Amorous Adventures Text and Player Dialogue Revision 1.0.4

General

• Fixed grammar (capitalization, missing punctuation), revised wording for better read quality, removed immersion breaking lines (real-world references, modern sounding verbiage, overly pornographic statements)
• Removed all instances of "Sex Magic", replaced with general references to spells of a sexual nature
  • Renamed "Circle of Sex" spell and effect to "Carnal Circle"
• Renamed "East Empire Company papers" to "East Empire Company Documents"

Revised Books and Notes

• Uniformly formatted names
• Edited the Reachman song, made it rhyme and flow better
• Renamed "Secrets of Telvanni Sex Magic" to "Secrets of Sensual Magic", changed the author's name to a lore-friendly dunmer name, completely rewrote the text
  • These two books were awful, filled with cringy writing and references. There was no salvaging them, I cut everything and wrote some brief lines that sound like they belong in a magic tome and provide the necessary information.

Revised Player Dialogue

• No more "milady"-type stuff. I'm not sorry, fedoras.
• Tried to eliminate cringe content
  • I can't think of a better way to describe this. All writing that was trying too hard to be funny or witty, too much of a bad porno script, too cheesy or corny, I squashed it.
• Focus on neutral tone
  • I tried to make the player dialogue line up better with the base game, i.e. more neutral. As a bonus, this makes it easier to roleplay, as you can choose to interpret a line as sarcastic, or serious, or earnest, or however you want to imagine it sounding.
• Toned down the flirting
  • This is related to neutralization, but especially important for "romance". The player character was often hitting on the love interest constantly from the start, well before they reciprocate. I took that out and tried to make it build towards intimacy.

Renamed NPCs

• Ridiculous Forsworn and Falmer enemy names changed to match vanilla conventions while remaining unique

Revised Quest Text

• Made it impartially informative like vanilla

Revised Message Box Text

• More succinct, less over-the-top