2 hours ago, Tirloque said:

I agree with Gauntman, the troll fight was imaginative and well done technically, it was enjoyable. Also the each of Sinus interventions were badass as hell, it's impressive what you've done with this character so far. I noticed also some quite convincing wind effect on his jump, good job. And the "captured" part was rich in well brought twists , with a good pace. Plus the interesting whereabouts about Rosa using the amulet. Excellent chapter !

Thank you Tirloque. Your answers are always detailed and extensive. Relying on them helps to understand what is wrong and what is good ^_^

 

2 hours ago, Tirloque said:

all we remember what happened in Solitude's tunnels. 

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2 hours ago, Tirloque said:

 

PS : nothing to complain about with characters' development.

Yay. one point to the Gryffindor ^_^
 

2 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « Hey, Mr Crw ! Tell the daughter of the grandma Tirloque isn't gonna check her, no, 'cause is very shy you see ? And to Rosa she should kick them in the pee-pee, then leave, yes.  »

Rose: So, Malicia, you think that He isn't concerned about the condition and well-being of the lady like a gentleman? 
 

2 hours ago, Crw said:

Thank you Tirloque. Your answers are always detailed and extensive. Relying on them helps to understand what is wrong and what is good ^_^

 

Well then, if I were to be picky, I'd say one detail is always a bit shocking, that being that your body preset has an extremely narrow waist. It's minor, but under some angles, it's a bit weird. ?

But I'm just saying this 'cause you want criticism, and couldn't find any in the narration itself. Seriously, you're doing an amazing job right now. ?

2 hours ago, Crw said:

Rose: So, Malicia, you think that He isn't concerned about the condition and well-being of the lady like a gentleman? 

 

 

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Malicia : « He's very concerned, but only about ladies that are very pretty, very intelligent, and very strong, yes. »

12 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Well then, if I were to be picky, I'd say one detail is always a bit shocking, that being that your body preset has an extremely narrow waist. It's minor, but under some angles, it's a bit weird. ?

But I'm just saying this 'cause you want criticism, and couldn't find any in the narration itself. Seriously, you're doing an amazing job right now. ?

Now that you said that, I noticed. Kinda kink of mine 
Overexerted. Let's see, I think it's fixable. ^_^