My english language is... "not do good as i want"  

So i need your help, peole. Im working with one old mod idea - "Flash Eater". Its about disintegrating corpses with some benefits. I want to make it lore frendly so i create a little back story for this spells.

Here it is (hagraven letter)

Do you remember that ancient manuscript you gave me a year ago?

I worked for a long time to decipher this document but without any luck. This is an ancient, almost forgotten dialect. A few weeks ago, by a happy accident, I managed to find a person who could translate the text. Don't worry, he won't tell anything to anyone. Poor bastard, he-he.

This manuscript is the diary of a witch who lived almost a thousand years ago. Following an ancient legend, she was looking for the secrets of necromancer, expelled by dragon priests from Atmora for his monstrous deeds. This man discovered a way to extract special essences from dead bodies through their disintegration. New ingredients can give the skilled alchemist and enchanter something new and very powerful.

"Thoughts about lightning, dust and human heart. The wondrous blacksmith will forge new knowledge from them."

This is a direct quote from the manuscript describing how to obtain spells. I thought about it for a long time, but it seems that finally it became clear to me what we need to do

I know where the spells are hidden - the Atronach Forge.

The Spell Tome "Lightning", Bone Ash and the Daedra Heart will reveal ancient secrets to us.

I just want to know is this text good enought for english speeking people or i did somethind weird?