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The Sabers tooth (Chapter l)

GimmeBACON

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"Are we there yet?" Diane groaned, obviously exhausted from the winding roads of her first long expedition, in truth, we were all tired, and sore. The carriage driver had spared no expense in making his cart as uncomfortable as possible, and with his lame mare, it felt as if the trip would have been quicker on foot. "Does it look like we're there, idiot?" Hilda retorted, a mix of frustration and wear in her voice. "Hush now, both of you, we'll get there soon enough." my words sounding more of a question then truth. "Of course," Quinn interjected enthusiastically, "Markarth is just on the other side of this mountain, shouldn't take more then ten minutes." Thank the divines.
"I can't wait. I'm SO hungry" I scoffed, Diane always was a glutton. "I just want a bed," Hilda exclaimed, stretching her legs out onto my lap. "We DO have beds right?" "Well..." Oh no, he didn't. "You and Diane are going to have to share a bed for a little while, sorry" Hilda didn't even seem fazed by his words, I doubt she even had the energy to pitch a fit.

 

The gates of Markarth seemed so foreign, so alien. As old as the city is, it was as if it was never meant to be there in the first place. The city felt like something you would see in your dreams, with a unique and strange beauty. It would have been amazing, had it not been for the people. As we walked along the street, nobody would greet us, or even look us in the eyes. The atmosphere made me feel uneasy, and I had hoped that it was just my imagination playing games with me.

 

As we walked up the steps to Vlindrel Hall, I saw an older gentleman approaching us. "Quinn, it's good to see you again friend." "Thongvor, likewise my friend. How have you been?" "Dealing with that damned Thalmor puppet has been quite stressful" "Puppet?" I inquired, immediately regretting as the words escaped my lips. I've known men long enough to know what they want, and this man was less discreet then most. I watched as his eyes violated me and fought the urge to hide behind Quinn and Stoik. "And who are you?" "This is my wife, Fiona" "Pleasure to meet you ma'am, I'm talking about Igmund, the 'Jarl', so he claims, he's a figurehead, a coward. He will fall soon enough,and the Silver-Blood family will take what belongs to us, believe that." "Well Thongvor, I hate to end this conversation like this, but were all quite tired, I'll see you tomorrow?" "Of course my friend," His eyes meeting mine one last time before turning around. "I'm sure we'll all speak again soon enough."

 

"Who was that man?" Stoik asked, clearly suspicious of him. "That was Thongvor Silver-Blood, they own the mine here in Markarth." "I don't trust him" For reasons I dare not say out loud. Quinn sighed softly as he wrapped his arm around my waist. "Just stay out of his way, the Silver-Bloods are the law."

 


To those who read this, thank you for your time. I hope you enjoy reading this as much as I enjoyed writing it. Also a small warning, this story is going to get rather dark soon enough. I hope that doesn't offend you all. As always leave a comment if you enjoy my work, I'm the type of person who gets motivated when I know people enjoy what I do. :blush:

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Swiftstep

Swiftstep

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Once again, nicely written. Thanks for sharing. Style and format is good, too. Nothing to criticize on your story.

 

One thing though:  I was the first to "like" it - I'm afraid, that with all those other blogs with lots of shiny pics, your blog might not get the attention it deserves. You might be better of with implementing some pictures - no photo story, but... hm.. not even comic-style. One or two nice pics should do it. For this chapter: picture of Markarth, with the sun shining down over the mountain or something like that.

GimmeBACON

GimmeBACON

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Yeah, I thought about putting images in but that takes forever. The problem is if I were to do that it would require a lot of pre-planned setup, and while I know the basic of the story, I write off the top of my head and without a strict script. It's really sad to many people just skim through these blogs looking for pretty pictures, what's kind of depressing is I don't even know if the amount of views I got even read the story or were just looking for pictures. Thank you for the like, it means a lot, and I am taking the pictures into serious consideration just so my writing even has a chance. 

 

As it is, I feel like, while I promised myself to finish her story, the overall reaction isn't giving me any interest in writing any of my other characters stories. Sad but silence is deafening, you know.

Swiftstep

Swiftstep

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It's easier to sell something with a picture, and it's again easier with a moving picture. We all know the phenomena, we see it every day (e. g. commercials). Don't take it personally, or don't regard your work of less interest for the community - people come here for the spice from dozens of cultures all around the globe. Your work can be permanent part here, if people get to know you - if you manage to reach them.

 

And that is easier with a symbol that connects your work with it. And that would need at least one picture. Yes, it might be more work - but nobody says, that it has to be down by you! I would be surprised if one ot the people here deceides to contribute to your work with a picture - maybe something drown, or a high-class screenshot.

 

The "no" you already have - all you can get is a "yes": :)

GimmeBACON

GimmeBACON

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I appreciate you trying to inspire me, but my inner cynic kicks in and makes the majority of this site irk me. Part of me thinks to myself, "If nobody can appreciate or even comment on something without tits, and I don't generally take pictures like that, why should I compromise and give in to the people that are irritating me in the first place?" That and I'm trying to create a story and not just give people even more eye-candy. 

 

I know this site is a lot of fun, but when a naked picture gets like 1000 views, 50 likes and 30 comments, and an attempt at a story with any depth gets ignored... it's like I said, I don't know how many people even read my story or just clicked on it hoping for tits.

 

I am going to put more pictures in, and am going through the tedious task of staging scenes for the pictures, but I really hate doing it. I don't know, some people like taking pictures of the game, i like playing the game.

Swiftstep

Swiftstep

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It's of no use if you feel negative about the way it is - yes, many people only come here for tits and sexy shots. But there are artist here, too. You can't change it, but you can use it - without perverting your story and your ideas.

 

No need to bring sexy shots within your stories. Landscape shots might be sufficient - may in first person view.. so that people have to imagine the story teller.

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