Dancer and A lustrous stage

[VengeanceXXX]

 

Dancer and A lustrous Stage

 

Hi guys, I worked on something simple that I think most of you can appreciate.

It's not a full-blown story of any kind, in fact it's a prequel to something else that I had on my mind, but I had no time to actually make.

I might make the actual story-line somewhere in the future, but no promises.

 

Some of you might know me from my previous project, "Ethan's legacy" or "Daryce" which went down after I realized it was emotionally unhealthy for me to continue.

I definitely did disappoint a lot of people and angered some, to which I completely understand and I truly apologize for what happened.

I still felt terrible about it.

 

Now things have been looking up for me, and I managed to find some time to make something I truly enjoy making.

This is what I've worked on for quite a while now. This small project had been a blast for me, and I wanted to share it with everyone.

 

This is a WILD departure from what I made before, and I ask you to enjoy this with an open mind.

 

Thanks again, and I hope that everyone can have a good day.

 

Links :

MAC - Version

PC - Version

 

 

 

[Bobster6]

Hello,

 

I was aware of your previous work, but was never interested in the themes so never tried them. This is pretty good, your renders are beautiful and your writing ability is certainly in the top 1% of the genre.

 

Now, you could still use a proper editor to clean up your writing, you seem to have a problem using the proper tense in many situations, and your phrasing is often awkward, but overall it is still pretty good. The most annoying thing is the transition delays you use regularly from one screen to another. Also, adding new text to the end of the current line is frustrating and difficult to follow. It is much better when you just start another line instead.

 

These are just my initial impressions as I'm not actually finished yet. The story is interesting but I'm finding that it is dragging on a bit too much. Now that is your writing choice and not a criticism, just my opinion. I do look forward to getting back to and finishing it.