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Short Story: Demon Queen Nara


kingkururu

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Demon Queen Nara


Sometimes, whatever darkness lies within Nara takes over her body and twists her personality into someone much crueler. Nara has little control over this 'Demon Queen', and her memories of the Queen's actions are often erased.

 

 

 

 

 

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EDIT: So I made a lot of changes with the edit, mostly with how the dialogue is presented. Story is pretty much the same, with more refined dialogue and some added pictures! Not sure if more ppl will read this, but I would like feedback on this new style!

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Nara has kind of an hallucinated expression on the fifth screen, good job. :)

 

EDIT : I see you modified the screens by inserting the text into it. I think it's a bit better than the original, as there is no doubt with what image is associated the dialog. Be careful not to overly reuse the same images though, or slightly pan them to make them feel different to the reader. :)

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Nara has kind of an hallucinated expression on the fifth screen, good job. :)

Thanks. I try my best to get good emotions on the characters :D

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:lol: Nice! Is that a custom armor Nara is wearing? ^_^

 

It's the Lady Devil Armor by Ninirim :)

 

Can't seem to find that Patreon page for it

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:lol: Nice! Is that a custom armor Nara is wearing? ^_^

It's the Lady Devil Armor by Ninirim :)

 

Can't seem to find that Patreon page for it

 

Here;s the link for the armor:

https://www.patreon....y-from-13133334

 

Nice! Thank you so much ;) Wow and you also updated the Pics. Nice I mentioned on someone else's blog entry how I liked that style of the words being on the picture like in comics and that other story tellers on LL should try it. You got it pretty close to comic style but good enough for me. It makes it more appealing to the eye and easier to read. That's the type of approach that's good to have when you wanna draw people in to read your material. :D:);) 

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