ANGELICA ORIGINS [KELO GAMES]

[Kelo Games]

KELO GAMES presents



What kind of Game is Angelica origins?

Angelica Origins is the story about a girl and her slow transformation. Starting at her 18th birthday you will see everything from her perception and it will be up to you to make a choice for her future. In Angelica Origins there is only one path, no virgin/slutty ones. From this main story you will make choices for her and it will influence future events. Whatever you choose events are going to happen with or without her. It's the story about a normal teen with dreams nothing can go wrong right?

EACH EPISODE WILL INCLUDE A WEEK OF ANGELICA'S LIFE WITH ITS OWN ENDINGS.

THERE WILL BE ALWAYS A FREE PUBLIC VERSION FOR ALL.

In this game you'll find sex contents like:

CORRUPTION,
CHEATING,
NETORARE,
INCEST,
INTERRACIAL...
and other things.

You absolutely can't find underage sex....

SCREENSHOOTS FROM MY GAME

 

 

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Currently I'm working on:

ANGELICA ORIGINS - 0.2
ANGELICA ORIGINS - 0.1A (Fix and edit)

Last Patrons Version:

ANGELICA ORIGINS - 0.1 (July 9, 2017 for Angelica's Fans)
ANGELICA ORIGINS - 0.1 (July 2, 2017 for Angelica's Angels and Angelica's Lovers)

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Last Public Version:

 mega:#!VzxxnZRQ!3SCnEXmu78tQZVZ574v0Ucfxzkdbz15a-Kydf9tmcAQ

This is the link to my Patreon Game:

https://www.patreon.com/KeloGames

Thank you so much. Mike.

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[Kelo Games]

ANGELICA ORIGINS 0.1a is out for 5$+ patrons!

Full demo is always free for all.

If you can, please support me. I really want to create a good game for you all.

Thanks you.

Mike.

[XJ347]

Opinions in the spoiler

 

 

Just know that I am one man, who has one opinion. Just because I say something good or bad doesn't mean others will agree with me. Take what I say with a gain of salt. Onto my opinions...

 

• Angelica is 18??? Looks 22ish IMO. A common trend for adult games to do that... Seriously doesn't look like a teen.
• Angi is Japanese (think it said she was) with curly hair??? You see why I am confused? Maybe I miss read something
• Music is a nice touch. Above and beyond that call of duty.
• Alessia looks like a blow up doll. While she looks more like an 18 year old (which is good), her breasts give me the implant vibe. Nothing wrong with that, some will like that fake look but not me personally.
• Alessia's school clothes are to revealing, that outfit is great for clothes outside school but IN school the principal would send her home. That really breaks immersion for me.
• The dialogue between Ale and Angelica feels a little wooden, key word little. Better than most the garbage out there. You are right to try to show their friendship in dialogue but it feels slightly unnatural at times. Example: "I know my sweet, shy friend, I love you". I just feel no human being would say that, in that way. It's not just this line too, but many lines through the game so far that make me raise an eyebrow. Something to take a look at in the future.
• Key to skip text... Good that really helps many play throughs but could skip better.
• Try not to use the words "My Love" so much. Pet names are good but don't overuse them.  Switch it up, one uses "My love" other uses "Honey" or something. My love is used generally when you are alone, but is kind of awkward when you are in a group. You need to use it appropriately.
• I'm confused, If we are playing Angelica then why are we hearing the inner monologue of her boyfriend??? You should only do this when you shift who focus of the story is. If you shift the story over to the boyfriend then it's find but that isn't what you did here. This really worries me about immersion. You even did it properly later on by making the focus on Simon for a bit. Please only let us hear inner monologues when they are the current character the story is following.
• Angi is 18 and is confused when the boyfriend uses tongue to kiss her??? This makes her feel like a sterotype and not an actual character. She has never had a boyfriend until not at 18? If so then ok but that needs to be explained better and she would react differently if that is her first french kiss.
• OMG a black teenager who looks like a person and not a stereotype??? + bonus points. Diversity is good! Tits to big imo but hey it's your artistic style I guess.
• Wait, Angi is ENGAGED at 17 and isn't even experienced kissing yet? This reads as fake. This isn't normal, you need to explain this in game...
• You do know what engaged means? Is this a translation error?
• Once again dialogue that feels wooden, "make love to boys". Love isn't the word that should be used, its more like fuck some boys... Love implies an emotional attachment, which doesn't makes sense here.
• Last time I talk about wooden dialogue, "He is protective of me." Normal people would say "he is overprotective, and would ruin my fun" or something to that extent.
• A dick that isn't the size of a horse, good job on having a realistic size penis, only wish the women were realistic too.
• Good artistic vision showing the silhouette first before the blowjob scene.
• Actual animations. Color me impressed.
• Ale complained that he came to fast from a blow job??? WHAT??? That has never happened ever. This isn't vaginal sex, the objective is to get him to cum, the faster the less work she has to do. This reads as fake.
• I innately hate Carlo. Is that intentional or just me? It feels like he is supposed to be prince charming, but he reads as a superficial jerk. Him not liking Angi's glasses is a prime example of this dude not caring about her, other than her looks. He reads as real though, but I hate him LOL. Might be your best and worst character in one LOL.
• Dario getting invited to the party feels fake. Angi would say "Ummm, sorry but I invited your sister already and we don't want any family drama."
• LOL I can't take Simo as a nick name seriously.
• The screen scrolling to show us where to go is really good btw. Nice quality of life thing.
• I'm not trying to be a dick, but this whole trope of Angi is totally innocent thing is bullshit. Ohh I have Double D breasts in high school and this is the first time a man has shown me attention like this? It reads as fake. The moment she grew breasts, boys will start treating her differently. Don't tell me she grew to DD's in a day...
• Now I will tell you what made me lose interest. It' is the mom sucking Simons dick. WTF!!!  At this point you might as well have aliens pop out and start anal probing people. I'm not saying some mothers haven't done that but you need to explain a few things first!!! How is Angi so innocent when her mom is a total slut? IT doesn't make any sense. My head hurts.
• The dreaming idea is really cool as a scene replay.
• People who wear glasses wear them because they need them. So if you don't put them on, you don't see normally and you would notice that... Not wearing them is DUMB!!!!!!
• The mystery with the boyfriend is interesting. I wonder what is going on.
• If Angi is shy and innocent why is she yelling at Dario and Simon? Her actions don't make sense with her character archetype. True you need to break away from the archetype to flesh her into a real character but her actions needs to make sense.

 

This is very hard to rate, there are some REALLY good things that this game has, but some VERY alarming issues too. I can handle the shapes you used, but I feel the dialogue has to be updated. You need to cut out or explain things better with the mom. Watch your stereotypes, from innocent school girl, fat socially awkward nerd, to angry black man. The only character that feels real is the one I actively hate Carlos, I hope he is a villain in this story. Would be boring is Angi actually dated him.

 

Well good luck on your project.

 

 

 

[Kelo Games]

Thank you for this long review!

I'll try to answer...
 

 

First of all, this is my very first experience. Believe me, 5 months ago, I knew ZERO about the softwares I'm using know. I'm still learning. (body shape and tits... I'll be better in future I think. But I think I've started good, am I right? All poses and animations are totally custom by me.

I'm not a native english, I'm tryng to do my best.

Angelica is italian, all her friends are italian or half italian and they live in a fantasy south island of Italy in mediterranean sea. Erika is half japanese. Larissa and Dario, well... Ping is born in Italy but his parents are chinese....

For my characters's body aspect... When I was a teenager the thing was different and a 18yo girl look like a 18yo, but now? I can show you underage actresses that look like 25yo but they are 14yo... Lol (just do a quick search on google). And for legal reason all my actresses are 18+yo.

Angelica female friends are more like the girl of this generations, less shy, less dressed, more open sexually, (and you know this is a porn game. I'm tryng to do a more realistic story, but in porn game is very super hard to do. I'll do my best, I promise.) I've worked in hospital and I can tell you for sure that people have their first sexual experience more earlier than 10-20 years ago. (12yo, 11yo, 10yo, 9yo, 8yo... )

You play as Angelica, but I prefear that the gamer keep a little distance from her. I want that gamer has a more open vision of the story. Yes, you are between a third person and Angelica. You'll see sex scenes without Angelica are directly looking at them too...

Angelica is the opposite type of her friends, but she's not naive at all, she's shy but she can react sometimes with a good motivation. Yes, she's virgin, she's never french kiss too, but she know about sex (maybe she don't know all kind of fetish, but she know most of things). Her relationship with Simone is... strange yes, and her friends are tryng to tell her. She say "engaged" and she believe it... but... and she use "make love" because she's virgin and romantic now... but yes, her friends are talking about sex... (poor Angelica! Lol)

Her body, and not only her body, her "hidden beauty"... welll... there is a reason about... I can spoil too much... she wear a large and not sexy clothes, she always keep her eyes on books, she always stay with Simone... maybe boys are looking her and she didn't have notice... and she keep think like this.... Carlo and Alessia are tryng to tell her... maybe in the future something will change...

Her mom?.... I can spoil why she act like this... but no she did nothing with Simone, she sayd "NO!". But she's a woman, not a girl, she can manage the situation about a young boy with the pants down...

Alessia was enjoyng the blowjob and she hoped to take a little more time to play... she only started to enjoy it... A woman have to blow me at least 10 minutes to make me cum for example... no woman made me cum in less than 10 minutes in my life...

Simo, Lari, Angi are italian way to give nickname. And here, in Italy we use to be more  "warm-hearted", "affectionate" when we talking between lovers, fiances, friends or relatives.

 

I hope I answer all... fiuuu!!! I hope more you'll like my game and my future updates. Thanks for your advices.

Kelo Games.

[Kelo Games]

After a quick search I found that "engaged" for english world is different from here in Italy. Here engaged is not always mean "a wedding promise" and maybe with a "engagement ring" too. We was like this in the past. So ok I'll change the dialogue text now and I'll keep this in mind for future. Thank you.

[XJ347]

I like the fact that you are trying to show Italian culture in your game, but if the game is going to be in English then it needs to be understandable to non-Italians. I don't mind seeing other customs, they just need to be explained for us foreigners.

 

Once again best wishes for your game. 

[Kelo Games]

I already change the text dialogue with "engaged" for this reason. For the rest...

 

...to understand my game you have to wait more updates. It's impossible to understand all in a demo. I watch foreign films and sometime it happen that I find something I don't understand at 100% and this is the same for example If I play a japanese game. Just be patient and wait for more updates of my game.

 

Just give me some time, I just started and I'm alone. If I find something that people don't understand, or If someone find it, I'll make some change like the use of the word "engaged"...

 

I'm doing my best, it's not easy to create a game and it's not fast. Many hours for minutes of game. You have to use not so easy softwares too.

 

Now imagine to do all of this in a different language... like french, or spanish or italian.

 

Believe me, you'll understand me better.

 

Thank you.

[Kelo Games]

It's shopping time!

Dear friends,
Angelica needs to change her clothes. Her friend Alessia wants to help her, Angelica is shy but she trust her friend. She need to do a little step to show her "hidden beauty". Do you agree? Do you want to change the clothes of our heroine? Become active! In  the next days I will post a poll and all the $ 5 + patrons will vote  and decide how Angelica will dress in the upcoming versions of the game.

Be ready!  Which dress will win?  Do you think you can win?

Help Alessia to choose new clothes for Angelica.

PS: In future there will also be a new poll for his new hair... Don't miss these decisions!


Mike.

[Kelo Games]

New ideas, new tier,... new Angelica Origins!

Dear followers,

thanks to some advices from my best patrons, I have a lot of things in mind to improve my game:

Some new ideas:

1. I know how to improve a little bit my images quality (I'll test a new software today);

2. DONE!!! (I'll add a skip intro for people who want to start a new game);

3. DONE!!! (If possible, I want to speed up skip text for the same reason);

4. DONE!!! I've found a new script that add "auto dash" to avoid playing holding shift button. (Next episode I'll use Rpg Maker Mv for the mouse option).

I hope it work, but I dont' know if this new scripts will ruin your old saves... but I think "auto dash" it's a great thing!


New tier:

I'm thinking to add a new higher tier as some patron suggested me; this new tier will be limited and the patron with this tier will choose one (or two if you're the only patron in this tier) extra images to put in my game's collectibles. This image will be:


1. with the name of patron wrote in a corner:

2. patron can choose the character, clothes, pose, situations in accord to my possibility of course (you can't ask me things that I don't have or I can do it, but I'll do my best):

3. this extra images will be acessible inside the game only for 10$+ patrons with a secret password;

4. due to the limited spots of this tier (1 or 2 for now...) patron have to contact me before I'll create it.

These are my new temporary ideas, I have a lot of work to do now. Let me know what do you think!

Let's make this game, an awesome game togheter!

Mike.