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Previous part: https://www.loverslab.com/blogs/entry/17913-gwynoldas-daily-life1/

 

 

 

Gwynolda's story

Act I

Gwynolda's Daily life

Chapter 2

 

 

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A few days passed since the knight came, she offered to teach me and help my quest of knighthood. 

 

She gave me a few books and asked me to finish them before she returns.

 

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The books are mostly about worship of Lady Dibella in Tamriel, ones which are not from Skyrim.

 

I guess knowing the differences are important to avoid mistakens as acting wrongly on the people as future knight,

 

As each province has their own ideas and image of Lady Dibella.

 

Outside that, she gave me a list of the previous Sybills of Skyrim, not sure why.

 

A piece of history? Or just to show me that, we don't have no Sybill right now..

 

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However one of the name's got my attention, "Saoirse"

 

who doesn't have anything written down.

 

Almost as if she is erased

 

But enough of history and study..

 

I struggle to keep my mind on it

 

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It is hard to forget the few good things in Markarth, letting it go with everything along with the bad..

 

Memories of my life they are still haunting me .

 

Leaving was easy, moving on is harder

 

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I had someone years ago, before things went bad, lately she is on my mind a lot.

 

She lived in the worst part of Markarth..in the Warrens

 

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I often visited it, to help the ones in need, heal the sick

 

Of course the latter just worsened my relationship with the Temple, as they refused to heal the Reachmens in the lower districts

 

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They charge for the services, what the people living here couldn't afford

 

I couldn't agree with it and behind their back, I came here to help.

 

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But in the end, I was caught and punished for it.

 

Temple forbid me to do anything anymore here

 

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I was only allowed to visit my girlfriend here

 

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But it was heartbreaking to let everyone suffer and forced to watch it as I walked here.

 

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People often asked about me, greeted me, even if I could not help anymore.

 

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Mostly about mundane things or how are the things between me and her

 

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Asking blessings from me, only some of them. 

 

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It was just one of the small things on I could do, even the smallest things can distract them

 

From seeing the misery of the Warrens.

 

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Warrens used to be mines back in the day of the incident, one of the city's silver mine.

 

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Now it's been rebuilt as home for the poor, orphans and workers from the Reachmens of the city, since the incident, people are forced to live here.

 

It would been my life, without the temple, even with my treatment, I was better off.. 

 

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And there we are, place my girlfriend used to live

 

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She used to live in one of the "houses" in Warrens.

 

My my, the prettiest sister of Dibella visiting me, it isn't Gwynolda?
 

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Haha.. funny, you know I'm not the prettiest there, it's been while love

 

For me you are, don't tell me you find those nords pretty? Should I be jealous?

 

They have a few who are not nord

 

 

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Her name was Muriel

 

You mean yourself? For me you are the prettiest.

 

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She was my first love

 

I'm happy too see you really, I admit, I missed you

 

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I missed you too! I would come earlier.. but I was punished again..

 

For what this time? I swear they punish you for everything nowadays

 

I know right?! It was for the reach markings you gave me and that I healed people without payments.

 

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They said I make political statements with it and worsens the standing of the temple..

 

That is stupid, you are Reachmen like us, you are allowed to express it and help those who need, it's your job.

 

Nords..

 

They also refusing their duty to help the weak and sick and punish those who do it!

 

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I often complained about the temple to her, while I listened to her problems from the warrens, guards, work.

 

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We listened to each other and comforted, it was easier to handle things due to that

 

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So what was your punishment this time?

 

They made me to clean their feet for a month.

 

That's it?

 

Well outside the usual self whipping, but this time in front of them and not going out for a week.

I feel they getting more stranger as they seem to enjoy hurting me.. or humiliate me with newer things.

 

Hmmmm, it sounds a bit odd. Based on what you tell me, these do not really seem the way Lady Dibella handles things.

 

I know...

 

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What about you? How are the works in the mine?

 

On my side?

 

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It was really my comfort to spend time with her, I enjoyed every minute of it.

 

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What happened in the last week,

work was hard and tough and the Nords raised the amount they expect daily again..

 

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Since the Silverbloods are in charge, things are worser for us in the mines.

They do not punish people for working slow yet, but who can trust them

give them a few month and they do the same as every cursed silver mine they own

 

Silverbloods? A new clan? These clans all sound the same to me

 

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Yeah, rich Nordic clan, who lately got a lot of mines in the past twenty years, they are the same as others, just more cutthroat, they got quite confident since they got the prisoners, they mine them along with us..

 

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But enough of the bad Gwynolda, we are not here for listening how miserable others treat us!, it's our time!

 

You are right love

 

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Let's have some fun, been a while. I miss your gentle touch.

 

Do you wanna do it in the dirt?

 

No, sweetie in our usual place, but you can take off that robe a bit for me, tease me a bit!

 

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Fine fine.. but anything more outside love

 

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You're looking gorgeous!

 

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Are you happy now?

 

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Yes, I am, now take the rest off!

.....

 

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You know what, let just go outside, it is dark now.

 

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We often hid in the dark, outside the Warrens,

when it was night

 

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We just sat there, looking at the sky, the city was quiet as always and we enjoyed the peace

 

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It was just all ours, without anyone bothering us.

 

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Do you remember how we met? Time really flies

 

Yes I do.. few months ago in the Warrens

 

You were the first person who really helped me, healed me, fostered me, without you I wouldn't be here.

 

But why are you bringing it up?

 

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I often think of the future, you know I don't plan spend my life here in the dirt. I plan to leave the city in the close future

 

Where would you go?

 

I don't know yet, maybe to the tribes, maybe to Karthwasten

 

I see..

 

What about you Gwynolda?

 

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Let's leave together then! 

 

I hoped you'd say that, I could not leave you behind

 

I can be a priestess in Karthwasten or Old Hroldan too, I'm not stuck with this temple, you know . I'm sure they would be happy to get rid me

 

 

I hope not, you are one of their few healers, I fear they might not let you slip that easily! [is that right?]

 

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I'm sure I will find a way, they can't stop us and our love! We settle down first outside of Markarth. Rent a house together, build a garden to practice for farming! I take my knight oath, so I can protect you and our future family! And..

 

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They will extinguish the fires soon. Before we spend the entire night talking about the future plans

 

Yes..

 

We should enjoy the serenity of the night together while we can.

 

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So why don't start kissing it? I know you like it.

 

Kiss it?!

 

Come on, don't be shy.

 

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You are mean you know! (giggles)

 

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(chuckles)

 

Fine, Fine..

 

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Now it's my turn, relax and enjoy the art of Lady Dibella.

 

Ohhhh? What's on your mind?

 

Wait and you see!

 

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So this is..

 

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You came faster today, I guess I was better than last time.

 

You are quite confident today.. really, someone taught you well

 

Well I have a good teacher.

 

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It's my turn right?

 

Maybe later, I rather would just enjoy the night and cuddle with you

 

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We embraced each other in our lay and watched the sky together til the sun risen..

 

Hoping for a future together life, but things didn't worked out.

 

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Not much point to think on her or my past right now, outside to make myself sad...

 

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Sadly it is over now.

 

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I should get ready for my training, my goal to be a knight of the Lily

 

she will be back soon.

 

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And see where is these lessons going..

 

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Author's notes

Spoiler

Ohhh dear ?

 

This chapter was a lot harder to write than expected, especially the dialogues

 

And I fixed up my grammar and structure a bit.

 

Right, it is all jpeg now, so hopefully it loads faster ?

 

 

Edited by Resdayn

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11 minutes ago, Evaloves4 said:

> Well, that was very lovely lesbian scene. ?

 

 ? They done more than just having that you know

 

Thank you Eva ?

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4 minutes ago, Resdayn said:

 

 ? They done more than just having that you know

 

Thank you Eva ?

> I know, but sex mostly interest me in stories :D

> Trilog quit posting his stories about Malicija for her knowledge about sex exist only in her library ;) :classic_tongue:

> Sorry, I ave no more kudos for today.

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4 minutes ago, Evaloves4 said:

> I know, but sex mostly interest me in stories :D

 

? But I do more than sex 

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Like creepy horror stuff once I get around

 

5 minutes ago, Evaloves4 said:

> Trilog quit posting his stories about Malicija for her knowledge about sex exist only in her library ;) :classic_tongue:

 

You can still read about Malicja in the comments

 

5 minutes ago, Evaloves4 said:

> Sorry, I ave no more kudos for today.

 

Awwwww ?

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2 minutes ago, Resdayn said:

 

? But I do more than sex 

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Like creepy horror stuff once I get around

 

> Sorry, but not interested in such things. When I see beautiful girls in the story, I expect only sex and nudity. ;)

> Malicija is very popluar redhead. I miss my Prince's and Ivy's comments about her. :D

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13 hours ago, Evaloves4 said:

> Sorry, but not interested in such things. When I see beautiful girls in the story, I expect only sex and nudity. ;)

> Malicija is very popluar redhead. I miss my Prince's and Ivy's comments about her. :D

 

I can provide pretty girls and nudity and maybe sometimes sensual scenes ?

 

6 hours ago, Talesien said:

Beautiful story thus far. I'm looking forward to the next chapters.

 

Thank you ?

 

I'm glad you enjoying it, more will come ?

 

3 hours ago, worik said:

:classic_ph34r: I fear a bit for her girlfriend ....

 

? I have to agree, sadly signs not look good

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29 minutes ago, Resdayn said:

 

I can provide pretty girls and nudity and maybe sometimes sensual scenes ?

 

 

 

> I'll be very grateful if you do that ?

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Yay! New chapter is already out!!! ?

I know that in the Storyteller's Library your stories are placed under 'immersion' tag, and I think that is a perfect description for them. You really have a talent for creating immersive, atmospheric screenshots which convey feelings even without a text accompanying them. Something that we can clearly see in the flashback of Gwynolda walking through the Warrens. Every shot is filled with despair, destitution and general misery.  While in the wordless, intimate shots there's sensuality and eroticism as well as genuine warmth and attraction.

 

Your version of Dibella's temple feels even stricter and more unforgiving than before. Not only is their punishment for priestesses seems overly zealous and strict (self-flagellation would suit Stendarr's order much more than Dibella's), but it's also borderline degrading.  And that's not to mention that they forgo their vows to spread beauty and love to all people and only apply it to those who can pay or to those that won't draw political ire to them. 

 

The whole flashback scene with Muriel feels sweet but also extremely sad. Muriel's markings and amulet potentially indicate that she's one of the Reachmen's mystics/witches and her mention of the slow but increasing oppression from the Silverblood clan makes me think that at some point she might get into confrontation with them which will not end very well. I do not know whether it was intentional, but I noticed she also interrupted Gwynolda when she was describing their potential life together, as if she knew it wasn't meant to be and she wanted to make a few happy (and sexy) memories together instead.  I'm really looking forward to learning what ultimately happened to her.

 

And of course we also got a nice little hook of Gwynolda mentioning that one Sybill by the name of Saoirse was "erased" from the books. There's definitely a mystery right there. :classic_ph34r:

 

Visually the screenshots are as lovely as ever and the loading speed is MUCH better this time. Thank you for switching to jpegs. ?

Wonderful work as always.  Thank you for sharing your stories with us! ?

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Well, that chapter was quite developed compared to the others. Thus more character development, more atmospheric screens, and more sexual content ! I appreciated how you wrote the sex scene btw, it started as a naked confidences, then as an intimate complicity, skillfully ended before it could get repetitive. Compliments for the screens as well, not only Gwynolda looks mesmerizing, but the differences ambiances are quite well rendered, with vivid lights and colors. Now, the english part got a bit messy at the start of the flashback, I think you shouldn't be afraid to insist a bit more when transitioning towards one scene to another (it felt a bit unclear when/where/who at first since she was talking about Saoirse just before), but that improved rather quickly afterwards. Nice entry overall ! :D?

 

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On 1/2/2023 at 11:39 PM, Evaloves4 said:

> Sorry, I ave no more kudos for today.

You could wait tomorrow then. It's a small price to pay considering the time creators can invest in their stories. :classic_wink:

 

On 1/2/2023 at 11:39 PM, Evaloves4 said:

> I know, but sex mostly interest me in stories :D

> Trilog quit posting his stories about Malicija for her knowledge about sex exist only in her library ;) :classic_tongue:

 

ldyMRSUy_o.png « You very mean that only honey-honey interests you in stories, :classic_tongue:

                 Plus that's very not true, no. »

 

 

18 hours ago, Devianna said:

I know that in the Storyteller's Library your stories are placed under 'immersion' tag, and I think that is a perfect description for them. You really have a talent for creating immersive, atmospheric screenshots which convey feelings even without a text accompanying them. Something that we can clearly see in the flashback of Gwynolda walking through the Warrens. Every shot is filled with despair, destitution and general misery.  While in the wordless, intimate shots there's sensuality and eroticism as well as genuine warmth and attraction.

Damn, now Resdayn is going to think I corrupted Devianna. ? ^^

 

 

 

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5 hours ago, Tirloque said:

 

ldyMRSUy_o.png « You very mean that only honey-honey interests you in stories, :classic_tongue:

                 Plus that's very not true, no. »

 

 

> Why would that be mean? Would you rather like me to pretend and say i like the things I don't? ;)

> Plus, I know, but had to tease you :D

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On 1/3/2023 at 5:23 PM, wilson99 said:

thank you again i enjoy everything what you give us , and all the best for 2023 ?

 

Thank you ?

 

On 1/5/2023 at 2:33 AM, Devianna said:

Yay! New chapter is already out!!! ?

I know that in the Storyteller's Library your stories are placed under 'immersion' tag, and I think that is a perfect description for them. You really have a talent for creating immersive, atmospheric screenshots which convey feelings even without a text accompanying them. Something that we can clearly see in the flashback of Gwynolda walking through the Warrens. Every shot is filled with despair, destitution and general misery.  While in the wordless, intimate shots there's sensuality and eroticism as well as genuine warmth and attraction.

 

Your version of Dibella's temple feels even stricter and more unforgiving than before. Not only is their punishment for priestesses seems overly zealous and strict (self-flagellation would suit Stendarr's order much more than Dibella's), but it's also borderline degrading.  And that's not to mention that they forgo their vows to spread beauty and love to all people and only apply it to those who can pay or to those that won't draw political ire to them. 

 

The whole flashback scene with Muriel feels sweet but also extremely sad. Muriel's markings and amulet potentially indicate that she's one of the Reachmen's mystics/witches and her mention of the slow but increasing oppression from the Silverblood clan makes me think that at some point she might get into confrontation with them which will not end very well. I do not know whether it was intentional, but I noticed she also interrupted Gwynolda when she was describing their potential life together, as if she knew it wasn't meant to be and she wanted to make a few happy (and sexy) memories together instead.  I'm really looking forward to learning what ultimately happened to her.

 

And of course we also got a nice little hook of Gwynolda mentioning that one Sybill by the name of Saoirse was "erased" from the books. There's definitely a mystery right there. :classic_ph34r:

 

Visually the screenshots are as lovely as ever and the loading speed is MUCH better this time. Thank you for switching to jpegs. ?

Wonderful work as always.  Thank you for sharing your stories with us! ?

 

Thank you ?

 

I'm happy my screenshots deliver the intended feelings and emotions ?.

 

I intended to showcase the warrens as it is.

 

As for sex scenes, I tend to prefer them wordless, it's easier to tell that way what I wanted and prefer, I'm not really great with sex talk ?, so I don't really wanna word every moan if not necessary.  Sometimes silence and let the pictures telling it works the best, for more kinky scenes I will use some dialogue.

 

But my intention really was to show an intimate, warm, loving scene between a couple. I'm glad it worked ?

 

Yeah, in the originals I didn't really had the skills in the game and in writing to show case how I wanted the Temple, this time I can and yes it is worser and more darker, as they mentioned their behavior is not really Dibellan ?️‍♂️, there might be more going on there ?

 

Ahh yes Muriel, I wanted showcase, Gwynolda's only warm and sweet part of Markarth, I'm happy it did deliver the intended emotions ?

 

Good eyes on her, her amulet and markings(tho those are common with the reachmen), she might have more in her than it seems ?, but we gonna see what will happened with her in the future chapters.

 

It seems the name Saoirse gonna be something important later on or not ?

 

Yes, jpegs are significantly faster, in the end it was better idea to switch, it also loads the entire entry without broken links.

 

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21 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Well, that chapter was quite developed compared to the others. Thus more character development, more atmospheric screens, and more sexual content ! I appreciated how you wrote the sex scene btw, it started as a naked confidences, then as an intimate complicity, skillfully ended before it could get repetitive. Compliments for the screens as well, not only Gwynolda looks mesmerizing, but the differences ambiances are quite well rendered, with vivid lights and colors. Now, the english part got a bit messy at the start of the flashback, I think you shouldn't be afraid to insist a bit more when transitioning towards one scene to another (it felt a bit unclear when/where/who at first since she was talking about Saoirse just before), but that improved rather quickly afterwards. Nice entry overall ! :D?

 

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Thank you ?

 

This was a bit harder chapter to write, but I'm happy it delivered what I wanted, good flashback, strong emotions, some background for the setting and a little bit of ?

 

Well for the sex scenes, my direction is while context dependent, I wanted showcase as I said in Devi's asnwer.. a loving moment in a couple, slowly building up til we got the scene , little bit of teases, some nudity, then a calm intimate talk, scenes while being naked before the final teases and expression for the desire of the act, then the wordless sex scene ?

 

I wanted make it romantic and sweet, instead of hot if that make sense ?, tho despite everything, I still think it was a good scene in term of that too ^^.

 

Now for the English.

 

I thought it was pretty clear, how Saoirse was someone she couldn't find anything in the book and was a Sybill, and Gwynolda ended the reading, before switching subject for the flashback and started talk about her past lover ?

 

I guess I should use more indications if a flashback happens :classic_angel:

 

?But, what others we been talking about? You mean the very first chapter of the reboot or?

 

 

21 hours ago, Tirloque said:

 

ldyMRSUy_o.png « So that's what the Dibellan artists do...

                 It's a very good thing that I'm not one, 'cause if I had to do this all day, I'll end up with hair stuck on my teeth, uh. :classic_sleep: »

 

 

Well Malicia, Dibellan artists also do art, music, sculpture literature :classic_angel:, she is the goddess of arts too.

 

What Gwynolda did with her lover, was simply what two women do if they really really love each other ?

 

You know Malicia, they can shave down there, it seems you don't do it ?

 

On 1/3/2023 at 2:04 PM, Evaloves4 said:

> I'll be very grateful if you do that ?

 

Well my stories always has nudity, sex depending on the chapter, but so far both chapter had scenes ?

 

On 1/3/2023 at 3:33 PM, worik said:

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17 hours ago, Resdayn said:

I guess I should use more indications if a flashback happens :classic_angel:

 

?But, what others we been talking about? You mean the very first chapter of the reboot or?

You know in fact you don't need a lot of indications to keep the reader on track. It's just like in the movies or in the comic, a handful of words to mention the time or the place if there's a sudden change, and that's it.

 

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You don't always need to indicate those however, but IMO you always need to choose consciously whether you should mention those or not. Smiley_henri_gaud-belin_HFR.gif

17 hours ago, Resdayn said:

?But, what others we been talking about? You mean the very first chapter of the reboot or?

I meant the average of your entries lately. This one was appreciably longer, hence featured more content/events. :classic_smile:

 

 

17 hours ago, Resdayn said:

Well Malicia, Dibellan artists also do art, music, sculpture literature :classic_angel:, she is the goddess of arts too.

 

What Gwynolda did with her lover, was simply what two women do if they really really love each other ?

 

ldyMRSUy_o.png « I can do books as well, I very work in Tirloque's library. Plus some guys called me a goddess sometimes as well, you see ? :classic_sleepy: »

 

17 hours ago, Resdayn said:

You know Malicia, they can shave down there, it seems you don't do it ?

ldyMRSUy_o.png « I very wonder how you'd know that. ?

               Plus I very do it a little. Even Tabi does it a bit, so it doesn't stick out of the panties, you see ? ? »

 

 

On 1/6/2023 at 3:09 AM, Evaloves4 said:

> Why would that be mean? Would you rather like me to pretend and say i like the things I don't? ;)

> Plus, I know, but had to tease you :D

ldyMRSUy_o.png « It very worked, yes. :classic_happy: »

 

 

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I think the outside scenes are my favorite from this chapter. The chat about the future was very heartwarming and the ambience and the posing are fantastic! Keep up hun ❤️

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On 1/7/2023 at 2:23 PM, Tirloque said:

You know in fact you don't need a lot of indications to keep the reader on track. It's just like in the movies or in the comic, a handful of words to mention the time or the place if there's a sudden change, and that's it.

 

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You don't always need to indicate those however, but IMO you always need to choose consciously whether you should mention those or not. Smiley_henri_gaud-belin_HFR.gif

I meant the average of your entries lately. This one was appreciably longer, hence featured more content/events. :classic_smile:

 

 

 

ldyMRSUy_o.png « I can do books as well, I very work in Tirloque's library. Plus some guys called me a goddess sometimes as well, you see ? :classic_sleepy: »

 

ldyMRSUy_o.png « I very wonder how you'd know that. ?

               Plus I very do it a little. Even Tabi does it a bit, so it doesn't stick out of the panties, you see ? ? »

 

 

I guess I could put a sign what says scene switch or flashback :classic_angel:, tho I feel seeing the scene being switched to a different location works well too ?

 

Well experience and you can.. see they don't have bushes ?, so you can assume no hair gonna stuck anywhere ?

 

 

10 hours ago, EphraimTiHorny said:

I think the outside scenes are my favorite from this chapter. The chat about the future was very heartwarming and the ambience and the posing are fantastic! Keep up hun ❤️

 

I'm glad you like it ?

 

I like the outside scenes too the most, inside scenes supposed deliver a more grim mood, while the latter is the most warmest of the chapter ?

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The shots in the warrens were really atmospheric, well done.

 

As far as flashbacks go I found it easy to follow but if you do want to add a visual indicator of some sort I always liked Devianna's different border colors to represent flashback scenes.

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12 minutes ago, SpyVsPie said:

The shots in the warrens were really atmospheric, well done.

 

As far as flashbacks go I found it easy to follow but if you do want to add a visual indicator of some sort I always liked Devianna's different border colors to represent flashback scenes.

 

Thank you ?

 

That.. actually a very good idea

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7 hours ago, Collygon said:

I'm really loving this rewrite so far. It's engaging and the character development is starting strong.

 

Thank you ?

 

This chapter was quite hard to write actually ?, but I wanted make sure Gwynolda get what she missed last time.

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Her background wasn't expanded as I hoped, so she get all her treats now, and this is just the beginning ?

 

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