Xylea's design is very nice. Great chapter!

Very well done, Paladin looks amazing.  If I may ask what mod is her night wear from?

I must say this design is strange at first, as most stories attempt to make the reader forget their videogame origins. Yet, here, it's the contrary, and while it induces "empty" boards at first, the first person view then gets immersive in a way. As for the rest, while the scenario is simple, the writing style is efficient, and the screens and model enticing (reminds me of The Journey, from Anuketh in a way). So, interesting result overall.

« It looks like a computer game alright, but for guys, 'cause you only see the gal, you know ?

               So it's not interesting for everyone, no.  »

12 hours ago, Rattlesnark said:

Xylea's design is very nice. Great chapter!

Thank you! Her hair might change for the second chapter because hairstyles can change without explanation 😁

9 hours ago, RamasesII said:

Very well done, Paladin looks amazing.  If I may ask what mod is her night wear from?

 

 

Her nightwear is from an amazing mod called "COCO RONIN armor", you can find thr full set on nexus😁

6 hours ago, Tirloque said:

I must say this design is strange at first, as most stories attempt to make the reader forget their videogame origins. Yet, here, it's the contrary, and while it induces "empty" boards at first, the first person view then gets immersive in a way. As for the rest, while the scenario is simple, the writing style is efficient, and the screens and model enticing (reminds me of The Journey, from Anuketh in a way). So, interesting result overall.

 

 

« It looks like a computer game alright, but for guys, 'cause you only see the gal, you know ?

               So it's not interesting for everyone, no.  »

Thank you for the feedback! I really appreciate it!

21 hours ago, NeoSyndicate said:

Her nightwear is from an amazing mod called "COCO RONIN armor", you can find thr full set on nexus😁

Ohh Wow  I have that mod installed and I didnt recognize it, Thanks for pointing it out.

this looks really good, waiting for the next part.

Edit:

I wonder what dear father or mother of this girl will think of what the squire is doing to her. I bet they will try to stop it and or reverse it.

20 hours ago, Clea Strange said:

this looks really good, waiting for the next part.

 

Edit:

 

I wonder what dear father or mother of this girl will think of what the squire is doing to her. I bet they will try to stop it and or reverse it.

i guess we will find out

15 hours ago, NeoSyndicate said:

 

i guess we will find out

I so agree we will find out.

Or better yet they are all on this with the exception of the daughter of course.  Actually, I like that idea, the parent or parents help and give their daughter to him. So that he can break her cause she is out of control and to put her in her place.

waiting to see how the story continues in chapter 2

19 hours ago, Clea Strange said:

waiting to see how the story continues in chapter 2

I know!! ive got people waiting on these panels but life happens and this unfortunately had to slow down. I'll get it out as soon as I can! sorry x.x

On 6/25/2024 at 1:08 PM, NeoSyndicate said:

I know!! ive got people waiting on these panels but life happens and this unfortunately had to slow down. I'll get it out as soon as I can! sorry x.x

I understand, real life is more important.