Did read in a row from part 3. Playthrough or not, it's visible that you felt more and more turning it into a real story, one of your own. And so the silent (yet magnificent) screens progressively left place to more and more dialogues, fights and events. Scenario-wise, the flashback explaining Amy's duality were quite efficiently inserted and performed. Yet, I think your vision of Miraak is interesting, more than the official one. Yet if the question at hand is recovering one's own free will, a will binding shout doesn't seems like a logical outcome for it.

However, that doesn't alters the immersion of your tale : what it lacks in continuity and direction through prolonged silent moments or even ellipsis, it gains in visual splendor, as your screens do really magnify the scene. Poses, actors, outfits, backgrounds are all expertly combined for a near museum's picture-like effect. You sometimes left the facial expressions aside however, as the story wasn't always the main objective of your captures.  I will add that the musical touch on some entry was a nice feature, increasing the immersive aspect even more, and precising the tone you were wanting to get (for Amy's daedric alter-ego Apocrypha's part in particular, which was much more power and fights oriented).

Anyway, glad you turned it into a story after all, with twists and interpretations of your own. Nice share ! 

« That was very nice, yes. But at one moment, they say that the brunette gal is someone's wife, but we never see her husband.

               So even if it's true that women always do everything, it would've been nice to have one guy or two to help them, you see ?

               PS : I also noticed she's named Serana too. Looks like it's a very trendy surname in Skyrim, uh. »

4 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Did read in a row from part 3. Playthrough or not, it's visible that you felt more and more turning it into a real story, one of your own. And so the silent (yet magnificent) screens progressively left place to more and more dialogues,

Yes, I did, in the end ?

Still dont think I've abandoned that format... I think silent scenes sometimes may even add to something, perhaps making it more "cinematographic".

4 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Yet if the question at hand is recovering one's own free will, a will binding shout doesn't seems like a logical outcome for it.

Tbh, I've never liked the idea of "mind control" powers. Seems too OP to me and I'd rather think if such power exists in a setting, it's more about "whose will is stronger" So Miraak wanted to impose his, by force, and his strength allowed him to do so, while in this case, Amy uses the same shout but her will is not to dominate, but to free, so that final shout to him was more of a "remember yourself, remember who you are" wake up call, either way... headcanon.

4 hours ago, Tirloque said:

what it lacks in continuity and direction through prolonged silent moments or even ellipsis

? I'm guessing you're not a fan of silent shots... well I try to do those for the reason mentioned above. Dialogue is nice to have when the scene requires it, but I like silent sequences just as much for artistic reasons.

4 hours ago, Tirloque said:

You sometimes left the facial expressions aside however

You mean in combat scenes? Yeah... probably... I wasn't expecting anyone to miss those at those scenes, but you're right. Combat scenes are combat, story scenes are story, and I always try to pay special attention to expressions (probably more noticeable at the succubus story), but combat happens more "organically" so it's a bit harder to set up a proper stage for those all the time.

4 hours ago, Tirloque said:

I will add that the musical touch on some entry was a nice feature

Dammit forgot to add theme for this one. Fixed now.

4 hours ago, Tirloque said:

That was very nice, yes. But at one moment, they say that the brunette gal is someone's wife, but we never see her husband.

               So even if it's true that women always do everything, it would've been nice to have one guy or two to help them, you see ?

               PS : I also noticed she's named Serana too. Looks like it's a very trendy surname in Skyrim, uh. »

Sorry, I'm a bit confused by that last part...

Thought I made that point clear in the flashback...

Married Amy to Serana in that game, and she's the same one and only Serana. Thought once to marry her to my main guy, but he's married to Elisif on my headcanon.

Wish I could find a proper spouse for Lydia since I really like her but my characters always end up with someone else ?...

Also, Amy in my headcanon is not the only new dragonbon. Main paladin guy also is, and this story happens post-Alduin, but they were both there to slay him, so sometimes ther should be guys in my game adventures too.

Anyway, thank you very much for your detailed comments, it's much appreciated, and glad you liked it ?

6 hours ago, Myst42 said:

Yes, I did, in the end ?

Still dont think I've abandoned that format... I think silent scenes sometimes may even add to something, perhaps making it more "cinematographic".

I'm not sure it is. The way you screenshot, the amount of dialogues per images, their dimensions, the direction style and scenario are what make a still images stories cinematographic IMO. Because those can be movie-like. Yet, in the moves, there are most often a bit of sound, even in silent scenes, which completes the ambiance. Whereas if you shut down completely the sound/ambiance part, which are the dialogues, the onomatopoeia, the captions, if that goes for too long you "break" the ambiance on the contrary. And the more the reader would expect sounds (in battles, but also when the characters are talking or moving), the more it becomes awkward, more akin to a flashback/fast forward, a memory... or a photo album (IMO).

Yet there are some of us who like to do silent scenes, and even I do think it has its uses from time.

6 hours ago, Myst42 said:

Tbh, I've never liked the idea of "mind control" powers. Seems too OP to me and I'd rather think if such power exists in a setting, it's more about "whose will is stronger" So Miraak wanted to impose his, by force, and his strength allowed him to do so, while in this case, Amy uses the same shout but her will is not to dominate, but to free, so that final shout to him was more of a "remember yourself, remember who you are" wake up call, either way... headcanon.

Yeah, that makes sense.

6 hours ago, Myst42 said:

Sorry, I'm a bit confused by that last part...

Thought I made that point clear in the flashback...

Married Amy to Serana in that game, and she's the same one and only Serana. Thought once to marry her to my main guy, but he's married to Elisif on my headcanon.

Wish I could find a proper spouse for Lydia since I really like her but my characters always end up with someone else ?data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAPABAP///wAAACH5BAEKAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAICRAEAOw==data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAPABAP///wAAACH5BAEKAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAICRAEAOw==...

Also, Amy in my headcanon is not the only new dragonbon. Main paladin guy also is, and this story happens post-Alduin, but they were both there to slay him, so sometimes ther should be guys in my game adventures too.

« I was very confused too ! 'cause there were a lot of people calling themselves Serana, you know ?

                                 Like this one ->

                                           Or her -> 

                            And even her, uh-> 

               But they don't look like Serana at all, no.

               That's why I understood Serana was just a surname. A bit like when you're called Alice, but when you're Nord, you see ?   »

6 hours ago, Myst42 said:

Anyway, thank you very much for your detailed comments, it's much appreciated, and glad you liked it

Glad you shared it. Feeback is part of the fun, so it's the least I could to in return. 

43 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Whereas if you shut down completely the sound/ambiance part, which are the dialogues, the onomatopoeia, the captions, if that goes for too long you "break" the ambiance on the contrary

Well, these "comic" type stories (and I use the term loosely cause I'm too lazy to actually do it fully comic-like) only have 2 resources, wich are images and writing. Now I added some music sometimes, because that's how it plays in my head.

I just think adding dialogue and narration to every single image, is a bit like treating the reader as a baby that needs to be explained everything.

Some of the things in cinematography I've liked the most, often contain silent scenes where it's just the chraracters and images showing what's happening, and usually some music to set up the tone of the sequence. There's an endless number of movies and shows that do this, but right now, I'm remembering one of my favorites, which is "The Perfume". (Actual spoilers in this one) ->

There are some full sequences with no dialogue and just events happening one after another. Also I think some japanese film makers like to do this a lot too.

Now, that might be personal preference, but I like a good image sequence just as much as nicely written dialogue, and tbh, my eyes get tired when there's too much dialogue.

Either way... just personal preferences. I realize just mages and no sound might make this type of gimmick trickier, which is why setting the scene takes more importance, and it's also why I wanted to use music sometimes.

52 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

But they don't look like Serana at all, no.

Hey, it's not my fault that thee are so many replacers.?

Eeveryone has its favorite... maybe someone just likes vanilla Serana... who knows...

That's just my own Serana replacer which is probably the least known of all.

55 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

That's why I understood Serana was just a surname. A bit like when you're called Alice, but when you're Nord, you see ?

What, my Alice? She's not a nord, she was once technically Altmer, minus the yellow alien face because fuck that. and I'm guessing her "tamrielic" name should be Alessia... a bit ironic, given the lore regarding that name.