Hi Jotunn,

Regarding the story itself, it features colored and crispy screens, with nice textures and facial expressions (particularly for a Sims 4 base). Aside from a few typos, the writing part seems good, and with a rather fluid style. So, storywise, the potential is there. 

However, if I may, I don't think that posting all those all at once is a good thing, neither in terms of days of presence, nor in terms of consideration to the others bloggers (6/23 entries is nearly 30% of the main page for you alone ! ). We're a community, and acting as if the others did not exist is something frowned upon by the other authors. If I were you, I would use the scheduling option of the entries to publish them little by little instead.

For example :

— Click on "edit entry" at the bottom of the Bruce Prologue

— At the lower par of the page, under the "publish" gree toggle, you've got a menu with a date : enter 28-06-2020, and untick the "publish now tickbox", then click save.
— This will effectively schedule the entry to be published in three days from now, automatically.

I would consider setting the 28-06-20 for your two Bruce entries, and the 01-07-2020 for the two Becci ones ; while letting the Sandra ones untouched.

Regards,

Tirloque
 

9 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Hi Jotunn,

 

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Regards,

 

Tirloque
 

Hi Tirloque,

thanks for your feedback, very appreciated.

Typos? Damn, I read thru it several times. I need a lector, haha.

That's the problem if you are not a native speaker, I guess...

Regarding releasing all at once:

For me it was important to start with a relativly high amount of content. First, I wanted to publish it in a forum thread, but then I got the feeling, that the blog functionality might suit better.

I had thoughts about to schedule the publish date, but I have seen that other have released several entries the same time too. But you are right, I am not the others and if the community don't likes authors releasing more blog entries at once, I will follow this guidline.

I will do as you suggested and create a schedule for story 2 and 3.

Regards,

Jotunn

1 hour ago, Jotunn25 said:

Regarding releasing all at once:

For me it was important to start with a relativly high amount of content. First, I wanted to publish it in a forum thread, but then I got the feeling, that the blog functionality might suit better.

I had thoughts about to schedule the publish date, but I have seen that other have released several entries the same time too. But you are right, I am not the others and if the community don't likes authors releasing more blog entries at once, I will follow this guidline.

I will do as you suggested and create a schedule for story 2 and 3.

 

Regards,

Jotunn

In fact, in order to get followers, regularity is more important than quantity : if you publish each x days or each x weeks (let's say once per week), people who have liked your entries in the past will start knowing and even awaiting them, and you'll get more chance to get infrequent visitors that way as well.

As for the other author who published 5-6 entries at once, well it's a rare example of me failing to make someone understand that being part of a community also implies to respect the others. You however understood it right off the bat, and for that, you have earned my respect. In the name of LL storytellers, thank you !

1 hour ago, Jotunn25 said:

Hi Tirloque,

 

thanks for your feedback, very appreciated.

Typos? Damn, I read thru it several times. I need a lector, haha.

That's the problem if you are not a native speaker, I guess...

Here are the two most obvious I noticed :

Collage -> College did deviate me from my strong feelings that what my dad is doing is not right.

My mom is still sending me money. Without her help, I won't -> wouldn't be able to pay for this beautiful apartment (...)

But those are minor, I'm just quoting the for the sake of discussion, usually I only mention them to draw the author's attention on them, or if they're really altering the desired meaning.

Anyway, since the amount of new entries is more digest now, I'm going to take a look at your other one right away. ?

1 hour ago, Tirloque said:

Here are the two most obvious I noticed :

Collage -> College did deviate me from my strong feelings that what my dad is doing is not right.

My mom is still sending me money. Without her help, I won't -> wouldn't be able to pay for this beautiful apartment (...)

 

 

But those are minor, I'm just quoting the for the sake of discussion, usually I only mention them to draw the author's attention on them, or if they're really altering the desired meaning.

 

Anyway, since the amount of new entries is more digest now, I'm going to take a look at your other one right away. ?

Yeah, that's what I meant.

The tool I use is not smart enough to put the words / phrases into context.

And I am not (yet?) experienced enough to recognize it myself.

Let me think about if I want to change something on the way I review my work...