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Necromancer's Chronicles: Chapter 3 (reuploaded)


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Update: Hello again, everyone. I've uploaded this chapter to a different hosting site. Let's see if this time it works. ?

 

Hello, dear readers.

 

As we have learned in the previous chapter, the size of Necromancer Trinn's household unexpectedly increased with the addition of two adorable little humans. One of the said humans is a terrified priest and another is a very curious and eager noble girl.  I am sure both of them will be completely fine. After all, what can possibly go wrong when you mix two goodhearted mortals and a team of demons, dremora and a practitioner of the dark arts? :classic_angel:

 

Author's note: Few screenshots contain a lot of text and somewhat philosophical musings, but they are all important to the story.

 

P.S. Since the feature photo constantly gets cropped, I'm experimenting with adding a full version in the beginning of the episode. ?


 

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Great job!

I really like where story is going with Juniper getting more and more fascinated by her Mistress and Trinn seems to have more to her then just being a comic book villain/necromancer. 

 

Also nice job on the effects and the spell casting. I always find it very hard to get NPCs to do that, even to equip spells, got a tip on how to improve/change that?

 

For me around 20 % of the images are broken and don't show up. I'm not sure if this is a link problem or if pixxxels has a problem right now, but I also could not access the image direct on pixxxels. Nonetheless the story was still easy to follow. 

 

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8 hours ago, Forshare said:

I think Tana’s probably best at taking away a person’s boredom ?

 

I also think Arthur may have had another out to save his prick from becoming a zombie. He could have sniffed the potion as well and made a hot threesome for Lady Trinn to scowl at.

Tana can certainly be very entertaining ?

As for that other option for Arthur - I like that idea. Unfortunately (or fortunately) for him, the thought didn't even cross his mind. And there's no guarantee that Lady Trinn would be kind enough to cure him as well. ?

Lady Trinn's scowl is legendary! ?

 

7 hours ago, Alter Native said:

Great job!

I really like where story is going with Juniper getting more and more fascinated by her Mistress and Trinn seems to have more to her then just being a comic book villain/necromancer. 

 

Also nice job on the effects and the spell casting. I always find it very hard to get NPCs to do that, even to equip spells, got a tip on how to improve/change that?

 

For me around 20 % of the images are broken and don't show up. I'm not sure if this is a link problem or if pixxxels has a problem right now, but I also could access the image direct on pixxxels. Nonetheless the story was still easy to follow. 

 

Thank you for your kind words, Alter!

You are correct, there's much more to Lady Trinn than just standard 'bad guy' story.  While she's certainly not "nice" she also isn't evil just for evil's sake. ?

 

Oh my, I'm touched that you liked those effects! To be honest, they are a product of a lot of improvisation. ? I use SE version, so I do not have Director's tools or the like. Instead I have Apocalypse Magic of Skyrim installed and I pick spells that can be targeted on others or can be cast on the ground and have a lingering effect. Then it's just a matter of careful positioning of the NPC and experimenting with the camera angles to give an illusion that it is the actual NPC casting a spell.

 

It looks like pixxxels are having technical problems right now as all of my links show up broken. I'll give it some time to see if things fix themselves and if not I'll have to find a different hosting site. ?

 

7 hours ago, Jayomms said:

Well done :mrgreen::thumbsup:

Thank you, Jayomms. ?? You and the few others are the lucky ones that caught the whole story before pixxxels started glitching out.

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5 hours ago, RamasesII said:

hmm sadface, cant open any of the pictures.

 

3 hours ago, EvalovesEP said:

Same as Ramses2. Pictures doesn't open for me too.

 

2 hours ago, Resdayn said:

Pictures seems broken and I can't read your story ?

Sorry everyone. It seems that pixxxels (the hosting site that I use) are having technical difficulties.  Let's wait for a bit to see if the problems resolve themselves. If not, I'll have to look for alternative hosting and re-upload everything. ?

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9 hours ago, RamasesII said:

hmm sadface, cant open any of the pictures.

 

7 hours ago, EvalovesEP said:

Same as Ramses2. Pictures doesn't open for me too.

 

6 hours ago, Resdayn said:

Pictures seems broken and I can't read your story ?

My apologies for the wait. The chapter has been moved to a different host and should be available now. ?

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Ohhh finally I can get around this ?

 

Interesting entry, overall I feel this was a bit more about Trinn then the others.

 

We got a minor hint about her goals and past, and she using necromancy yayz ?

 

I wonder about the daedric guy in the flashback ?

 

She seems not that evil, even if she do shady things, and treat Arthur and Juniper quite well, if anything Trinn is more apathetic in general about some things.

 

Tana's abilities actually interesting.

 

Juniper seems really interested about her hero ?

 

Arthur seems have talent for the restoration thing, he could make a good paladin or cleric, Gwynolda would get along with him, while ppurging the unclean ?

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6 hours ago, Resdayn said:

Ohhh finally I can get around this ?

 

Interesting entry, overall I feel this was a bit more about Trinn then the others.

 

We got a minor hint about her goals and past, and she using necromancy yayz ?

 

I wonder about the daedric guy in the flashback ?

 

She seems not that evil, even if she do shady things, and treat Arthur and Juniper quite well, if anything Trinn is more apathetic in general about some things.

 

Tana's abilities actually interesting.

 

Juniper seems really interested about her hero ?

 

Arthur seems have talent for the restoration thing, he could make a good paladin or cleric, Gwynolda would get along with him, while ppurging the unclean ?

I'm glad you liked this episode, Resdayn. ☺️

 

The whole story is technically Trinn's story. There are just many characters this time around, and in a way they help flesh out all the details of the tale.  I won't spoil anything about the daedric guy, but he is definitely not very nice.

 

I think I've mentioned it before, but in terms of D&D rule-set,  Mistress Trinn would fall under Neutral Evil category. You picked up on her character very well - she really is apathetic to most things. She uses others to advance her own goals but doesn't go out of the way to harm them (or to help). If Juniper were to die it would raise suspicions from Jarl Idgrod, which is an unnecessary hassle for the necromancer.  As for Arthur, Lady Trinn wants to see what he's capable of and she certainly doesn't care how he feels about it. At the same time she doesn't need useless servants and makes sure he learns how to survive in her household.

 

Tana's abilities are curious indeed. As Mistress Trinn pointed out - they can be used for more than just neutralizing weird poisons. We might even get to see them in action at some point. ?

 

Hehe, yes, you're right. Juni right now is Mistress Trinn's biggest fan. ?

 

Ah, Arthur...poor, poor, good boy Arthur. If there ever was a walking, talking personification of a Good Heart-Of-Gold character that would be him.  He really is very talented in restoration magic, but he'd probably try to heal Gwynolda's broken heart...and then attempt to scold the prison guards...and then try to heal the whole town with the power of love and puppies.  Needless to say he's shaking like a leaf every time Lady Necromancer is anywhere near. ?

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oh gosh! Thats amazing! I really love this cruel varian of teacher - student relationship. Like they do it in epic movies or tails. Or something like that.
And yea, lust potion, how could we live without it ^_^ The best thing ever invented ^_^

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I loved Tana's and Juniper sex. :)

That pupil of lady Trinn is very confused. He has a lot to learn.

Every compliment for great story, Dev. :)

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3 hours ago, Crw said:

oh gosh! Thats amazing! I really love this cruel varian of teacher - student relationship. Like they do it in epic movies or tails. Or something like that.
And yea, lust potion, how could we live without it ^_^ The best thing ever invented ^_^

Thank you for your kind comments, CrW. ☺️ I tend to agree - there's something captivating about watching someone pure and innocent being stuck with an ancient and unpredictable individual. Almost like seeing a butterfly in a spider's web. ? I'm happy you're enjoying the story as I am definitely having a lot of fun writing it ?.

 

Lust potions - everybody's favorite!  Even if it's poison, at least the person leaves this world being quite happy. ? (in all seriousness though, it really would've killed Juni if Mistress Trinn didn't intervene ?

 

1 hour ago, EvalovesEP said:

I loved Tana's and Juniper sex. :)

That pupil of lady Trinn is very confused. He has a lot to learn.

Every compliment for great story, Dev. :)

Yay! I'm glad you liked those scenes.  Tana and Juniper really did look very cute (and hot) together. ☺️

You are correct - Arthur is really confused and is still trying to figure out what is expected of him. And also he's just trying to survive and to make sure that Mara's temple won't be closed or destroyed. 

Thank you for your kind words, Eva. ?

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thank you your stories are fantastic and the bodies out of this world ? looking forward to see more of Lady Trinn and her dreams ?

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15 hours ago, Devianna said:

I'm glad you liked this episode, Resdayn. ☺️

 

The whole story is technically Trinn's story. There are just many characters this time around, and in a way they help flesh out all the details of the tale.  I won't spoil anything about the daedric guy, but he is definitely not very nice.

 

I think I've mentioned it before, but in terms of D&D rule-set,  Mistress Trinn would fall under Neutral Evil category. You picked up on her character very well - she really is apathetic to most things. She uses others to advance her own goals but doesn't go out of the way to harm them (or to help). If Juniper were to die it would raise suspicions from Jarl Idgrod, which is an unnecessary hassle for the necromancer.  As for Arthur, Lady Trinn wants to see what he's capable of and she certainly doesn't care how he feels about it. At the same time she doesn't need useless servants and makes sure he learns how to survive in her household.

 

Tana's abilities are curious indeed. As Mistress Trinn pointed out - they can be used for more than just neutralizing weird poisons. We might even get to see them in action at some point. ?

 

Hehe, yes, you're right. Juni right now is Mistress Trinn's biggest fan. ?

 

Ah, Arthur...poor, poor, good boy Arthur. If there ever was a walking, talking personification of a Good Heart-Of-Gold character that would be him.  He really is very talented in restoration magic, but he'd probably try to heal Gwynolda's broken heart...and then attempt to scold the prison guards...and then try to heal the whole town with the power of love and puppies.  Needless to say he's shaking like a leaf every time Lady Necromancer is anywhere near. ?

While technicly thats true, she feels a bit more of an mysterious character is support or side role then in the spotlight, so Arthur and Juniper feels more of the protag.

 

Don't get me wrong, I definetly know the style you aim here, you actually slowly introduce Trinn to us via outside perspective from other characters and we see things from slowly from her, interesting choice, but look forward for it.

 

At the moment, I say she is between true neutral and neutral evil, she do questionable things, uses dark arts, but overall just apathetic about everything, even her deals and success seems less exicitng to her, let alone people around her. She is not treat them bad or unresonable or anything, or do any seriously evil, her actions are not the most moral, but just self-centered,

 

She definetly seems the more interesting ones from the Daedras.

 

Its pretty obvious, Juni want to be like her hero, its either just an idol or a big crush , we see that?

 

I don't think Gwynolda has need anything on her heart, she seems actually got over, since she plans ruin Evelynn's life ?, considerng he is just as indecisive as Gwynolda was, he probably end up working with Gauis and purge the town with Gwynolda ?

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5 hours ago, wilson99 said:

thank you your stories are fantastic and the bodies out of this world ? looking forward to see more of Lady Trinn and her dreams ?

Thank you, Wilson! I'm glad you like my stories. ? (And having good-looking characters doesn't hurt either ?)

We'll be seeing even more of Lady Trinn in the next episode and her dreams will eventually be explained as well. ?

 

4 hours ago, Resdayn said:

While technicly thats true, she feels a bit more of an mysterious character is support or side role then in the spotlight, so Arthur and Juniper feels more of the protag.

 

Don't get me wrong, I definetly know the style you aim here, you actually slowly introduce Trinn to us via outside perspective from other characters and we see things from slowly from her, interesting choice, but look forward for it.

 

At the moment, I say she is between true neutral and neutral evil, she do questionable things, uses dark arts, but overall just apathetic about everything, even her deals and success seems less exicitng to her, let alone people around her. She is not treat them bad or unresonable or anything, or do any seriously evil, her actions are not the most moral, but just self-centered,

 

She definetly seems the more interesting ones from the Daedras.

 

Its pretty obvious, Juni want to be like her hero, its either just an idol or a big crush , we see that?

 

I don't think Gwynolda has need anything on her heart, she seems actually got over, since she plans ruin Evelynn's life ?, considerng he is just as indecisive as Gwynolda was, he probably end up working with Gauis and purge the town with Gwynolda ?

Actually I'm very happy if Trinn is perceived as a mysterious character, as she is supposed to be portrayed that way. ? And I have to agree with you, she's in between neutral and NE alignments. In fact if it wasn't for the part that she's a necromancer (and a few other things that will be mentioned later on) she could probably just stay in the 'true neutral' category. 

Very interesting observation about Juniper possibly having a bit of a crush on Lady Trinn, by the way. ?

As for Arthur, considering your Gauis is technically lawful and does things for the greater good, he would most likely be able to convince (or just straight up order) the poor priest to purge the town and the boy would agree. ?

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1 hour ago, Devianna said:

 

Actually I'm very happy if Trinn is perceived as a mysterious character, as she is supposed to be portrayed that way. ? And I have to agree with you, she's in between neutral and NE alignments. In fact if it wasn't for the part that she's a necromancer (and a few other things that will be mentioned later on) she could probably just stay in the 'true neutral' category. 

Very interesting observation about Juniper possibly having a bit of a crush on Lady Trinn, by the way. ?

As for Arthur, considering your Gauis is technically lawful and does things for the greater good, he would most likely be able to convince (or just straight up order) the poor priest to purge the town and the boy would agree. ?

You do good job so far with her❤️

 

Well thats her vibe she give to me, overall she is pleasant person ?, necromancy and dark arts itself is technicly legal, while the thing she do with souls and Maven is illegal ?

 

You made those signs subtle, but one can pick up them if perceptive enough for your details ?

 

Gauis would casually pays up the temple's debt and offer a job to Arthur, considering how assertive and convincing Gauis is, Arthur might end up burning people in the prison ?

 

Poor boy, I think even Gwynolda can be a commanding pressence to him.

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Nice entry ! The images are as colored and contrasted as ever, and you maliciously intertwined some lewd content at the center of the plot this time.. for our greatest pleasure ! ^^ I also appreciated the humorous staging, with Juniper falling like a rock with just a whiff of the potion in particular. Anyway, if just a whiff is powerful some drops would make even Gro-Shub lusty ! :joy:

 

Trinn is as expected, yet, her lessons being of some use to her guests, and her intriguing past definitely make her a more complex character than the eye would make. Also compliments for the posing (Arthur covering his blood flow was excellent ^^), and spell effects.
Nice chapter ! :D

 

Malicia : « A honey-honey potion ! Mrs Trinn knows so many very useful things ! Definitely gotta ask Mr Tolfdir to let me get an internship there, yes..million_dollar_baby.gif »

On 9/4/2019 at 3:31 PM, Devianna said:

It looks like pixxxels are having technical problems right now as all of my links show up broken. I'll give it some time to see if things fix themselves and if not I'll have to find a different hosting site. ?

Didn't follow the issue about Pixxxels, screens still look functional in your previous entries, even those not still in my cache. ?

On 9/4/2019 at 3:31 PM, Devianna said:

Oh my, I'm touched that you liked those effects! To be honest, they are a product of a lot of improvisation. ? I use SE version, so I do not have Director's tools or the like. Instead I have Apocalypse Magic of Skyrim installed and I pick spells that can be targeted on others or can be cast on the ground and have a lingering effect. Then it's just a matter of careful positioning of the NPC and experimenting with the camera angles to give an illusion that it is the actual NPC casting a spell.

Clever trick ! :thumbsup:

On 9/5/2019 at 3:43 AM, Devianna said:

I think I've mentioned it before, but in terms of D&D rule-set,  Mistress Trinn would fall under Neutral Evil category. You picked up on her character very well - she really is apathetic to most things. She uses others to advance her own goals but doesn't go out of the way to harm them (or to help). If Juniper were to die it would raise suspicions from Jarl Idgrod, which is an unnecessary hassle for the necromancer.  As for Arthur, Lady Trinn wants to see what he's capable of and she certainly doesn't care how he feels about it. At the same time she doesn't need useless servants and makes sure he learns how to survive in her household.

D&D aligment discussion going on... Must resist... Must let out.. No Tana around.. I must...

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19 hours ago, Resdayn said:

At the moment, I say she is between true neutral and neutral evil,

I'll just say that I agree ! :classic_biggrin:

On 9/5/2019 at 3:10 PM, EvalovesEP said:

I loved Tana's and Juniper sex. :)

Malicia : « It wasn't lovely at all, no : it was very humiliating and very bad. Otherwise, Mrs Trinn wouldn't have said it was a lesson, you see ? :classic_lightbulb:  »

 

 

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1 hour ago, Tirloque said:

Nice entry ! The images are as colored and contrasted as ever, and you maliciously intertwined some lewd content at the center of the plot this time.. for our greatest pleasure ! ^^ I also appreciated the humorous staging, with Juniper falling like a rock with just a whiff of the potion in particular. Anyway, if just a whiff is powerful some drops would make even Gro-Shub lusty ! :joy:

 

Trinn is as expected, yet, her lessons being of some use to her guests, and her intriguing past definitely make her a more complex character than the eye would make. Also compliments for the posing (Arthur covering his blood flow was excellent ^^), and spell effects.
Nice chapter ! :D

 

Malicia : « A honey-honey potion ! Mrs Trinn knows so many very useful things ! Definitely gotta ask Mr Tolfdir to let me get an internship there, yes..million_dollar_baby.gif »

Didn't follow the issue about Pixxxels, screens still look functional in your previous entries, even those not still in my cache. ?

Clever trick ! :thumbsup:

D&D aligment discussion going on... Must resist... Must let out.. No Tana around.. I must...

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I'll just say that I agree ! :classic_biggrin:

Malicia : « It wasn't lovely at all, no : it was very humiliating and very bad. Otherwise, Mrs Trinn wouldn't have said it was a lesson, you see ? :classic_lightbulb:  »

 

 

The maliciously lewd content was actually added more for Arthur than for the readers. ? It's one thing to stab the poor boy, it's another to try and have him concentrate with that particular scene playing out right in front of him.  But even this particular lesson will become useful later on. ? Hmm, Lusty Gro-Shub sounds like a name for a boss fight, though I am kind of scared to imagine what it would look like. ?

 

I'm happy to know you liked the chapter and thank you for your comments. ? Pixxxels were having problems, so for about half a day all of my comics were unavailable ( as you saw, some of the readers commented on it). Thankfully everything is back up now, but since I didn't know how long the outage would last, I moved this chapter to a different host just in case. 

 

In terms of D&D I think Trinn's alignment is rather easy. Even the rule-books state that necromancers, liches and the like are generally any evil alignment (most often neutral evil).  She's definitely not lawful and can hardly be considered 'good'. So  'somewhere between true neutral and NE' is a correct assessment. ☺️

 

Author: Dear Malicia, Tana is very good at what she does, so the lesson wasn't bad. But you are right - it was still a lesson and not a frivolous amorous situation. And Mistress Trinn has been around for quite a long time, so she picked up a lot of useful knowledge. ?  

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I'll just say that I agree ! :classic_biggrin:

Malicia : « It wasn't lovely at all, no : it was very humiliating and very bad. Otherwise, Mrs Trinn wouldn't have said it was a lesson, you see ? :classic_lightbulb:  »

 

 

> It was lovely to me. Sex has many varieties and sorry, Malicija if you only knows about missionaries and missionary ;)

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2 hours ago, Devianna said:

The maliciously lewd content was actually added more for Arthur than for the readers. ? It's one thing to stab the poor boy, it's another to try and have him concentrate with that particular scene playing out right in front of him.  But even this particular lesson will become useful later on. ?

With such an exhaustive degree of education, no wonder Malicia wants an internship at Trinn's. ^^

2 hours ago, Devianna said:

In terms of D&D I think Trinn's alignment is rather easy. Even the rule-books state that necromancers, liches and the like are generally any evil alignment (most often neutral evil).  She's definitely not lawful and can hardly be considered 'good'. So  'somewhere between true neutral and NE' is a correct assessment. ☺️

It's true they generally are. Just as they would likely kill intruders, turn their servitors into undead slaves, live into cave-like secluded places, and rather generally search to increase their own power instead of sharing knowledge. :classic_wink:

 

Alignment refers to what's inside the heart of the character. At the moment, Trinn seems rather harsh, but never cruel without reason. While one of the characteristics of some evil alignments would on the contrary not to need specific reasons to enjoy in cruelty. Even her doll-victims are anesthetized during her deeds. Only time will tell, but I'm not sure evil is what truly resides in her heart.  Smiley_henri_gaud-belin_HFR.gif

2 hours ago, EvalovesEP said:

> It was lovely to me. Sex has many varieties and sorry, Malicija if you only knows about missionaries and missionary ;)

Malicia : « That's very not true Mrs Eva, I know about missionary. But I never tried missionaries, 'cause I don't like to honey with old grandpas, no. :classic_lightbulb: »

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The setup of Arthur being useful but reluctant and Juniper being useless (for lack of a better word) but eager is interesting and it seems things are about to get rolling with Trinn's history but for me at least this series just lacks the sheer personality of Kiki and co or Lady Taisia and the uniqueness of their respective setups that made them such fun reads. IMO those are the things that make you a great author and your biggest strengths and we just get less of them here than we have previously. It sort of seems like you are going out of your way to tell a "serious" story at the expense of telling a Devianna story.

 

Anyway just my two cents, please don't take it the wrong way. I mean it purely in the spirit of constructive criticism. 

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2 hours ago, SpyVsPie said:

The setup of Arthur being useful but reluctant and Juniper being useless (for lack of a better word) but eager is interesting and it seems things are about to get rolling with Trinn's history but for me at least this series just lacks the sheer personality of Kiki and co or Lady Taisia and the uniqueness of their respective setups that made them such fun reads. IMO those are the things that make you a great author and your biggest strengths and we just get less of them here than we have previously. It sort of seems like you are going out of your way to tell a "serious" story at the expense of telling a Devianna story.

 

Anyway just my two cents, please don't take it the wrong way. I mean it purely in the spirit of constructive criticism. 

No worries, I appreciate all criticism (especially constructive). ? And I am actually quite familiar with this particular one. ?

 

In certain (very small) circles what I am known for as an author are my humorous stories. And while I do occasionally write more serious, darker and *gasp* even tragic tales I guess the humor ones stand out the most and people generally prefer them. A side story for Kiki and another tale about Lady Taisia are in the works, so we'll see those adorable ladies in the near future. ?

 

You do bring up an interesting point about personality for a somber protagonist. Making it memorable but at the same time true-to-character can be rather tricky. Definitely something that I'd need to work on. ?

 

Thank you, Spy. Your comments are always welcome ?.

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