Glad to see you fixed the problem.

Very nice episode and I'm thrilled to see beautiful Shea. Thank you.

4 hours ago, Elf Prince said:

Glad to see you fixed the problem.

Very nice episode and I'm thrilled to see beautiful Shea. Thank you.

Your welcome! I'm glad you enjoyed the episode

Well, if I had to mention something is that you tend to skip spectacular parts. For example, fights (the one with Vlad, the one against Draconham's soldiers), climbing down the choke in this episode, torture (we do see Orianna very salty when talking to Shea, but in the end we don't see her being broken in any way ; same for Molag Bal : as the Prince of rape, he seemed to love talking way more instead). Showing or not showing those is a choice as they make the story more violent, yet also more spectacular and emotionally shaking for the reader. You have to choose what degree of realism you want, but if you do skip all the action altogether (even fights that could be rendered without blood), IMO there will be missing things. And second you won't acquire the skill to do those (even if at first is only one or two screens per sequence).

Anyway, the story is still pleasant, and I noticed you took in consideration the feedback provided so far.

5 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Well, if I had to mention something is that you tend to skip spectacular parts. For example, fights (the one with Vlad, the one against Draconham's soldiers), climbing down the choke in this episode, torture (we do see Orianna very salty when talking to Shea, but in the end we don't see her being broken in any way ; same for Molag Bal : as the Prince of rape, he seemed to love talking way more instead). Showing or not showing those is a choice as they make the story more violent, yet also more spectacular and emotionally shaking for the reader. You have to choose what degree of realism you want, but if you do skip all the action altogether (even fights that could be rendered without blood), IMO there will be missing things. And second you won't acquire the skill to do those (even if at first is only one or two screens per sequence).

 

Anyway, the story is still pleasant, and I noticed you took in consideration the feedback provided so far.

 

 

I certainly will take on the advice about Molag Bal, to be honest I did plan to have them, but due to some time constraints and family being over at my place, I couldn't properly make the rape scenes, but when Molag Bal is shown next, I'll make sure that the Daedric Lord of Domination is properly shown. In regards to the fighting, I'd love to have them, but my game has a lot of issues, blood doesn't appear anywhere and I haven't used editing software for years. Also Halo's Poser doesn't seem to work in any of my games. (FNIS doesn't register it) so I can't get any of the action poses, from mods that are addons to it. I have no idea how to fix the issue so I'm missing out on many poses involving weapons. And since I have no knowledge of animation I can't make my own. Although if you could suggest any fixes for the issue, or any pose mods that involve weaponry (that don't require Halo's Poser) it would be greatly appreciated. 

37 minutes ago, BoLtStEr2002 said:

I certainly will take on the advice about Molag Bal, to be honest I did plan to have them, but due to some time constraints and family being over at my place, I couldn't properly make the rape scenes, but when Molag Bal is shown next, I'll make sure that the Daedric Lord of Domination is properly shown. In regards to the fighting, I'd love to have them, but my game has a lot of issues, blood doesn't appear anywhere and I haven't used editing software for years. Also Halo's Poser doesn't seem to work in any of my games. (FNIS doesn't register it) so I can't get any of the action poses, from mods that are addons to it. I have no idea how to fix the issue so I'm missing out on many poses involving weapons. And since I have no knowledge of animation I can't make my own. Although if you could suggest any fixes for the issue, or any pose mods that involve weaponry (that don't require Halo's Poser) it would be greatly appreciated. 

Well I'm not the best at doing action scenes either, but I'm improving and over time found a few pose mods that indeed do not require Halo's Poser :

- Gomapero poses (which can be found on his tumblr or on Halo's site, though it does not requires it)

- Collygon's poser, from a fellow LL storyteller

- Director's tool (very useful, allows you to play every animation from vanilla game and tweak the effects. You'll find it on the nexus)

You'll have to use your imagination to use some animations/poses in ways there weren't intended to, but only with these you can already do quite a lot of things. And coming from a Game of Thrones adept, I'm sure you'll have plenty of inspiration available.

As for time, you'll see that getting an action scene to be as you want it is quite time consuming. But that's not a problem, do not spend more time than you do : just publish slower. It's better to get one good entry per month/week than to publish twice a week entries you could have improved otherwise.

52 minutes ago, Tirloque said:

Well I'm not the best at doing action scenes either, but I'm improving and over time found a few pose mods that indeed do not require Halo's Poser :

- Gomapero poses (which can be found on his tumblr or on Halo's site, though it does not requires it)

- Collygon's poser, from a fellow LL storyteller

- Director's tool (very useful, allows you to play every animation from vanilla game and tweak the effects. You'll find it on the nexus)

 

You'll have to use your imagination to use some animations/poses in ways there weren't intended to, but only with these you can already do quite a lot of things. And coming from a Game of Thrones adept, I'm sure you'll have plenty of inspiration available.

 

As for time, you'll see that getting an action scene to be as you want it is quite time consuming. But that's not a problem, do not spend more time than you do : just publish slower. It's better to get one good entry per month/week than to publish twice a week entries you could have improved otherwise.

Thank you for the pose mods, I've currently been using Gomapero poses, but I've never used Collygon's poser, maybe next time I might have more interesting poses.