Mr_Smoke Posted October 3, 2020 Share Posted October 3, 2020 Post any comics or visual story work here. Link to comment
Oz70NYC Posted October 5, 2020 Share Posted October 5, 2020 1st page of a short comic I'm working on. Testing the waters on formatting and other stuff. Feedback on how to improve is most welcome. 7 Link to comment
Marburg Posted October 5, 2020 Share Posted October 5, 2020 Looks great. Constructive criticism: maybe too much text? The pictures already tell a story. No need to fill in all the blanks as it were. "don't tell it, show it" as they say in Hollywood. 2 Link to comment
tr3los Posted October 8, 2020 Share Posted October 8, 2020 I have to agree with Marburg, dont need so much talks. Your pics talks for themselves and your pics are real good to me ? Link to comment
Oz70NYC Posted October 8, 2020 Share Posted October 8, 2020 On 10/5/2020 at 10:36 AM, Marburg said: Looks great. Constructive criticism: maybe too much text? The pictures already tell a story. No need to fill in all the blanks as it were. "don't tell it, show it" as they say in Hollywood. 8 hours ago, tr3los said: I have to agree with Marburg, dont need so much talks. Your pics talks for themselves and your pics are real good to me ? Noted. Less dialog. 1 Link to comment
Daspex Posted October 8, 2020 Share Posted October 8, 2020 Hi, i like the comic looks good also the speach bubbles are basically ok but inside of the small pictures they're too big in my opinion maybe you could use the narrator box instead? Link to comment
EJAX Posted October 9, 2020 Share Posted October 9, 2020 I dunno... I looks like a comic book to me. That was the idea, right? I would just add: don't forget all the "PoW!"s, "WHAM!"s and "BLAMMO!"s when the action gets going! 1 Link to comment
hdiddy Posted October 12, 2020 Share Posted October 12, 2020 @Oz70NYC what software do you use to make comics? Link to comment
Mia3dX Posted October 16, 2020 Share Posted October 16, 2020 I like it. good job on the angles, poses and flow ? Link to comment
Clara Cox Posted October 28, 2020 Share Posted October 28, 2020 (edited) Comic story of Miss Cox. First episode. Download CDisplayEx program to read. This is my first comic and I would like to know what are the good and what are the bad sides of comics. Write in the comments. This is important for future episodes. Thanks. UPDATE Okay, I'm re-posting the first episode. You have cbr and jpg comic format. Please have anyone read, send compliments or criticism to help me improve future episodes. Thank you. PS: I will release the 2nd episode soon, today or tomorrow.Episode_1_-_Mystical_Diamond.pdf.cbr https://mega.nz/fm/towTAS6Q Episode_1_-_Mystical_Diamond.pdf.cbr Edited August 10, 2021 by Clara Cox 1 Link to comment
EJAX Posted October 28, 2020 Share Posted October 28, 2020 3 hours ago, Clara Cox said: Episode_1_-_Mystical_Diamond.pdf.cbr 174.29 MB · 5 downloads My first (and possibly only) critique is maybe you want to consider using a more widely adopted file format? Because NO, I don't really want to install CDisplayEx to view it. BUT, if you do plan to continue using the format, then a link to the software would be helpful. /critique 2 Link to comment
Joaku Posted October 30, 2020 Share Posted October 30, 2020 On 10/9/2020 at 1:52 AM, Oz70NYC said: Noted. Less dialog. It's all a question of what you're actually showing. If you're showing people having a conversation, and the fact that they are having the conversation is the point, then you obviously need the text. But if you're setting up physical situations or actions, let the images do the work - that is very much the strength of comics. But yeah, good rule of thumb: if you CAN show it, don't tell it. If this is the first page, however, I'd say you're opening up a little heavy. It's a lot of images and text for your intro. It might be a better idea to start with fewer images (one panel for first page, three for the second, and so forth). It gives people a chance to zero in on where you are - who and what we're dealing with. It's not like there's a solid formula for this, but generally speaking, you show us WHERE we are, WHO we're looking at, and WHAT they're doing/thinking, in that order. You can of course reverse to subvert expectations (show a speech bubble first, a close-up of a face second, and reveal location/action lastly.) I have to say, I do like the dialogue very much! Good job on that! 1 Link to comment
Joaku Posted October 30, 2020 Share Posted October 30, 2020 On 10/28/2020 at 2:34 PM, EJAX said: My first (and possibly only) critique is maybe you want to consider using a more widely adopted file format? Because NO, I don't really want to install CDisplayEx to view it. BUT, if you do plan to continue using the format, then a link to the software would be helpful. /critique CBR can just be rewritten to RAR, and you can unpack it like any other archive. Link to comment
Cross2149 Posted October 31, 2020 Share Posted October 31, 2020 Naughty elf with her "friend"? More in spoilers Spoiler Spoiler 3 Link to comment
Arse22 Posted October 31, 2020 Share Posted October 31, 2020 17 hours ago, saberanger said: It's all a question of what you're actually showing. If you're showing people having a conversation, and the fact that they are having the conversation is the point, then you obviously need the text. But if you're setting up physical situations or actions, let the images do the work - that is very much the strength of comics. But yeah, good rule of thumb: if you CAN show it, don't tell it. If this is the first page, however, I'd say you're opening up a little heavy. It's a lot of images and text for your intro. It might be a better idea to start with fewer images (one panel for first page, three for the second, and so forth). It gives people a chance to zero in on where you are - who and what we're dealing with. It's not like there's a solid formula for this, but generally speaking, you show us WHERE we are, WHO we're looking at, and WHAT they're doing/thinking, in that order. You can of course reverse to subvert expectations (show a speech bubble first, a close-up of a face second, and reveal location/action lastly.) I have to say, I do like the dialogue very much! Good job on that! Haha, the tried and true pet-peeve of bad online comics has to be text overload. It's a visual medium, dude! The words are part of the picture! Just because comic book has book in it, doesn't mean you need to write one. Another example of this has to be the japanese porn games which are just text and porn screens. 80 hours of text and about 5 porn screenshots in a 2 gig file. Link to comment
Joaku Posted October 31, 2020 Share Posted October 31, 2020 36 minutes ago, Arse22 said: Another example of this has to be the japanese porn games which are just text and porn screens. 80 hours of text and about 5 porn screenshots in a 2 gig file. Yeah, that shit is egregious!! It's lazy fuckin' artists is what it is! Why bother doing a new image, if you can just do 150 text crawls?! But it's all about pacing, you know? Lead in through the images, and then dig into the characters with the text. Get to the outcome of the build-up, and then back to their reactions. There's and ebb-and-flow to it, that, if you get it right, will feel very natural. Action and reaction, you know? Link to comment
Arse22 Posted October 31, 2020 Share Posted October 31, 2020 34 minutes ago, saberanger said: Yeah, that shit is egregious!! It's lazy fuckin' artists is what it is! Why bother doing a new image, if you can just do 150 text crawls?! But it's all about pacing, you know? Lead in through the images, and then dig into the characters with the text. Get to the outcome of the build-up, and then back to their reactions. There's and ebb-and-flow to it, that, if you get it right, will feel very natural. Action and reaction, you know? I dont really mean anyone here, just general amateur games and comics and stuff, but it's just funny to think about, all that text meanwhile in a real porn film the dialogue may as well be a couple of primitive grunts, it's mostly grunts and moans actually. Link to comment
Joaku Posted October 31, 2020 Share Posted October 31, 2020 13 minutes ago, Arse22 said: I dont really mean anyone here, just general amateur games and comics and stuff, but it's just funny to think about, all that text meanwhile in a real porn film the dialogue may as well be a couple of primitive grunts, it's mostly grunts and moans actually. You know, it's funny: If you go back to 80's and early 90's, there was an actual effort to include story and acting in porn. Obviously back in the 60's and 70's, the line between porn and cinema was still pretty blurry, but you occasionally get these little reminders that the difference ain't all that big. There we GREAT actresses in the old Seth Meyers films, and a lot of the 70's porn actresses were genuinely good actors! Even now you still get it with some porn performers (especially Xev Bellringer) - they may not be suited for Hamlet, but they could sure as hell go a round or two with most sitcoms! Feels like we're getting off topic here! But acting is equally important in comics, you just have to create it yourself ('course you don't got any actors!). 1 Link to comment
Arse22 Posted October 31, 2020 Share Posted October 31, 2020 Just now, saberanger said: You know, it's funny: If you go back to 80's and early 90's, there was an actual effort to include story and acting in porn. Obviously back in the 60's and 70's, the line between porn and cinema was still pretty blurry, but you occasionally get these little reminders that the difference ain't all that big. There we GREAT actresses in the old Seth Meyers films, and a lot of the 70's porn actresses were genuinely good actors! Even now you still get it with some porn performers (especially Xev Bellringer) - they may not be suited for Hamlet, but they could sure as hell go a round or two with most sitcoms! Feels like we're getting off topic here! But acting is equally important in comics, you just have to create it yourself ('course you don't got any actors!). If you were in Europe in the 90s many daytime drama and soaps had full sex scenes, also did Hollywood films had such things as well, it was quite common. The only real difference is a censored modern thing is more innuendo or just dont show anything, but it's in fact, still about the same thing. And I don't think it's offtopic because I believe there is absolutely correlation between internet age output of any kind and how changes in media has influenced it. Link to comment
Joaku Posted October 31, 2020 Share Posted October 31, 2020 3 minutes ago, Arse22 said: And I don't think it's offtopic because I believe there is absolutely correlation between internet age output of any kind and how changes in media has influenced it. I meant this the comics thread, and we're talking about 70's porn! XD (sorry, admin!) Link to comment
Capt Willard Posted November 21, 2020 Share Posted November 21, 2020 On 10/28/2020 at 11:28 AM, Clara Cox said: Comic story of Miss Cox. First episode. Download CDisplayEx program to read. This is my first comic and I would like to know what are the good and what are the bad sides of comics. Write in the comments. This is important for future episodes. Thanks. Episode_1_-_Mystical_Diamond.pdf.cbr 174.29 MB · 9 downloads Hi Clara, good work. I have a question: how did you upload the comic? Thanks Link to comment
Clara Cox Posted November 22, 2020 Share Posted November 22, 2020 22 hours ago, Capt Willard said: Hi Clara, good work. I have a question: how did you upload the comic? Thanks What do you mean? You have to click on"reply to this topic". Link to comment
Capt Willard Posted November 22, 2020 Share Posted November 22, 2020 I meant if you have used cloud services like mega etc Link to comment
Clara Cox Posted November 25, 2020 Share Posted November 25, 2020 On 11/22/2020 at 3:58 PM, Capt Willard said: I meant if you have used cloud services like mega etc When you click on reply topic, you have option to choose your file for upload. For this comic, I don't need mega. Link to comment
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