Aria: Nice work, I like how the first thing Emily did was check her boobs to see if they were still perfect, anyway awesome dream.

Nice read  

19 minutes ago, Agent Tex said:

Aria: Nice work, I like how the first thing Emily did was check her boobs to see if they were still perfect, anyway awesome dream.

 

Nice read  

She was looking at the shirt actually and liked how it only covered half her chest.

About time we get some of your stories again! Though this was simple, the shots are great and I love the idea with the skull or corruption. Great job!

Spring break! Wooooooooooo!!

It felt great at the beginning, with the staging of the staff, the dialogues dramatizing its possible uses, and the visual way it interacted with Emily's succubus powers. However, I think you then didn't feel like going through bubbles and dialogues anymore. And so, while the reader can still follow visually a basic story flow, you gradually lost the ambiance you set up previously. I do suppose it's a way to represent the dreamlike aspect of that passage ; but dreams aren't silent, and a simple visual effect could've done the trick without sacrificing any aspect of the storytelling.

So it has something of Elsweyr Spring break, but without dialogues, without innuendo, without the characters expressing themselves aside of simple gestures. Can you imagine a mute Cassidey ? I do not, and I don't think it suits Emily either. If the comic way is becoming to much of a burden, then just go back to subtitles ; but don't mute your characters. That's only my opinion of course.

5 hours ago, Tirloque said:

It felt great at the beginning, with the staging of the staff, the dialogues dramatizing its possible uses, and the visual way it interacted with Emily's succubus powers. However, I think you then didn't feel like going through bubbles and dialogues anymore. And so, while the reader can still follow visually a basic story flow, you gradually lost the ambiance you set up previously. I do suppose it's a way to represent the dreamlike aspect of that passage ; but dreams aren't silent, and a simple visual effect could've done the trick without sacrificing any aspect of the storytelling.

 

So it has something of Elsweyr Spring break, but without dialogues, without innuendo, without the characters expressing themselves aside of simple gestures. Can you imagine a mute Cassidey ? I do not, and I don't think it suits Emily either. If the comic way is becoming to much of a burden, then just go back to subtitles ; but don't mute your characters. That's only my opinion of course.

So this was a test for something i plan to do in chapter 56, i'm keeping the word bubbles but in this case it was an experiment for something later involving story telling without words, only the images......also with music. Also Kokoro himself does screenshots without bubbles so i was trying to use that a little too. Next time you see her there will be word bubbles unless its in her world. But you are correct at least on the word bubbles, for sex scenes its kind've become a pain however this was mostly planned like this. Next side chapter will have word bubbles all the way through i assure you.