Well to me it looks more like a small lore article/exposure than a story chapter or a tale, as it's really short. Not that it would necessarily require dozens of images to do a story, but certainly more text and events, should you go for the illustrated text way. You might be interested in taking a look at this library, and looking at the pure text blog entries' length. It could give you an idea or a global framework where you could then add some images per entry.

As for the image, technically the drawing is neat and mostly nicely proportioned (though I don't think one's member could go that far in X-ray, he would nearly collide with the female's heart here XD). The shades of pink/purple are also interesting. But the poses and themes do seem a bit repetitive, so you might expose yourself to being monotonous if you reuse it too often.

3 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Well to me it looks more like a small lore article/exposure than a story chapter or a tale, as it's really short. Not that it would necessarily require dozens of images to do a story, but certainly more text and events, should you go for the illustrated text way. You might be interested in taking a look at this library, and looking at the pure text blog entries' length. It could give you an idea or a global framework where you could then add some images per entry.

 

As for the image, technically the drawing is neat and mostly nicely proportioned (though I don't think one's member could go that far in X-ray, he would nearly collide with the female's heart here XD). The shades of pink/purple are also interesting. But the poses and themes do seem a bit repetitive, so you might expose yourself to being monotonous if you reuse it too often.

Yeah, that's it, i forgot the word "Lore" thanks for reminding me that! i don't want to overwhelm the people that read it, in my experience a small but detailed description is more intereseted that a lot of words, that's why i took a while in making in it short but adding enoguh info to get an idea of this "Lore"

Thanks, well i'm a fan of really big and deep penetrations and you're right on how close is to the heart! they're some potions in world that allows the user to become flexible in multiple ways, flexible like a yoga master and with enoguh time flexible like a rubber toy, the bones remain the same, but the "Soft tissue" of the body becomes really flexible, skin, muscles, organs, etc, now the basic idea remains the same, but i don't think the poses are repetitive, cause i always try a way to make the poses different from other draws, but that's you're opinion and i appreciate that you share it! i do have other draws on the way with similar ideas, but the poses and situation will be different.

I appreciate your feedback! thanks!