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Revenge


bodabira 01

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Bandit: Ah you little whore! That burns!
Leandra: It should! Hahaha!

 

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Bandit: Not so tough now are you? Hahaha!
Leandra: No please stop...
Bandit: Stop? No I'll cum in you!
Leandra: What? No you bastard! Don't you dare...

 

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Bandit: Nghh! Now that was good. You know what? I think I'll let you go.

 

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This bastard will pay for what he did to me.

 

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Bandit: Now more! I yield!
Leandra: Do you now? First I'll tie you up and then I'll see what I will do to you...

 

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Leandra Hmmm what shall I do?
Bandit: Please don't do anything that will hurt me.
Leandra: No. I think you will enjoy this just as much as I will.

 

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Leandra: Now that's - hmpf - that's better don't you think?
Bandit: No please stop it! I'm sorry!

 

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Leandra: Are you now? Well I think I'm gonna leave you here.
Bandit: Thank you for your kindness.
Leandra: I didn't finish my sentence scum! I'll leave you here to bleed out like a pig.
Bandit: No pl- aagh!

 

Now I had my revenge

 

 

 

 

So that was my first blog. I hope you enjoyed it and feel free to comment :)

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Not bad for a start, but though screens aren't bad, it doesn't really makes sense that a woman just raped gets instantly able to wipe-out her opponent afterwards, and then wants to have sex again with him. Feel free to get more realistic than in videogames when you create stories, it's a good opportunity for it. =)

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Not bad for a start, but though screens aren't bad, it doesn't really makes sense that a woman just raped gets instantly able to wipe-out her opponent afterwards, and then wants to have sex again with him. Feel free to get more realistic than in videogames when you create stories, it's a good opportunity for it. =)

 

Thank you for the support. :D Yeah I thought so but I wanted to try a blog soo :)

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Pretty much what Tirloque said. Try making the images larger as well, it helps with pacing for the reader. It is awkward to stop, open the image, then closing it and continuing. Also, I pretty much tell everyone this, try adding more writing. I did not know that the Leandra was experiencing a flashback until after the fourth photo. I'm not sure where you plan on taking this blog, whether it be a story line or just a collaboration of things, but I do want to see it blossom. Keep it up :D

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Pretty much what Tirloque said. Try making the images larger as well, it helps with pacing for the reader. It is awkward to stop, open the image, then closing it and continuing. Also, I pretty much tell everyone this, try adding more writing. I did not know that the Leandra was experiencing a flashback until after the fourth photo. I'm not sure where you plan on taking this blog, whether it be a story line or just a collaboration of things, but I do want to see it blossom. Keep it up :D

Thank you! :D Maybe it's a dumb question but how do I make the images large? 

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I like her revenge to her rapist. You did all good. As upper people said: maybe you can make your pictures larger.

If you want to make them larger you have to upload them to some host like Flickr or imgbox. The registration is free. Once you upload them, just Copy/paste. :)

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Thank you! :D Maybe it's a dumb question but how do I make the images large? 

 

On your image hosting site, you have the choice between thumbnail (reduced images) and direct link. Use the second option if you want to bigger images. :)

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I like her revenge to her rapist. You did all good. As upper people said: maybe you can make your pictures larger.

If you want to make them larger you have to upload them to some host like Flickr or imgbox. The registration is free. Once you upload them, just Copy/paste. :)

 

Thank you :D

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Thank you! :D Maybe it's a dumb question but how do I make the images large? 

 

On your image hosting site, you have the choice between thumbnail (reduced images) and direct link. Use the second option if you want to bigger images. :)

 

 

Thank you :)

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One more thing. Don't ever delete the pictures you uploaded to the picture host. If you do that, they will also be deleted from your blog. Leave them on the host. :)

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One more thing. Don't ever delete the pictures you uploaded to the picture host. If you do that, they will also be deleted from your blog. Leave them on the host. :)

 

Okay :D

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