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  1. 1. Should I keep the Black & White palette?

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Concept Story

part 1

 

 

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I decided to spend my last year of my education on the Fair Lady Academy in the town of Fairport. The town is old rusty colonial port, famous of the fishing and the history of dark tales, legends of its past and of course the witch trials. I always had interest in such things and influenced my decision to go here for that year, I wanted explore those stories and how much true they are.

 

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As soon as the year started, I spent my time on the library reading the tales of the said legends of course this led me pretty unpopular, people here not really like their history and researching can annoy a few person. Town have suprisingly big history of murders and brutal trials of witches, but these are history. The legends are not numerous as I thought and they are incomplete, might be intentional.

 

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Aside of a few rumors of some founder was vampire, only actual legend of the Red Witch, and that one is blank, there are nothing on it, nor people who I asked about it and they was not fond of my questions.. I might need put more effort of uncovering that mystery, I heard rumors of it, other wing of the academy might have some info about it.

 

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Its her again, what is she up to again, ever since I am here she is usally bothering me, blaming to her duties..

 

Her: Humming..

 

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She goes the name of Abigail, part of the academy's student council and representive of my class, fairly popular person, according her its her duty to watch over the people of the my class, I don't buy it, she mostly mocking me for reading the history of the town and annoy me, when she can, not the worst one, the others bully me.. 

 

Protag: What do you want now?

 

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Abigail: I'm here to inform you.. 

Protag: Inform of what?

Abigail: I'm sure you may not heard, considering how much you hang around here, anyway there is murderer in the town targeting young womens like us and he descreate them before the murder..

Protag: When did this started?

Abigail: It started 2 months ago accoring the police.. I'm suprised you miss the announcment, I mean one of the victim was from our academy..

Protag:..This is horrible..

Abigail: The police advises no one should out the town after 10mp, due that our academy decided that everyone should in their room after that, with that they also put each student with another in one room, just in case..

 

 

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Protag: Who's my one?

Abigail: Its me.. we going sleep together in a nice room, but safely..

Protag: Sounds great really..

Abigail: Ohh before I forget the Academy's other wing is forbidden to enter, knowing you have tendency to like the meaningless stories of the town, I warn you before you doing any stupid, soon its 10pm, you should go in "our" room, I hope you haven't planned anything after reading..

 

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Author notes

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This story is mixture of few concept I wanted to write, now I combined them, however compared my usual writings this is bit different challenge, not the same setting nor the same type, so Resdayn tries herself in an other types. Any kind of comment is greatly welcomed.

 

Both of them passed 18 :P , before you ask.

 

This is something to read while watiing for Gwynolda's next parts.

 

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I like the B+W look. Usually Sims screenshots don't do much for me but I guess this really helps to temper whatever it is I typically don't like about them. 

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6 minutes ago, SpyVsPie said:

I like the B+W look. Usually Sims screenshots don't do much for me but I guess this really helps to temper whatever it is I typically don't like about them. 

Sims looks great outside and meh indoors, but for this story I needed more bleak one, I guess B&w one is more fitting for the feel, but story is not set in the pass :P .

 

Maybe I switch to a colored yet more bleaker feel or keep this, dunno.

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The black-and-white palette combined with the glimpse of the story really gives this a sort of noir atmosphere, which I personally absolutely love. I really hope we'll get to see more of this story-line, it looks very interesting. ?

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I like that you're trying something different, but I'm not sure B&W does it for me.  I think that because most of the rest of the page is already grayscale, your images could use a little bit of color - but just a little.  Maybe something a little more sepia-toned might look better?  Or maybe do the artsy thing where everything is B&W except for one of the colors?

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9 hours ago, SpyVsPie said:

Is there ENB for sims ?? Gotta get Boris on that shit!

Would be interesting if there was, but sadly no :D 

7 hours ago, Turkey The Liar said:

B+W looks sweet ?

Thanks :D 

6 hours ago, Devianna said:

The black-and-white palette combined with the glimpse of the story really gives this a sort of noir atmosphere, which I personally absolutely love. I really hope we'll get to see more of this story-line, it looks very interesting. ?

Thank you :D 

 

I plan more of it :) 

6 hours ago, Holzfrau said:

I like that you're trying something different, but I'm not sure B&W does it for me.  I think that because most of the rest of the page is already grayscale, your images could use a little bit of color - but just a little.  Maybe something a little more sepia-toned might look better?  Or maybe do the artsy thing where everything is B&W except for one of the colors?

I thought one with slighty more colors, but I see how that look, if I like maybe try if not I stick to this one.

 

Or maybe the colours can change on the current mood of the story, that might can work. ?

6 hours ago, Crw said:

Hmm, interesting ^_^

Don't you think about not just bnw but something more... Emh... Noir?

Thank you :D 

 

Well based on how much stuff way too modern in the game, I see how much it can be done for that one, in terms of looks and feel.

6 hours ago, Elf Prince said:

Looks good to me.

Thanks :D 

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I like the atmosphere on this one, the B&W tones and the more introspective point of view (the story being told by the protagonist) gives it a vintage feel, just like an old thriller movie. ?

 

Also :

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ABIGAIIIIIL !

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Malicia : « The blonde girl looks worried, yes. She must be thinking the other one is very saucy, yes. :classic_sleepy: »

 

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1 hour ago, Tirloque said:

I like the atmosphere on this one, the B&W tones and the more introspective point of view (the story being told by the protagonist) gives it a vintage feel, just like an old thriller movie. ?

 

Also :

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ABIGAIIIIIL !

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:classic_biggrin:

 

Malicia : « The blonde girl looks worried, yes. She must be thinking the other one is very saucy, yes. :classic_sleepy: »

 

Thanks, base game not really offers the tone or lightning I wanted for the story, so I sued filters, either stick to the b&w or one with colder tone.

 

Other girl is saucy and she is infact an redhead actually.

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5 hours ago, Resdayn said:

Thanks, base game not really offers the tone or lightning I wanted for the story, so I sued filters, either stick to the b&w or one with colder tone.

B&W for me, it attenuates the cartoon aspect of the Sims.

5 hours ago, Resdayn said:

Other girl is saucy and she is infact an redhead actually.

Malicia : « Who's a redhead, the one with glasses ? Smiley_henri_gaud-belin_HFR.gif»

 

 

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4 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

B&W for me, it attenuates the cartoon aspect of the Sims.

 

Well it helps the tone I aim, thats sure.

 

4 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « Who's a redhead, the one with glasses ? Smiley_henri_gaud-belin_HFR.gif»

Protagonist is actually blonde, Abigail is redhead like you Malicia.

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48 minutes ago, Resdayn said:

Protagonist is actually blonde, Abigail is redhead like you Malicia.

Malicia : « I see, then she's hiding her true intelligence to make the enemy very confused. That's very clever, yes. :classic_sleepy: »

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29 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « I see, then she's hiding her true intelligence to make the enemy very confused. That's very clever, yes. :classic_sleepy: »

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This was really well done! I love the way you introduced both characters; I'm hooked! The black and white adds a cool aura of mystery, too. I think you should keep it. Really excited to see more :D

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4 hours ago, Collygon said:

This was really well done! I love the way you introduced both characters; I'm hooked! The black and white adds a cool aura of mystery, too. I think you should keep it. Really excited to see more :D

Thank you :D

 

I tried the best to make their introduction better, characters are pretty important for this storyline :)  

 

Well general opinion is to keep the b&w :), anyway more coming.

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Greyscale looks nice and it makes the product a little bit more unique. But maybe toy with the brightness a little bit as well, could stand to be a little less dark maybe.

 

Also I guess if there are a couple of shots you really like, maybe post the original color versions in a spoiler tag at the end as well.

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5 minutes ago, t.ara said:

Yes, very well done....story could go on.....somehow..."..."  ?

Thank you :D 

 

I plan to continue, but currently some things really caused a slowdown there.

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