Boyos Posted June 1, 2017 Posted June 1, 2017 Hi! We are an adult games developers team. For this project We're using RPG Maker VX Ace and a 3D modeling software called DAZ, and also some packs from Sexvilla 3d. The first game that We are creating on is 'Selena Story'. We are team of 3 homies from one place, that always played some RPG/Games off and online together. We also liked previous games 3D created by Impure and Pandp which in fact inspired us to take things in our hand and start creating stuff that is lacking in internet. The good stories with good CG's. Thats our goal and we wish if You'll like our work - support us. For now, We are learning stuff (how to make events in RPG maker, how to render characters to look even cooler) so please be understanding. First game is much of "test game to learn stuff" but while making this, it started to became much and much interesting. You will see. Changelog 22-05-2017: Public Version - 0.1 01-06-2017: Public Version - 0.1 Patreon Version - 0.2 01-10-2017 Public Version - 0.2 Patreon Version - 0.3 The first game: "Selena's Story" Selena, the protagonist of this game is a 24 years old graduaded woman from Amity University with journalist specialization. Selena was the best on the year and now after studying She's ready to take things in her hands and start her carrier. She just lend a money from her crush and now She's going to move in to rented home in one of the cities. In this city there is one of the biggest newspaper companies in all country - and thats also Selena's goal - becoming the great journalist. How will her road towards the top of carrier proceed? Will It all goes as she wishes? You can know it only by one way - check it by yourself! In this game we are focusing the one thing - corruption. Corruption corruption and one more time corruption. Gamelink: https://mega.nz/#!ZNsEBCoB!sZgXjCHIVoiYOim0ajfrD-5Wn2y0WdFMUZOHug_TUlM Don't forget to check our Patreon site for news! www.patreon.com/story_tellers Previously on "Selena's Story"... Protagonist Intro Even if her trip has just started...the problems occur at the very beginning. With plans and goals her future is getting complicated. How will she solve her problems? She was part of something bigger...something...beyond her imagination. What will happen to her? And here goes v0.2 preview
XJ347 Posted June 4, 2017 Posted June 4, 2017 Opinions in the spoiler... Standard disclaimer for me. I am just one guy with one opinion, I might be in the minority so do not freak out if I say something isn't to my tastes. The English translation needs some SERIOUS editing. Sentences are full of spelling errors, bad grammar and odd word usage. This is surprisingly important. If people read something and it makes them stop and reread trying to figure out the sentences meaning than people will just stop and give up. Really short demo. IMO you need an early sex scene to give the audience a taste of what is to come. These things needs to be a slow burn, so the scene could be her masturbating, or a memory of her past boyfriend, or a fantasy! Just don't rush her into sex without a reason that makes sense. I like the idea that Selena isn't a virgin, but only had sex once at 24 years???? That seems odd, like really odd. Needs more explanation to make sense. IMO rewrite it, make it so she had a long term boyfriend she had sex with in college who broke up when she graduated and she has been celibate ever since. I get a slight racist vibe from this story. It's part of the trope with this Big black cock and an innocent white girl. Maybe you want that, porn does it ALL the time. I'm just letting you know what I see. The part about Selena mixing up a males voice with a women's voice is dumb, or did a women pretend to be him, either way it feels like a plot hole. The idea she lost her money feels disappointing. If you are that low on cash she would be very careful about it. Feels like a weak plot idea to make her indebted. No bank account? No credit card? Also why doesn't she have so little money? If she didn't have a job how did she get money in college for things like food, alcohol, travel and such? Feels weak. I like that the story gives you some direction on what to do. The dialogue feels fake. It doesn't feel like any person would say say these things. This might be a translation issue, but I suspect it's deeper than that. The plot is really weak at the moment so there is no immersion in the game. Selena's appearance is great for 24. Sexy, filled out, and realistic enough for me to like it. (Most adult games have 18 year old's look like they are 24 and it's just pathetic.) Note we only saw one female, I HIGHLY recommend that you have different body shapes for different women. You can go the route that everyone has the same porn star body, but personally I loose interest in that. The black guys appearance seems odd to me. I would take another look and see if you can make it look less goofy. It just makes him look more like a caricature to me, than an actual person. I know that is a TON of negative things to say. Thing is you have some potential here, or I wouldn't even bother responding if it was garbage. I just highly recommend that you try to break from convention. Make the characters feel real, and not just stereotypes. Good luck.
GSBmodders Posted June 5, 2017 Posted June 5, 2017 No offence intended, but from your opening post you tell us that none of you have any clue as to what the fuck you are doing. Yet you still ask for financial support? Further you cannot even spell graduated. Why the fucking hell would anyone ever want to throw money at this. Don't tell us that you havn't a clue. Instead just focus on your game what you intend and so on without dumping to many spoilers. If English is not your first language get a dedicated translator to look over your work. Last the entire fucking story is horse shit, if you have a writer get rid of them they fucking suck horse cock, Get a writer or new writer as the case may be. If you need to, open a free account at LIterotica and search for a writer. Then proceed again but for the love of god ditch the horror of this story. You can keep the theme that's fine if that's your thing but the story itself is beyond terribad. Your renders also need improvement but you can focus on them later but once you do get to them I suggest studying lighting, and camera settings as they have more to do with how your images will turn out, then textures and render settings ever will.
Boyos Posted October 1, 2017 Author Posted October 1, 2017 v0.3 is out v0.2 going free https://mega.nz/#!ZANAybpJ!oKL_iXJyiZQZYXuHdYGS4dUdi5wMRMAmLjwQKgzt-54
Boyos Posted November 1, 2017 Author Posted November 1, 2017 V0.4 is out. V0.3 goes free https://mega.nz/#!JAtXDZJQ!ka4A_IZl01hkQygDBu2GFFNk9p65svsQG_fIO5qaWts
Boyos Posted November 16, 2017 Author Posted November 16, 2017 V0.5 IS OUT! V0.4 goes free. https://mega.nz/#!5UV13YzZ!THINXINuqNisz2TNWMcI-by6PY0CP72JF7j0jXLp-Sw WHAT'S NEW? 1) Two new maps: Selena's Office and Beach 2) 7 scenes in total 3) 45 new CGS 4) 1 interview 5) Savefixes - if you are having problems with saves in V0.5, we prepared saves with every choice from V0.4 NOTE: EVERY UPDATE ENDS WITH SAVEMENU. EVERY SCENARIO YOU GO ENDS WHEN SAVEMENU POPUP.
Gushwin Posted April 5, 2020 Posted April 5, 2020 V0.7 is out i think if not it is V0.6 and plans of season 2 as well
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