Ooh, so it's a story entry ? I was expecting pure screens, so almost didn't notice ! Great job for a fist, with good colors, posing and photoshopped effects. There are a few panels that are strangely distorted though, hopefully they are minority. The comic effects are good (specially the movement ones), and so are the layout and onomatopoeia (though I personally think some images are a bit overloaded that's a question of style). However the width of the images are restricted to a quite small 768, which somewhat reduces the readability. Liked the humor all along (including in the cover ^^), which makes the whole thing quite entertaining. Good job !

Malicia : « She did it with her doggie ?

                I'm not gonna tell it to anyone. But she very needs to find a boyfriend, yes.   »

PS: a bit of reading about the warnings (for future entries), in a club that might interest you.

Saph: Damn i like it! Wish i could join the fun.

Deso: Only if @Dovahblood12 will be ok with it.

Nice! ?

On 9/1/2020 at 8:18 PM, Tirloque said:

Ooh, so it's a story entry ? I was expecting pure screens, so almost didn't notice ! Great job for a fist, with good colors, posing and photoshopped effects. There are a few panels that are strangely distorted though, hopefully they are minority. The comic effects are good (specially the movement ones), and so are the layout and onomatopoeia (though I personally think some images are a bit overloaded that's a question of style). However the width of the images are restricted to a quite small 768, which somewhat reduces the readability. Liked the humor all along (including in the cover ^^), which makes the whole thing quite entertaining. Good job !

 

 

Malicia : « She did it with her doggie ?

 

                I'm not gonna tell it to anyone. But she very needs to find a boyfriend, yes.   »

 

PS: a bit of reading about the warnings (for future entries), in a club that might interest you.

THANKS FOR THE COMMENT. 

I HAVE READ THE RULES AND WARNING SYSTEM 

HENSE THE WARNING AT THE TOP AND THE COMIC HIDDEN BY A SPOILER. 

On 9/1/2020 at 9:09 PM, Deso561PL said:

Saph: Damn i like it! Wish i could join the fun.

 

Deso: Only if @Dovahblood12 will be ok with it.

 

Nice! ?

GLAD YOU LIKED IT ?

2 hours ago, Dovahblood12 said:

GLAD YOU LIKED IT ?

4 hours ago, Dovahblood12 said:

THANKS FOR THE COMMENT.

Malicia : « You're very welcome, Mr Blood. »

4 hours ago, Dovahblood12 said:

I HAVE READ THE RULES AND WARNING SYSTEM 

HENSE THE WARNING AT THE TOP AND THE COMIC HIDDEN BY A SPOILER. 

There is a warning upon login-in, and I do not recall having seen some part of the rules advising the use of additional warnings. It's just that, from a storytelling point of view, describing the content of the entry in its very first line is kind of a suspense killer. But that's a very secondary matter, feel free to do whatever you'll see fit regarding that.

On 9/5/2020 at 4:13 PM, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « You're very welcome, Mr Blood. »

There is a warning upon login-in, and I do not recall having seen some part of the rules advising the use of additional warnings. It's just that, from a storytelling point of view, describing the content of the entry in its very first line is kind of a suspense killer. But that's a very secondary matter, feel free to do whatever you'll see fit regarding that.

 

Ahhhh!

I see what you mean now!

Cheers for the constructive input, always appreciated. ?

First entry was bound to have errors and oddities. 

Hopefully these issues will be resolved in the next entry. ?

Can't wait for next entry. ❤️

Which body mods do you use?