effect so simulate they are really in the scene and not just put in there later.

You can do that with PaintNet very easy under Effects - "Object" (I think, not sure how its called in english)

Another thing I forgot to suggest last time, is since your pictures are cut out the way they are, to maybe center them?

It doesn't add much but it might look better and may make the manga feeling you want to give people even stronger ?

Like this for example:

Being centered would be a little easier on the eyes since now we always focus on the left, something that might become uncomfortable after a while ^^

Since I know many people come to this blogs later and binge the chapters, this way you might give those people an easier reading experience. But this is just a thought and might just be me ?

And another thing (yeah Gukahn knows a lot of secrets >_>)

The picture format. Now its ok using PNG but if you ever come to make big chapters, I would switch to JPG because of the loading times^^

Another thing that can make those easier and save your work in the progress is using an image hoster, I like ImgBox.

Seeing how you want to take blog writing serious, using a Hoster would not only save you from accidently deletes of pictures, but also time uploading them. (LL can take ages until they finally upload one Picture. an Image Hoster does it in seconds.) I was able to reduce my uploading time by half that way

Nonethe less, very good read again, looking forward to the next one ^^

1 hour ago, Gukahn said:

Great, I see you very shortly took the advice's you got into practice ?

 

I really appreciate the dialogues, they are not too big and get the point on what is happening across, and the cum edit you made looked very nice.

I found out some effects even look better if you gave them a shadow effect so simulate they are really in the scene and not just put in there later.

You can do that with PaintNet very easy under Effects - "Object" (I think, not sure how its called in english)

 

Another thing I forgot to suggest last time, is since your pictures are cut out the way they are, to maybe center them?

It doesn't add much but it might look better and may make the manga feeling you want to give people even stronger ?

Like this for example:

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Being centered would be a little easier on the eyes since now we always focus on the left, something that might become uncomfortable after a while ^^

Since I know many people come to this blogs later and binge the chapters, this way you might give those people an easier reading experience. But this is just a thought and might just be me ?

 

 

And another thing (yeah Gukahn knows a lot of secrets >_>)

The picture format. Now its ok using PNG but if you ever come to make big chapters, I would switch to JPG because of the loading times^^

Another thing that can make those easier and save your work in the progress is using an image hoster, I like ImgBox.

Seeing how you want to take blog writing serious, using a Hoster would not only save you from accidently deletes of pictures, but also time uploading them. (LL can take ages until they finally upload one Picture. an Image Hoster does it in seconds.) I was able to reduce my uploading time by half that way

 

Nonethe less, very good read again, looking forward to the next one ^^

i very much appreciate the feedback and suggestions. thank you very much! 

im currently in the writings for the next one between working, ill see if i can put some of your suggestions into practice

Well, well that's a sudden and unexpected turn of things. Makes me feel a bit sorry for her, good intentions and all and then being betrayed by the one she trusted most.
Let's hope she can turn thing around once more ... eventually. ^^

11 hours ago, Talesien said:

Well, well that's a sudden and unexpected turn of things. Makes me feel a bit sorry for her, good intentions and all and then being betrayed by the one she trusted most.
Let's hope she can turn thing around once more ... eventually. ^^

Chapter 3 is still in development,  any suggestions? ?

These are great looking and fun to read, thank you! All the characters are so pretty, even the guys ?

I wonder, does the narrow vertical aspect ratio ever becomes a limitation for how you compose certain scenes? Might certain scenes you had in mind while creating the chapters been easier if they could be in a regular wide ratio?

Perhaps not just right for Chapter 3, but I'm confident a resourceful lady like her could eventually lull her captors into a false sense of security and then use that to escape when an opportunity presents itself. The real challenge is probably more what to do after, they will likely try to hunt her, perhaps frame her with some crimes. So she might have to use her "charms" to get on the good side of some people who are used to that sort of thing, like the Thieves Guild or the Dark Brotherhood. Even the Dunmer in the Grey Quarter might be able and willing to help her, though likely not as good a choice as the former mentioned organizations. She could even try to join the Greybeards, though they need some convincing she doesn't plan to use the Thu'um to take revenge ... but that's getting far ahead and an unlikely/not very action packed course/slow course.

19 hours ago, Rattlesnark said:

These are great looking and fun to read, thank you! All the characters are so pretty, even the guys ?

I wonder, does the narrow vertical aspect ratio ever becomes a limitation for how you compose certain scenes? Might certain scenes you had in mind while creating the chapters been easier if they could be in a regular wide ratio?

the purpose of the narrower photos is to mimic an actual novel/manga/book (hence the style of the pages). in my mind, i intended to merge a visual novel, graphic novel in the style of a manga. so thats why the pages are narrower. 

In regards to the characters, i feel it is only fair that the men are also correctly portrayed to be men of culture as well and not have the nasty default skin just like how the women have spotless skin. so im glad you liked that. lol

thanks for your feedback and i hope you come back for chapter 3! ❤️ 

17 hours ago, Talesien said:

Perhaps not just right for Chapter 3, but I'm confident a resourceful lady like her could eventually lull her captors into a false sense of security and then use that to escape when an opportunity presents itself. The real challenge is probably more what to do after, they will likely try to hunt her, perhaps frame her with some crimes. So she might have to use her "charms" to get on the good side of some people who are used to that sort of thing, like the Thieves Guild or the Dark Brotherhood. Even the Dunmer in the Grey Quarter might be able and willing to help her, though likely not as good a choice as the former mentioned organizations. She could even try to join the Greybeards, though they need some convincing she doesn't plan to use the Thu'um to take revenge ... but that's getting far ahead and an unlikely/not very action packed course/slow course.

acrtually, i didnt even consider the grey quarters since they had such minimal impact on the base game. . . . but actually thats really unique because i havent seen one yet involving dunmers. thanks for the suggestion! ❤️ 

4 hours ago, NeoSyndicate said:

acrtually, i didnt even consider the grey quarters since they had such minimal impact on the base game. . . . but actually thats really unique because i havent seen one yet involving dunmers. thanks for the suggestion! ❤️ 

Welcome, glad my little ramble helped you in some small way. Spinning that thread further, the Dunmer might be more useful than I considered originally as they might be able to smuggle her to Solstheim, which would be out of the (direct) reach of the Empire. OTOH the Dunmer are known to still keep slaves. While House Dres has no noticeable presence in Solstheim, House Telvani certainly does. So that would be a new danger.
Well all up to you, I guess. I shall certainly look forward to the next chapters. ^^

18 hours ago, NeoSyndicate said:

the purpose of the narrower photos is to mimic an actual novel/manga/book (hence the style of the pages). in my mind, i intended to merge a visual novel, graphic novel in the style of a manga. so thats why the pages are narrower. 

 

In regards to the characters, i feel it is only fair that the men are also correctly portrayed to be men of culture as well and not have the nasty default skin just like how the women have spotless skin. so im glad you liked that. lol

 

thanks for your feedback and i hope you come back for chapter 3! ❤️ 

Interesting! In the case of comics, I understand that the "panels" on the comic page can come in different shapes and sizes to suit he author's/artist's creativity. If you ever feel like doing some horizontal panels, I think they'll look wonderful as well.

You'll definitely find me on Chapter 3 ?

1 hour ago, Rattlesnark said:

 

Interesting! In the case of comics, I understand that the "panels" on the comic page can come in different shapes and sizes to suit he author's/artist's creativity. If you ever feel like doing some horizontal panels, I think they'll look wonderful as well.

You'll definitely find me on Chapter 3 ?

It's is definitely under works! See you there! ?

15 hours ago, Talesien said:

Welcome, glad my little ramble helped you in some small way. Spinning that thread further, the Dunmer might be more useful than I considered originally as they might be able to smuggle her to Solstheim, which would be out of the (direct) reach of the Empire. OTOH the Dunmer are known to still keep slaves. While House Dres has no noticeable presence in Solstheim, House Telvani certainly does. So that would be a new danger.
Well all up to you, I guess. I shall certainly look forward to the next chapters. ^^

It warms my heart to see other people actually be into the actual lore of TES. Not a lot of people are even aware of the different houses that were introduced back in Morrowind. Thanks for being here and suggesting these things! If i ever use any of your suggestions, I'll credit you in the (second) panel page ?