Hot transformation. ❤️

Great job! Love the screens.

A couple of lines of dialogue and you got a story, give it a try ! 

7 minutes ago, Alter Native said:

Great job! Love the screens.

A couple of lines of dialogue and you got a story, give it a try ! 

 

Thank you I will try some writing as I feel that continuation of this story won't work without dialogue. ?

I can only agree with Alter, you're already depicting a story in some way, only a silent one. Rather than add explanations at the start, put some narration in-between. It'll make things clearer, more pleasant to follow, and will help you smoothing and thinking the transitions (there is one shot where it is unclear if one of the Forsworn is violent or not, and so we do not know if she sort of resurrects afterwards when she opens unnatural eyes).  You've already got a knack for creating immersive scenes, sometimes brutal, sometimes enticing (nice idea to apply Alter's assets to a werewolf btw) . Add the missing narratives and dialogues, and score the hit !

Wow, nice work

1 hour ago, Tirloque said:

I can only agree with Alter, you're already depicting a story in some way, only a silent one. Rather than add explanations at the start, put some narration in-between. It'll make things clearer, more pleasant to follow, and will help you smoothing and thinking the transitions (there is one shot where it is unclear if one of the Forsworn is violent or not, and so we do not know if she sort of resurrects afterwards when she opens unnatural eyes).  You've already got a knack for creating immersive scenes, sometimes brutal, sometimes enticing (nice idea to apply Alter's assets to a werewolf btw) . Add the missing narratives and dialogues, and score the hit !

Thank you for the feedback i appreciate it ?

I really like the bottom of her outfit she was wearing at the beginning. You have really gorgeous shots especially the wide-angle shot of her laying on the altar unconscious.  Nicely done!

I have scene visual stories done effectively without dialogue, just gotta make be aware in the clarity, position,  and sequencing of actions and pictures.

I would suggest to be mindful the in-game time you are shooting. I would say most of your shots, including the first two, seem be around the early evening time. However picture 3 looks to be shot around high noon, and picture 4 seems to look like 4 or 5PM. If the scene did occur over the course of the day, then as Alter mentioned, may need to add some captions as the contrasting lighting was a bit jarring.

Also, if you are not going to use face-lighting mods, I would also suggest if you are using Sex Lab to rotate the sex scene (pictures 11 and 13) so we can see your character’s face lit by moonlight. At the moment, on full brightness, I only see the contrasting white fur of the werewolf and darkness on my screen.