Character sheets ! Well that was just the thing I lacked to understand the several storyline of your story ('didn't even get that Camilla and the desert Princess were the same person ^^) ! Don't hesitate to add more narration (some sentences or even small paragraphs) directly in your story though, grammatical mistakes were very minor while it helps greatly to follow the scenario.

Malicia : « Someone actually got executed at Helgen ? No way !! Maybe the script with the dragon got broken ? Anyway, I'm very sorry for your loss, Caroline, yes. »