Well, where to start ? The effort for making this a comic is appreciable and inviting to the read, and so are the colorful images, and your conflicted heroine (who seems to have trouble resisting some urges ). But there seem to be clarity issues that hinder the read :

• First, the images seems not to be in the right order (we get a fight in what could be the reach, then suddenly she's have intercourse with the thalmor, then debriefing at Windhelm, then Talos, Boethiah, then back to the thalmor guy). It's confusing. Maybe dividing the images into scenes, and placing them one scene per spoiler could help you get them sorted ?
• Then a large amount of images fail to load. This is due to PNG being inadequate for storytelling, I would recommend switching to jpeg instead.
• And lastly, unless you're writing a manga, the correct reading order for your bubbles is left to right, then top to bottom. The dialogue with the deity at the end is reversed (you started right to left), and so readers will have trouble getting it.

Anyway, don't let that discourage you, your story has potential, if above mentioned points are taken care of. Anyway, nice share !

> Agree with Trilog. Page opens too slow regardless of having good Internet speed. You posted too much heavy stuff on one page. I couldn't open anything since loading was so slow that i got "the page opening expired..."

10 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Well, where to start ? The effort for making this a comic is appreciable and inviting to the read, and so are the colorful images, and your conflicted heroine (who seems to have trouble resisting some urges ). But there seem to be clarity issues that hinder the read :

 

• First, the images seems not to be in the right order (we get a fight in what could be the reach, then suddenly she's have intercourse with the thalmor, then debriefing at Windhelm, then Talos, Boethiah, then back to the thalmor guy). It's confusing. Maybe dividing the images into scenes, and placing them one scene per spoiler could help you get them sorted ?
• Then a large amount of images fail to load. This is due to PNG being inadequate for storytelling, I would recommend switching to jpeg instead.
• And lastly, unless you're writing a manga, the correct reading order for your bubbles is left to right, then top to bottom. The dialogue with the deity at the end is reversed (you started right to left), and so readers will have trouble getting it.

 

Anyway, don't let that discourage you, your story has potential, if above mentioned points are taken care of. Anyway, nice share !

I know.
I'm a beginner and so I don't have all the notions yet.
I would use the jpeg format.
As for the Thalmor, after this chapter, there will be more sex scenes with the Thalmor.

After this chapter, I had a hard time.
There were some glitches.
I don't know if it came from the translator (I'm French) or from the computer.
For example, in the vignette where she floats above the ground, she should say that she feels a divine power inside her. But it copied me the text from before.
And as it was late, I didn't want to redo everything.