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A Missing Person, chapter 1

JessTheNerd

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"Have the guards reported anything new about that missing man?"  Lelliana inquired sliding a coin across the counter for her room.

"That's the hot topic of the town it seems." Hulda paused, before continuing. "It seems like they havent even begun the search."20200221184354_1.thumb.jpg.f1e8bb528910680f69cb96c85faaeb20.jpg

"So you're telling me... these brave men and women we trust with our lives." motioning towards the door. "Who make sure our day to day life is safe. Haven't actual done their jobs?" 

"Do they ever?" Mused Hulda. "If we want anything done these days it seems like we have to do it ourselves."20200221184513_1.thumb.jpg.300c6a269ba4a7bf8aa1244426d2969b.jpg

"I may as well, pesker Tyr." as she turned toward the door. "He's the last one to have spoken with Thorald."

"He's at the gate like usual." Hulda stated. "You may want to talk to Fralia." 

~A few moments later after searching for ages and running into nazeem a few times.~20200221185254_1.thumb.jpg.0e5492b48e8181738a7db4f79b0a19e0.jpg

"Fralia, I had a question about your son, is their any reason he may have gone missing?"  Lelliana inquired the elderly distraught women.

"He's a nord, he worships Talos, and he was planning on joining the Stormcloak rebellion, why else would a man go missing in a Imperial owned hold."

"So, you believe the guards had a hand in his disappearance?" Lelliana said quietly as to not call to much attention to themselves.

"No, you've seen the heightened Thalmor presence outside of the city lately. They took him." Fralia responded before walking off towards the town center.20200221185556_1.thumb.jpg.620357111122da3292a0ddb23475f491.jpg20200221185714_1.thumb.jpg.a48931572f299545e1359ef40915cbd9.jpg20200221185836_1.thumb.jpg.dcf262a6108c742309a4d39a0b7074fb.jpg

Tyr, come on... you know you can tell me anything you know about this Thorald case. I won't let anyone else know you spoke."

"Lelli, I told you we haven't found any clues of anything yet. Just nonsense from Fralia's insane rants." Tyr responed without emotion. 

"Fine, play stubborn I'll search for clues myself." Twirling towards the gates and marching off dramatically.

 

~Sorry about the shortness but I wanted to finally start her story and I apologize about the noobiness of the screen shots, still trying to figure this all out.~

 

 

 

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Guest

Guest

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Seems fun first try ?

 

Curious how you will twist the vanilla quest to something more interesting.

 

Your ptotags look rugged and quite good as ever.

 

Maybe try use more expression on the actors, especially in the protag.

JessTheNerd

JessTheNerd

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2 minutes ago, Resdayn said:

Seems fun first try ?

 

Curious how you will twist the vanilla quest to something more interesting.

 

Your ptotags look rugged and quite good as ever.

 

Maybe try use more expression on the actors, especially in the protag.

I was actually wondering about that how do you change the emotion on a skyrim characters face?

Guest

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Just now, Jessywulfe said:

I was actually wondering about that how do you change the emotion on a skyrim characters face?

There is mod what lets you pick emotions via rip, i think its called Fep.

 

You can also use ngf console for it? Or racemenu

JessTheNerd

JessTheNerd

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Just now, Resdayn said:

There is mod what lets you pick emotions via rip, i think its called Fep.

 

You can also use ngf console for it? Or racemenu

I'll have to see if thats avaliable on SE 

LexiAJ82

LexiAJ82

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I've been handling my pc's facial expressions through race menu, and I've just started using mfg console for NPC's. I haven't been super impressed with the actual expressions, but it's been better than not using it, and I can actually make their mouths look a bit lobbie they're actually talking. 

 

I'm with Resdayn, a nice first effort and beginning to the story. I'll definitely be watching for more!  ?

JessTheNerd

JessTheNerd

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12 hours ago, LexiAJ82 said:

I've been handling my pc's facial expressions through race menu, and I've just started using mfg console for NPC's. I haven't been super impressed with the actual expressions, but it's been better than not using it, and I can actually make their mouths look a bit lobbie they're actually talking. 

 

I'm with Resdayn, a nice first effort and beginning to the story. I'll definitely be watching for more!  ?

thankssss

Tirloque

Tirloque

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So we finally get to have a taste of the promised story ! Nice ambiance, with spicy dialogues building simultaneously the characters and the atmosphere. The screenshots are actually quite contrasted, with a protagonist radiating with sensuality (despite only chatting so far), and expressive poses. The writing style is good, specially the dialogues, but I think the narrative parts could be improved, by smoothing out the transitions between scenes and adding a bit of spaces to better show which image is currently associated with the text. Also, don't forget to make her lips move when she's talking (MFG being the reference mod in that regard). Anyway, interesting start ! :smiley:

 

Malicia : « Lelliana looks very pretty, and very intelligent, yes.  Plus she talks a lot with the hands, so she could get very good at teleshopping too. :classic_sleepy: »

JessTheNerd

JessTheNerd

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1 hour ago, Tirloque said:

So we finally get to have a taste of the promised story ! Nice ambiance, with spicy dialogues building simultaneously the characters and the atmosphere. The screenshots are actually quite contrasted, with a protagonist radiating with sensuality (despite only chatting so far), and expressive poses. The writing style is good, specially the dialogues, but I think the narrative parts could be improved, by smoothing out the transitions between scenes and adding a bit of spaces to better show which image is currently associated with the text. Also, don't forget to make her lips move when she's talking (MFG being the reference mod in that regard). Anyway, interesting start ! :smiley:

 

Malicia : « Lelliana looks very pretty, and very intelligent, yes.  Plus she talks a lot with the hands, so she could get very good at teleshopping too. :classic_sleepy: »

thanks I'm thinking of doing speech bubbles for my next post as well as better poses/ trying to work on facial animations

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SpyVsPie

SpyVsPie

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Nice start. I usually prefer comic bubbles but it's also nice to see actual prose (as opposed to the screenplay sort of layout most folks seem to use as an alternative to comics).

 

Hope you decide to continue.

JessTheNerd

JessTheNerd

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On 3/4/2020 at 3:09 AM, SpyVsPie said:

Nice start. I usually prefer comic bubbles but it's also nice to see actual prose (as opposed to the screenplay sort of layout most folks seem to use as an alternative to comics).

 

Hope you decide to continue.

Life got a smidge busy but I'm currently working on more and I plan on doing speech bubbles this time I love your stories

Agent Tex

Agent Tex

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Aria: I look forward to seeing more and more

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