Very nice introduction. Aria looks very beautiful in your game. I'm using this entry to apologize for my comment about her red cheeks in your previous chapter. I didn't notice that in the last spoiler she didn't have them.

39 minutes ago, EvalovesEP said:

Very nice introduction. Aria looks very beautiful in your game. I'm using this entry to apologize for my comment about her red cheeks in your previous chapter. I didn't notice that in the last spoiler she didn't have them.

It's ok 

Nice and humorous introduction and a promise for a very entertaining adventure. I really enjoy the lightheartedness of your dialogues. (Coldwards ?).

Speech bubbles are more complicated than most people realize (took me a while to figure them out as well). I hope @SpyVsPie won't mind if I use his illustration that really helped me out. Whoever speaks first - that character's bubble goes on top.  Whenever possible try having the bubbles face each other. It makes it easier for the eyes to follow the dialogue.  You might need to adjust the character positioning on the screen to fit the text and it can be quite the hassle, but once you get the hang of it it'll be much easier. 

Your characters look beautiful and very enticing (especially Maylin in her armor). ? Looking forward to the continuation of the story! ?

7 minutes ago, Devianna said:

Nice and humorous introduction and a promise for a very entertaining adventure. I really enjoy the lightheartedness of your dialogues. (Coldwards ?).

 

Speech bubbles are more complicated than most people realize (took me a while to figure them out as well). I hope @SpyVsPie won't mind if I use his illustration that really helped me out. Whoever speaks first - that character's bubble goes on top.  Whenever possible try having the bubbles face each other. It makes it easier for the eyes to follow the dialogue.  You might need to adjust the character positioning on the screen to fit the text and it can be quite the hassle, but once you get the hang of it it'll be much easier. 

 

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Your characters look beautiful and very enticing (especially Maylin in her armor). ? Looking forward to the continuation of the story! ?

Thank you so much and for that advice an example.  Oh and I forgot to mention Agent Tex 's involvement in Aria's dialogue it's his character you just reminded me by the way He's gonna be so happy I finally did it after all this time. But I just fix that and gave him a mention. We have been planning this for a long time and never got around to it. I'm glad I finally got the first entry out. Agent Tex is my first friend here on LL. So this goes out to him and a thank you for all the wonderful stories he's done over the years that I've known him and gave him encouragement when he felt his stories weren't doing good. And to him I say this goes out to you buddy.  

Nice job! A short but enjoyable read. 

11 minutes ago, Alter Native said:

Nice job! A short but enjoyable read. 

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34 minutes ago, Resdayn said:

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Dialogues are really enjoyable, but, as it was already mentioned by Devianna, a bit confusing.

Good job ^_^

31 minutes ago, Crw said:

Dialogues are really enjoyable, but, as it was already mentioned by Devianna, a bit confusing.

Good job ^_^

yeah...  Thank for nice comment.

On 11/17/2019 at 1:14 AM, Devianna said:

Nice and humorous introduction and a promise for a very entertaining adventure. I really enjoy the lightheartedness of your dialogues. (Coldwards ?).

 

 

I@SpyVsPiekes it easier for the eyes to follow the dialogue.  You might need to adjust the character positioning on the screen to fit the text and it can be quite the hassle, but once you get the hang of it it'll be much easier. 

 

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Your characters look beautiful and very enticing (especially Maylin in her armor). ? Looking forward to the continuation of the story! ?

I can't believe you remembered that ?. Obviously I'm what you call a digital artist, sub to my patreon ?

I missed this episode somehow. I have no complains but observation. The dialogue boxes were to big in some pictures but they were good. Maylin is very sweet. Love her smile.

5 hours ago, SpyVsPie said:

 

I can't believe you remembered that ?. Obviously I'm what you call a digital artist, sub to my patreon ?

Of course I remembered it.  ? I've actually used it quite a lot at first to remind myself how to structure the comics properly. You can officially consider yourself a creator of visual aid for starting comic-artists! So, where's that patreon page? ?

(All joking aside - it really was very helpful, so thank you ? )

6 hours ago, Elf Prince said:

I missed this episode somehow. I have no complains but observation. The dialogue boxes were to big in some pictures but they were good. Maylin is very sweet. Love her smile.

Thank You 

5 hours ago, Devianna said:

Of course I remembered it.  ? I've actually used it quite a lot at first to remind myself how to structure the comics properly. You can officially consider yourself a creator of visual aid for starting comic-artists! So, where's that patreon page? ?

(All joking aside - it really was very helpful, so thank you ? )

With time I'll get better at it myself, I hope.  I am a storyteller/Comic artist in training after all. I use to draw really good back in the day. Early to mid 90's and year or two into the 2000's but I stopped because I kept hurting my neck then lost interest and computers came along and now here I am doing something else and we'll see where that takes me now.  thankyouhaveanicedaybye! 

3 hours ago, Jayomms said:

Thank You 

 

With time I'll get better at it myself, I hope.  I am a storyteller/Comic artist in training after all. I use to draw really good back in the day. Early to mid 90's and year or two into the 2000's but I stopped because I kept hurting my neck then lost interest and computers came along and now here I am doing something else and we'll see where that takes me now.  thankyouhaveanicedaybye! 

You are definitely better than I was and Ivy says you are better than her. So, my friend, compliments. You are doing excellent job.

You will be perfect if you will let Stranger having sex with Meylin 

13 minutes ago, Elf Prince said:

You are definitely better than I was and Ivy says you are better than her. So, my friend, compliments. You are doing excellent job.

You will be perfect if you will let Stranger having sex with Meylin 

Oh!... Thank you... Don't worry Stranger will get lucky some day. 

On 11/22/2019 at 8:24 PM, Devianna said:

Of course I remembered it.  ? I've actually used it quite a lot at first to remind myself how to structure the comics properly. You can officially consider yourself a creator of visual aid for starting comic-artists! So, where's that patreon page? ?

(All joking aside - it really was very helpful, so thank you ? )

As long as it helped just one person then it was all worth it. That's why we do this after all- it isn't for the fame or the fortune, or the countless groupies. Mainly because it doesn't involve any of those things ?