Good stuff. Rapid fire opinions:

I really like the transparent dress shot when Sirrae returns to the ball, the shot initially showing off the tattoo underneath the clothes looks a bit more tacky, so I think even if you want to x-ray a small section, just x-raying a large section of the body is better. At least x-raying right to the borders of the skin I think is important as the first one not doing so sorta blurs the line between the folds of the dress' fabric and it sort of looks like the skin is folding too. Comparing the two images and looking at the left waist is what I'm talking about.

But yeah the second x-ray shot is really good. If I was to be particularly pretentious I'd say Sirrae's slutty panties and the mess following her actions is very dramatic to think about being buried just barely beneath the thin layer of her dress, and they partially obscure the tattoo but it still peeks from behind and implies even further debauchery hidden beneath. Really good shot. I assume you just took two screenshots and toyed with opacity between the layers in a certain part of the image? However you did it, really good.

Poor Lydia

I think the ship has sailed when it comes to drawing that much attention to what a character is wearing in regards to how skimpy it is, and I do like the outfits demonstrated. I'm gonna repeat myself forever but it would be nice to see them acknowledged. Sirrae stripping down after the blowjob could have her in her underwear for a moment, and her partner could remark that her facade of playing captain of the guard is even more transparent given that she's walking around in underwear like that.

Finally, as much as the tattoo and Sirrae's natural desires are clear outcomes of what she's been through, it'd be nice for her experience to be acknowledged in other ways. Remarking on how good she is at giving a blowjob, for example.

More, soon, please, etc.

Great entry - but I have to mention something.

Red on black dialog is simply unreadable.

Black with purple outline on black is actually OK.

Grey on white is back to almost unreadable.

None of this detracts from the really good story!

Great work as always, only thing I'm not keen on is that Lydia, I think Coraline's one or a few others are much better but that's me,

Great work, man this girl is slowly getting taken over by that curse. I wonder if she'll ever get free of it.

15 hours ago, fred200 said:

Red on black dialog is simply unreadable.

Grey on white is back to almost unreadable.

I don't have that issue at all, I think they're both pretty clear. The red could probably serve to be a little bit brighter to contrast but even if it doesn't change I think it's alright. Wouldn't have thought to analyze the readability at all if I didn't see somebody else have issues with it.

this is insanely good. how you turn a boring scene into sexual one from 0 to 100 is simply masterful!

Finished reading from start to finish.

The story, the images.... this all very good!

i especialy like how the original skyrim story altered.

i think this is is a master pice.

Keep up the great work

Bead ending is exellent "addon" to base story.

i think Siarre slaver mark become bigg problem ower time...   

On 7/22/2022 at 12:10 PM, fred200 said:

Great entry - but I have to mention something.

Red on black dialog is simply unreadable.

Black with purple outline on black is actually OK.

Grey on white is back to almost unreadable.

None of this detracts from the really good story!

Yeah my fonts/text are always changing. I'm so indecisive when it comes to that stuff lol, sorry bout that.
 

The downscale doesn't help it much either, but I'm trying to flat out avoid dark text colors in the future. I would do black text on a white speech bubble background, but it just doesn't fit Skyrim's aesthetic well at all. At least not mine. Everything is super dark, so the last thing I want is for mine or other people's eyes to bleed after being flashbanged with a big white bubble. So I'll keep trying to make dark colors work, but sometimes I hit a bad combo (like the slave master's wizard friend. Hindsight 20/20 on that one.)