awww it was so wholesome at first, i hope she's ok

I liked how your protagonists were more active, more  in control, and taking logical decisions and actions this time. The bonding between Sirrae and Chaconne, as well as their adventuring was nicely done ; intensifying the following drama. Great fugitive/manhunt ambiance in the last part. Technically, I made a few remarks in the last entry that I am unsure you saw, but that I won't repeat. You can always turn the notifications on (the green toggle when posting an entry, or the follow button afterwards) if you don't want to miss comments. Good entry regardless.

« I also gave expert advice in the other chapter, so I won't say it again, no.

               Still, getting caught by the slavers is very bad, That what happened to Aithne, and that made her a bit crazy. »

On 4/15/2021 at 12:32 PM, Hiya! said:

awww it was so wholesome at first, i hope she's ok