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Shea's Story-Act 2- Chapter 13


BoLtStEr2002

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In Whiterun...

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Shea: Now where is it she said she'd be?

 

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Shea: Was it the Temple of Kynareth? I don't why she'd want to go there, seems like a terrible idea.

 

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Shea: I personally don't think she'd be welcome, they don't usually like vampires. 

 

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Shea: Actually I don't think anyone really does, I should probably get ready to help her.

 

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Shouting and Yellling...

 

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Shea: Seems I'll be interrupting then.

 

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Rose: I have a right to be here!

 

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Acolyte: Your presence here is an affront to Kynareth night crawler!

 

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Acolyte: She celebrates everything natural, not formed from dark magic and evil!

 

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Rose: And your presence here is an affront to my eyes! And you look as if you've been formed from an unnatural bond between a woman and a bull!

 

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Rose: Can you tell him to stop being a bitch and just let me get some supplies?

 

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Shea: Wha- You're bringing me into this now?

 

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Acolyte: Oh great! Another bloodsucker!

 

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Shea: Now I'm voluntarily getting into this!

 

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Rose: I think I'll let you deal with him then.

 

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Shea: So priest, I bid you get to know me before making those pathetic remarks.

 

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Shea: Maybe a swift slice up might change your mind!

 

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Rose: Okay that got heated quick, I don't think he's worth it Shea.

 

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Shea: Fine whatever, don't bring me into an argument if you don't want me to finish it.

 

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Outside the temple...

 

Rose: I'm sure the citizens will hear of that soon, we need to leave, I hear Windhelm is a little more tolerant.

 

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Shea: Windhelm? More tolerant? You must be joking.

 

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Shea: Or wanting the start of a witch hunt for us.

 

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Rose: I've lived there for years and not had a problem I'm sure we'll be fine.

 

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Rose: Just trust me alright?

 

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The next night...

 

Shea: Actually, this is better than I thought it'd be.

 

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Rose: It's one of the better towns, despite obvious racial issues.

 

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Shea: So what's the plan then?

 

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Shea: Because we can't just live here forever.

 

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Rose: You like organisation huh?

 

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Rose: Fine, first I'm going to get changed out of my travelling clothes, I'd advise you do the same.

 

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Rose: Then we rest a little bit, gain some energy to do something, or use the energy, I'd prefer the latter.

 

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Rose: And finally we carry on like we have. 

 

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Rose: As I said though, I'm going to get changed and revel a bit in my history.

 

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Rose: Not getting changed?

 

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Rose: I mean with how you're thinking of me I know you'd prefer to be naked around me, so why keep your grubby travelling things on?

 

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Shea: Honestly, I think I left them in Whiterun.

 

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Rose: (Laughs) Well we're both women here, don't worry about being naked, besides you want that anyway. I'll just lock the door for you.

 

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Rose: I promise not to do anything to extraordinary to you.

 

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Rose: Actually, you look pretty good with nothing on, I might have to join you.

 

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Shea: But I can't help but feel a little embarrassed though.

 

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Rose: It's natural when you're exposing everything to someone, don't worry about it. And besides naked is the favourite state I like to see people. That was a perk of my prior job.

 

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Shea: Well, as long as you're fine with at, I guess I'll have to manage.

 

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Rose: Oh you will, I might have a little fun with you as well.

 

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Shea: Wha-?!

 

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Rose: I do pay attention to your thoughts you know.

 

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Shea: Maybe I should stop thinking about sex as much...

 

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Rose: Please don't stop thinking about it, it's really nice to be admired.

 

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Rose: Well since we've established something sexy is something we'd both enjoy, go to the bed. Now

 

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Shea: (Wow, well this could be interesting)

 

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Shea: Yes, Rose...I mean uh mistress

 

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Rose: Now lean over the bed, hands on the frame.

 

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Shea: (This is...different.)

 

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Shea: Is this right miss?

 

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Rose: Perfect, now put your hands behind your ass.

 

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Shea: Like this?

 

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Rose: Like that, but remember address me as mistress or miss.

 

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Shea: Okay miss, but what are you going to do with me?

 

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Rose: Okay bend over and finger yourself, your pussy or ass, I don't mind.

 

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Shea: Is that all, miss?

 

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Rose: I can't tell whether that's a challenge or an acknowledgement.

 

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Rose: Are you shaking already? I'll assume it was a challenge then. Stop!

 

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Shea: But miss I was close...

 

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Rose: You think I care?! Hands over your ass now, I don't want to give you a chance to touch yourself.

 

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Shea: Okay...mistress, but-

 

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Rose: As I said, I don't care, so unless you want punishment you'll listen.

 

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Rose: Now you can go and get on the bed.

 

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Shea: Okay miss.

 

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Rose: Good, but don't say 'okay miss' say 'yes miss'

 

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Shea: Now what miss?

 

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Shea: What do you want me to do miss?

 

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Rose: You? Nothing, just stay sat like that, legs wide, until I say you don't have to.

 

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Shea: Yes mistress, whatever you wish.

 

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Shea: Aren't you just wonderful miss?

 

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Rose: And you're quite the charmer, but I like being in control.

 

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Rose: So lean back and relax as I said to.

 

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Shea: Fine then, but I do feel a bit useless doing nothing, miss.

 

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Rose: Fine if you want to be closer we can be.

 

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Rose: Is this better for you?

 

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Shea: Yes, mistress... I-

 

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Both: (Kiss)

 

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A minute or so later...

 

Rose: Well now I'm on top of there's plenty more I can do with you.

 

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Rose: Now keep your legs wide, I don't want them to move unless I say you can.

 

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An hour or so later...

 

Shea: Miss what are you doing?

 

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Rose: Helping you relax of course.

 

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Shea: Well thank you, but I'm fine miss.

 

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Rose: Aftercare is important you should know that.

 

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Rose: No don't move, just listen to me and stay.

 

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Rose: Besides we don't have anywhere to go.

 

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Shea: Fine you're right miss.

 

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Rose: Hey look at me, you don't have to call me miss after the act is done.

 

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Shea: Understood

 

 

 

Thanks for reading and waiting for my ass to do this, so thank you. Feel free to leave me some improvements I could make it really helps me

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Quite a hot chapter, with beautiful screens. What could be improved ? Well, IMO :

  • More work-upon the scenario part. Having beautiful scenes is something, but having the reader hooked wanting to know what happens next is better. Don't let the plot and twists loosen too much.

 

  • A more defined vampire ambiance. Some vampires can bear the sun provided they feed well ; but we don't see any feeding, any vampiric powers, and the sun seem to be merely a tool for your characters to improve their tan. And when they're discovered, they don't seem that much bothered by it (whereas one could suppose that letting a witness alive might lead to a true monster hunt). The only vampire feat is Shea being tormented by Molag Bal in fact. IMO your problem is that you're caught in-between TES lore vampires (wo can withstand sun to a certain degree) and... let's say Twilight's (which might be somewhere between a vampire story and a teenager soap opera). You should settle what are the strengths, the need and the weaknesses of the vampires of your word once and for all, and the rest should follow.

 

As for the technical side of image management, you've got it down so I see nothing else to say in that regard. K5RIBNNq_o.gif

 

 

Malicia : « Hey, Mr Bolster ! I've thought on an improvement : Shea should return to her tiny castle, and kiss the true Gabriel on the mouth, yes. That way, she'd be much more satisfied, trust me. :classic_sleepy: »

 

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3 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Quite a hot chapter, with beautiful screens. What could be improved ? Well, IMO :

  • More work-upon the scenario part. Having beautiful scenes is something, but having the reader hooked wanting to know what happens next is better. Don't let the plot and twists loosen too much.

 

Sometimes my game isn't up to what it should be, I'll try and think of something better for next time.

 

3 hours ago, Tirloque said:

 

A more defined vampire ambiance. Some vampires can bear the sun provided they feed well ; but we don't see any feeding, any vampiric powers, and the sun seem to be merely a tool for your characters to improve their tan. And when they're discovered, they don't seem that much bothered by it (whereas one could suppose that letting a witness alive might lead to a true monster hunt). The only vampire feat is Shea being tormented by Molag Bal in fact. IMO your problem is that you're caught in-between TES lore vampires (wo can withstand sun to a certain degree) and... let's say Twilight's (which might be somewhere between a vampire story and a teenager soap opera). You should settle what are the strengths, the need and the weaknesses of the vampires of your word once and for all, and the rest should follow.

Difficult for me to do. Feeding and other things: You can only do so much with vanilla animations, but I'm trying to work on something for that (Emphasis on try).

 Blood and stuff: Well I have no idea how to create wearable meshes and textures.

Powers and things: I can work on that.

Lore wise it was actually supposed to be a mix between TES lore and the Witcher style of vampires. 

 

Thanks for the feedback its been awhile since I felt I had something to really improve.

 

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