Wonder if you are rushing the introduction of the chars that made it over in some form a bit, but ok. We shall see, still not on the re-start, pretty certain I don't like Sarah in this one though, about as bad as Arlan ... seems there will be no good influence on him this time. We will see if he is less bad by himself, but so far I doubt it. 😛 

Ok, the good parts first:  Harald and Kitten are adorable and highly entertaining.  Their interactions are quite amusing and the exposition that they provide is actually rather helpful as it gives a good insight into your world. Personally, I have no issues with authors partially or even completely redoing the world and lore of Skyrim so I don't see it as anything lazy. You are simply making the world for your own tale and using Tamriel's lore as a loose base for it. 

Sarah running the kingdom is pretty close to what she was doing in the original story. Now it's just out in the open and set up from the start. So far she seems about as manipulative and somewhat ruthless as any monarch would be in fantasy-medieval times, though the presence of Harald and Kitten soften her character a bit  (to be fair - the presence of that duo would probably soften even Alduin's appearance).

The Arlan parts:  Alright, so he gets 1 positive point for being a protective dad and another point for being a protective guardian. That's 2 positive points. He also gets around 10 negative ones for the first part of Tink's scenes and another negative 20 for the last ones. 😑 They are still well-done, of course, and especially the tongue ones were rather clever, so props on those from the technical standpoint.

The "Devianna is about to beat you up with the dictionary" parts: Plural for spy is spies. Violence doesn't have an 'a'.  Also, this might just be a language barrier, but when you want to say that someone/something belongs to someone it should be : king's, Harald's and so on.  Other minor spelling errors aren't as noticeable, but please, for the love of the Divines, use a spellcheck. As I said before, your screens are so good and you put so much work into them and then it feels like you just give up on parts of the text and dialogues completely. Which is a huge shame because you're a really good author overall.

I still haven't decided whether I am hate-reading or joy-reading the reboot, but it's still a very interesting adventure and I am looking forward to more.

Thank you for sharing it with us. 🥰

The Master is very happy with this one. 

8 hours ago, Talesien said:

Wonder if you are rushing the introduction of the chars that made it over in some form a bit, but ok.

Nah I only use what I want to use at the moment and I wanted to use Tink just because 🤔 And Sarah is fitting since we are in Windhelm^^

(And come, Zuri and the dark skinned elf, I won't call her Drow  to not summon your wrath xD, are just too oQo not to use)

8 hours ago, Talesien said:

, still not on the re-start, pretty certain

probably will take a few more chapters for you to figure out if you like it or not. I know reboots are a double edged sword for many reasons x,x why do you think I thought so long about doing it 😅

8 hours ago, Talesien said:

I don't like Sarah in this one though, about as bad as Arlan ...

Because she rules more openly now? 😮 she is as bad as she always was just in the right position to do things more efficent 🤔

Well Ok maybe she is a little bit more ruthless.. But at least she no racist

8 hours ago, Talesien said:

seems there will be no good influence on him this time. We will see if he is less bad by himself, but so far I doubt it. 😛

give it time. Took an entire arc in the original for him go get something like that. I wager Kitten is able to hold him back when she is around tho. 🤔

And hey, the good influence never was there whens it counts back then xD

7 hours ago, Devianna said:

Ok, the good parts first:  Harald and Kitten are adorable and highly entertaining.  Their interactions are quite amusing and the exposition that they provide is actually rather helpful as it gives a good insight into your world. Personally, I have no issues with authors partially or even completely redoing the world and lore of Skyrim so I don't see it as anything lazy. You are simply making the world for your own tale and using Tamriel's lore as a loose base for it. 

thank you ^^

Was just important to me do get the civil war and most of the things I had as a theme going on but never really used in the original out of the way. I had so many plotholes and opened plots again.. Partly because I was too excited to get to certain things and lost myself in others (I herby blame every breton and redguard in existence for this..)

I have a few other things I want to rewrite about skyrim. So there are a few more Lore Kitten scenes in planing ^^

7 hours ago, Devianna said:

Sarah running the kingdom is pretty close to what she was doing in the original story. Now it's just out in the open and set up from the start. So far she seems about as manipulative and somewhat ruthless as any monarch would be in fantasy-medieval times, though the presence of Harald and Kitten soften her character a bit  (to be fair - the presence of that duo would probably soften even Alduin's appearance).

Yorpers and I joked about Maari and Alduin once.. chances are she would be riding on his back 3 minutes after their meeting and declare herself her imperial highness 🤔

And nobody would have a problem with that.. I imagine the thalmor rebuilding their entire pantheon around her later

Every second Sunday is Kittenday and people will get to eat all the candy 😸

7 hours ago, Devianna said:

The Arlan parts:  Alright, so he gets 1 positive point for being a protective dad and another point for being a protective guardian. That's 2 positive points. He also gets around 10 negative ones for the first part of Tink's scenes and another negative 20 for the last ones. 😑

Wait, wait we need to know the actual number of points or negative points he has already 😧 And really.. 20? He is not done yet... Motherfucker will have a poitn count of negative 10.000 before the night is over >_>

7 hours ago, Devianna said:

 They are still well-done, of course, and especially the tongue ones were rather clever, so props on those from the technical standpoint.

Thank you^^

I did something similiar with her in the past and wanted to make it better than before 😃 

I finally figured out a workaround for physics going crazy and slavetats vanishing for Mini chars "Fullbody" instead of root bone does the trick when they are already standing on a heightend position like the dresser.. More about that in my upcoming book "How I ended up in Mega-Hell"

Chances are I get turned into a Fairy and arlaned for eternety x,x

7 hours ago, Devianna said:

The "Devianna is about to beat you up with the dictionary" parts: Plural for spy is spies. Violence doesn't have an 'a'.  Also, this might just be a language barrier, but when you want to say that someone/something belongs to someone it should be : king's, Harald's and so on.  Other minor spelling errors aren't as noticeable, but please, for the love of the Divines, use a spellcheck. As I said before, your screens are so good and you put so much work into them and then it feels like you just give up on parts of the text and dialogues completely. Which is a huge shame because you're a really good author overall.

I tried, I swear >,<

I will try harder next time I promise. I saw quite a few myself on my fourth spellcheck but many still made it into the chapter x,x

I once tried to write in german and translate them later but that took the fun off it and I used two programms to help me but they were not better than google translate x,x

But this is not an attempt to talk me out of it.. I will try to do better >,<

7 hours ago, Devianna said:

I still haven't decided whether I am hate-reading or joy-reading the reboot, but it's still a very interesting adventure and I am looking forward to more.

Mh.. Probably hate reading everytime Arlan drops his pants 🤔 

Thank you very much for the positive and negative critic ^^

The later will help me get better hopefully >_> gdmit. I had a B in english why am I so bad at spelling it 🙄

5 hours ago, Jay-Omms said:

Maybe we can use the Master to water Nora's Rose Garden it's looking a little thirsty.

Be honest with me. The Masters blood tank is as endless as Arlans.. Other Tank ô,o holy shit

Two seperate Skyrim with two different rulers, honestly this idea also came to my mind when i learned about the civil war from both side's perspective when i first played this game. It's not the first time Skyrim had two rulers so it makes sense. This way the Empire can appease both the Thalmor and the Nords.

Alright now for the FUN part 😄:

Sarah is (still) a hot babe, is she tried to seduce "Harry" aka Harald? (Of course she said it was just a tease but who knows what's really on her mind?) I loved when she bent over a little to show her ASSet!😏 (I personally think her room has some bdsm stuff in it well hidden, she kinda look like one with this kink.) Also that orc jailor is a lucky one!

Does Harald gonna remain the "sweet innocent guy" or one point he'll become a bad MF just like his dad? (Or maybe a "something in between"?)

Ella do have/had a crush on Harald or maybe just wanted the vitamin D? She seemed rather annoyed that Harald doesn't got her signals. Hmm maybe she'll try her luck with Arlan?

The Tinkerbell scene was funnishly lewd. Poor little fairy received a huge meat rod!😀 (or mushroom, the tip kinda looked like one to be honest🤣)

Kitten is still funny as ever! (Damn she ate all that food on the platter and that cheese looked so delicious, Sheogorath would be proud! 🥹)
 

4 hours ago, Gukahn said:

And hey, the good influence never was there whens it counts back then xD

Which of course was totally incidental and in no way by design. 😛 

4 hours ago, Gukahn said:

probably will take a few more chapters for you to figure out if you like it or not. I know reboots are a double edged sword for many reasons x,x why do you think I thought so long about doing it 😅

Probably, and aye I did wonder if it would've been the better way to start an entirely fresh story, but I understand that you've grown attached to some of the chars.

3 hours ago, bdmt said:

Two seperate Skyrim with two different rulers, honestly this idea also came to my mind when i learned about the civil war from both side's perspective when i first played this game. It's not the first time Skyrim had two rulers so it makes sense. This way the Empire can appease both the Thalmor and the Nords.

yes exactly. got the Idea from ESO, the first and only time I got inspiration from playing this game again for.. 3 minutes xD

And it gives us leeway in many cases. Before it was not only weird but downright stupid that there were no tension between the emperial and storm cloak characters in the groups x,x

3 hours ago, bdmt said:

Sarah is (still) a hot babe, is she tried to seduce "Harry" aka Harald? (Of course she said it was just a tease but who knows what's really on her mind?)

When Sarah "Motherfucking" Stormcloak wants to seduce you, your pants gain an Ego and drop out of respect! xD Nah she just loves teasing him, gets even worse in the next entry 😅

3 hours ago, bdmt said:

I loved when she bent over a little to show her ASSet!😏 (I personally think her room has some bdsm stuff in it well hidden, she kinda look like one with this kink.) Also that orc jailor is a lucky one!

Probably has an invisible chest for all the fun stuff And stores the bigger ones in the Prison if she want to.. Question someone alone 🧐 

And yeah, Orcy is a lucky one.. I need a name for him still. I made him really quick but he looks good. I like the idea of Orcs working in Windhelm. they are not represented as much as they should 🤔

3 hours ago, bdmt said:

Does Harald gonna remain the "sweet innocent guy" or one point he'll become a bad MF just like his dad? (Or maybe a "something in between"?)

Well, I can tell you Harald won't turn into Arlan 2.0. He is his own character and probably one of the most normal people we will meet^^ 

As for his "Innocence" I'm undediced but I won't let him stay as the only character without lewdscenes. Just has to be planed and made slow and in an reasonable pace. He is the reasonable Char in this show

3 hours ago, bdmt said:

Ella do have/had a crush on Harald or maybe just wanted the vitamin D? She seemed rather annoyed that Harald doesn't got her signals. Hmm maybe she'll try her luck with Arlan?

Well Ella is.. Rather special I think.  I got a plan for her so I don't tell too much. We will see her naked soon enough tho

3 hours ago, bdmt said:

The Tinkerbell scene was funnishly lewd. Poor little fairy received a huge meat rod!😀 (or mushroom, the tip kinda looked like one to be honest🤣)

thank you ^^

reminds me that I once did an Oldman chapter with a young deer girl, Maari was an enitrely different character then and convinced her the Dick of the sleeping guy in the field is a mushroom she should taste.. And she did.. A lot xD

3 hours ago, bdmt said:

Kitten is still funny as ever! (Damn she ate all that food on the platter and that cheese looked so delicious, Sheogorath would be proud! 🥹)

Sheo should invite her to a partySo they could eat all the cheese

🤧 

1 hour ago, Talesien said:

Which of course was totally incidental and in no way by design. 😛 

Of course it was

Who could ever guess that this model citizen that is Arlan would go and naughty everything with a pulse! that would be totally out of character for his paragon of chastety and justice!

1 hour ago, Talesien said:

Probably, and aye I did wonder if it would've been the better way to start an entirely fresh story, but I understand that you've grown attached to some of the chars.

Mh, would make the jump for many easier I wager but we would still see most characters again. I took a lot of work into the ones I send out again plus the few new ones of course. And the story would've been so similiar that a reboot is more reasonable for me 🤔 We will still see new characters like sleeping beauty here so it won't be everything old in new colors

 We didn't bet @myriad And I honestly.. Just remembered you were writing that xD Ehm.. You won  🍺:classic_cool:

Even if she wasn't a virgin. Probably really walked into a Dog or some shit before >_> 

In this episode she was decatalyzed and in the wrong interface so it doesn't count. The bet still stands...I dare you.

On 3/7/2024 at 9:35 PM, myriad said:

In this episode she was decatalyzed and in the wrong interface so it doesn't count. The bet still stands...I dare you.

Mh.. Well maybe I can make something small I have the perfect idea