Pale Pure [RPG Maker] v.0.1b

[Rech]

Hey there! For past several month I've been working on the game called Pale Pure, which is a free adult adventure made with RPG Maker MV, DAZ3D and my, hopefully, good writing / drawing skills.

 

So far it's about an hour long, includes 27 scenes and more than 400 images.

 

 

Pale Pure is a tale of friendship and family, murder mystery and suspense, embraced lust and moral choices. 

 

The game takes place in a rural 18 century town and surrounding area with some fantasy elements. In short it's more or less a classic setting inspired by Christian themes, Lovecraft, Poe and Grimms' Fairy Tales. 

 

Player will control 2 local girls, one at the time, each with her own events and plot progression. Basically it's a two different stories set in the same area.

 

As for H-content, aside from classic (anal, bj, lesbian) the game features:

• Incest
• NTR* 
• Beastiality* 
• Crossdressing*

*You can choose to ignore each of this.

**It's also not a classic corruption game, H-scenes are early accessible 

Some screenshots: http://imgur.com/a/oZ3Fl

 

 

There will be different ways to complete and progress each chapter, with endings depend on players choices (don't expect much though, but it's not just a few scenes either).  

Twisted version of a "good girl" route. 

Hidden events and generally lively town with it's own characters and their little stories. 

 

I'm not a native english speaker, so be ready for some typos and mistakes.

 

My general aim is to create a pleasant H-game experience where the player doesn't have to wait for adult stuff to happen, grind through combat or doing repetitive things while also not being restricting to a linear plot. It might be silly sometimes, but I hope you enjoy.

 

 

ver.0.1b links: Win

                         Mac

 

 

https://www.patreon.com/aretired

[XJ347]

Opinions in spoiler

 

 

 

This is my opinion. Note, I am a single person and many people may disagree with me. Do not freak out when I most likely will comment negative about things.

 

• First thing off the bat, something you know about. Grammar errors, the first sentence in the game has one. Once upon a time in a rural town there was a two precious girls. ---> "Once upon a time in a rural town, there were two precious girls." Personally suggest "Once upon a time, there were two precious girls from a rural town." It flows SOOO much better in English. Also, were you using the past tense intentionally? Also precious seems like an odd word choice, like they are a rare and valuable resource. If they are special and needed for a plot reason it could make sense but as is, it feels weird.
• I HIGHLY suggest you find someone who knows English to help proofread your English translation.
• The art style is unique. Personally I would like more detail rather than this fuzzy focus used. It's not bad, but it also not great.  
• I appreciate the girls are not super exaggerated bodies. They have larger breast than most would at their age but it isn't so bad that it is distracting.
• So in the beginning with Annabel, you pretty much start with incest. For the Dad and the brother, I guess it bothers me since we have no context about it. Is this a new thing? Has your dad always molested you? The incest is fine but I feel like there needs some explanation bout it first.
• Kristen: At least with the Grandpa it's clearly an ongoing thing that the grandfather knows he shouldn't. 
• I feel like the conversation says "a girl" instead of the persons name. No one calls a family member "a girl" you say "Kristen
• I feel like all the girls look the same. They all have large breasts with the same body shape. Someone should have smaller breasts to make the game feel have some immersion.
• I played both paths. Good job making both girls paths feel different.
• I still feel the Annabel incest parts feel awkward. I think the text needs some editing.
• I do not understand the cross dresser. I want to kill him, not hang out with him.
• Feels like the days are, go to school, have 3 events and go to bed. Not a bad formula.
• I enjoyed the random events around town. Flashing the bartender for booze. Talking to folks around town was nice too.
• Optimize the images, they seem pretty large and the image quality already feels pretty low, why bother making them this big in quality?

 

Overall I enjoyed it. Was pretty short, art isn't my ascetic I like, writing needs to be edited for English, but I enjoyed the experience. Keep at it.

 

 

 

[Rech]

Thanks for reply.

 

 

 

I prefer it this way, there's no need to hold back.

 

- About the incest thing at the very beginning. I want it not to be serious or realistic, I don't really like the slow corruption building and explanations in such games. Why not make characters and town itself to be perverted from the start?

- Girls looking the same. That's a common con for such games, everyone's shaping them to their taste.

To tell the truth, I was sure they are different enough.

- About Chris. There will be an option close to killing him later. If you ignore him or choose "negative" dialog options, there will be less events with him later. 

 

Overall I enjoyed it

It really makes me happy to read such comments. Thanks.

[Talbert]

Hi Rech, nice game.

 

Is there any ingame button or keyboard key to hide the textbox and look at the whole pictures while playing?

[Rech]

Glad you liked it.

 

No, there isn't, but I will definitely add one in next update.

I rarely use it in other games, haven't really thought about adding it. Thanks for pointing it out.

[Beornwahl]

I too prefer it when the H'content is not withheld behind tedious grinding. It's good to see.

[Cock Sucker]

shame no posting here :/