Nice and realistic feel over that introduction. Only a handful of screens so far, but I like the details of your models. And a male character feels refreshing in the overly female LL's fictional scene. As for the writing, it's fluid and easy to read, but you're kinda not used to tenses usage/concordance. I'll wait to see clear examples to point out what could be correct. Anyway, pleasant read. ?

Malicia : « Tirloque says gals stories aren't refreshing 'cause they're very silly almost every time.

               But when the girl is very intelligent, very pretty, and very strong ; then her story is very refreshing too.   »

4 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Nice and realistic feel over that introduction. Only a handful of screens so far, but I like the details of your models. And a male character feels refreshing in the overly female LL's fictional scene. As for the writing, it's fluid and easy to read, but you're kinda not used to tenses usage/concordance. I'll wait to see clear examples to point out what could be correct. Anyway, pleasant read. ?

 

Malicia : « Tirloque says gals stories aren't refreshing 'cause they're very silly almost every time.

 

               But when the girl is very intelligent, very pretty, and very strong ; then her story is very refreshing too.   »

Thanks again for your feedback.

I think I know what you mean with tenses usage/concordance.

It's not always easy to decide what past tense to use.

I hope my three stories offer some freshness. Sandra and Becci are both still very young and need to find their place in the world. So, I won't say they are strong at the moment. But hopefully my writing will let them become strong. ?

Bruce already had something to learn in his life. Now he is starting another period of his life that will hold new challanges for him and hopefully make him even stronger.

My overall target is definitely to tell a meaningful story that also has some adult content.

I don't want to show you some adult content that also has a little bit of background story.