This one is starting off well this reminds me of the adventurers you meet while traveling. They tell you about where they are going and you know you will find their corpses later.

And so it starts again !

• On the pros aspects, I just loved your khajiit protagonist : not only he looked badass, but you also infused quite a lot of personality and humor into him (the non stop advices ?). Plus it's not everyday that we get to see khajiits (or even Forsworns). Can't wait to see those in action ! Also liked the small details such as moves (hinting Zan'iir might've willingly drank the sedative ), or noises you integrate to the narration ; which makes me think that while the layer of work added by a comic format may rebuke you, in the end, comics are best suited to your style. Also loved the twist about the forworn doding the axe (^^) , with antagonists for once not being complete dummies. That's promising !

• Regarding drawbacks, there are a lots of spelling mistakes, or forgotten words. IMO it's a bit of a pity to spend months planning, shooting, turning into a comic and even photoshopping your work... and then lessening it just by not having the patience to do some proofreading. Also, the lighting of some screens could use a bit more attention, specially when being dark overall, or having backlit characters.

• Lastly, about the tips you were wondering about :
  • To get your images (vertical or not) fullscreen, your should use the [ i m g ] bbcode instead of letting the forum's engine embed the images. More info about that here (part III).
  • Regarding bubbles placemen, dialogues ones were fine ; but the reading order top to bottom and then left to right also applies to captions. And so if you intended to have the voice of the character "Briarheart Rodyn will love this" extend from the end of the ambush place till the first image of Hags end, it may have been better to place it top left, and place the location top right or possibly on the bottom. But that's minor.
  • There are some more details that could be looked into, such as the compression of your jpegs being a bit too strong, but that's minor as well.

Nice entry, r1pper !

Malicia : « That Zan'iir cat looks very expert, yes !  

                Those guys were very silly not listening to expert advices, no wonder they're having problems.  »

3 hours ago, Tirloque said:

And so it starts again !

• On the pros aspects, I just loved your khajiit protagonist : not only he looked badass, but you also infused quite a lot of personality and humor into him (the non stop advices ?). Plus it's not everyday that we get to see khajiits (or even Forsworns). Can't wait to see those in action ! Also liked the small details such as moves (hinting Zan'iir might've willingly drank the sedative ), or noises you integrate to the narration ; which makes me think that while the layer of work added by a comic format may rebuke you, in the end, comics are best suited to your style. Also loved the twist about the forworn doding the axe (^^) , with antagonists for once not being complete dummies. That's promising !

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• Regarding drawbacks, there are a lots of spelling mistakes, or forgotten words. IMO it's a bit of a pity to spend months planning, shooting, turning into a comic and even photoshopping your work... and then lessening it just by not having the patience to do some proofreading. Also, the lighting of some screens could use a bit more attention, specially when being dark overall, or having backlit characters.

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• Lastly, about the tips you were wondering about :
  • To get your images (vertical or not) fullscreen, your should use the [ i m g ] bbcode instead of letting the forum's engine embed the images. More info about that here (part III).
  • Regarding bubbles placemen, dialogues ones were fine ; but the reading order top to bottom and then left to right also applies to captions. And so if you intended to have the voice of the character "Briarheart Rodyn will love this" extend from the end of the ambush place till the first image of Hags end, it may have been better to place it top left, and place the location top right or possibly on the bottom. But that's minor.
  • There are some more details that could be looked into, such as the compression of your jpegs being a bit too strong, but that's minor as well.

 

Nice entry, r1pper !

 

Malicia : « That Zan'iir cat looks very expert, yes !  

 

                Those guys were very silly not listening to expert advices, no wonder they're having problems.  »

I'm extremely bad at proofreading and my brain kind've autocorrects my own mistakes so that's a problem, however i keep the original images so any screw-up i do i can just redo it in photoshop as it takes like....2mins at most but i'm trying to avoid them.

So the first image is him interrupting himself, in those cases they are dropped on purpose. For the second image, i'm not sure why but since i switched to this new ENB my facelight indoors is shit but outside its often too bright which is the exact opposite of what i originally had, its really fucking annoying and I'm slowly trying to fix it, i'll try to mess with lighting in general though.

The word bubble placement is kinda odd for me too, i've not gotten myself into the habit of taking shots so that word bubbles easily fit.

Thank you for the advice.

3 minutes ago, ther1pper said:

I'm extremely bad at proofreading and my brain kind've autocorrects my own mistakes so that's a problem, however i keep the original images so any screw-up i do i can just redo it in photoshop as it takes like....2mins at most but i'm trying to avoid them.

Best do it before uploading IMO, by reading little chunks of the final images, while you've still not finished processing the whole thing. It helps with autocorrecting read habits ; and saves you the time of a second recompress/upload.

3 minutes ago, ther1pper said:

So the first image is him interrupting himself, in those cases they are dropped on purpose.

The first image wasn't aimed at pointing any error, just at highlighting Zan'iir personality and character design (that I liked a lot). ^^

56 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Best do it before uploading IMO, by reading little chunks of the final images, while you've still not finished processing the whole thing. It helps with autocorrecting read habits ; and saves you the time of a second recompress/upload.

The first image wasn't aimed at pointing any error, just at highlighting Zan'iir personality and character design (that I liked a lot). ^^

So i only compress certain ones but i might recompress some of the JPG's because it looked kinda odd to me too.

I really like this setup! It drew me in as I was reading it and the characters are memorable and entertaining, great job.

I didn't notice anything wrong besides wording in some parts. Is english your second language as well? other than that your good. 

40 minutes ago, Jayomms said:

I didn't notice anything wrong besides wording in some parts. Is english your second language as well? other than that your good. 

Sai went through it and corrected my errors so i reposted part 1 with the word bubbles fixed. It is my first and only language, I'm just bad at it.

13 minutes ago, ther1pper said:

Sai went through it and corrected my errors so i reposted part 1 with the word bubbles fixed. It is my first and only language, I'm just bad at it.

....oh ok 

Ohhh my, I already love the Khajiit guy, and yay Reach setting ?

Great work!

YYYEEEAAAAAHHH! Been way too long, r1p! Love it! I gotta say, I fucking love Zan'iir, and he's only been just introduced. I know I'm gonna love the rest of this chapter for sure!