And so the mystery is cleared ! I enjoyed once again how you mixed some lore with your own story, adding to its stakes and dimension with those Arkay reminders. The screens (and sword poses ) were as good as ever, with good lighting, good colors, good compositions, facial expressions and posing.

The "detective" aspect of Gwynolda's inquisitor talents were also a good setup to allow you to solve the ambushes you put on her road, also giving us a good insight on her actual skills. You also featured some dark erotism through the horror plot ; and at the same time placed some of the twists on a psychological dimension (the evil spirit's analysis on Gwynolda being surprisingly accurate, as within devils often are ?) ... aannd, last but not least, we also got a bit of action, with paladin G. slaying out the evil culprit. Nice entry !

Also :

Malicia : « Gwynolda did very well to beat that meany skeleton. She who wanted her to kiss her pee-pee, but she didn't fell for it, no. Expert advice finally paid-off.

                Though I've got nothing against taking a nap, but I'm not sure she chose the best place for that, uh.  »

2 hours ago, Tirloque said:

And so the mystery is cleared ! I enjoyed once again how you mixed some lore with your own story, adding to its stakes and dimension with those Arkay reminders. The screens (and sword poses ) were as good as ever, with good lighting, good colors, good compositions, facial expressions and posing.

 

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The "detective" aspect of Gwynolda's inquisitor talents were also a good setup to allow you to solve the ambushes you put on her road, also giving us a good insight on her actual skills. You also featured some dark erotism through the horror plot ; and at the same time placed some of the twists on a psychological dimension (the evil spirit's analysis on Gwynolda being surprisingly accurate, as within devils often are ?) ... aannd, last but not least, we also got a bit of action, with paladin G. slaying out the evil culprit. Nice entry !

 

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Indeed, its cleared, yet not answered all questions, we know what happened with the temple and what was behind of it. And yes it was good time on some bits of Arkay, after well scenes took place in his temple.

Im happy with the scenes, was worried about the fighting ones thought, since I not used to make fight scenes a lot. 

Detective aspect works well with lot of stories, and quite well with horror and obviously with mystery, after all Gwynolda was there to investigate, relying on her skills and knowledge to figure out what she facing and how to deal with it, seems fitting. when paladin/inquisitors seeking out evil.

Yeah, I figured out, we not really had any kind of erotic content in this arc, and find the right way to put it there, twisted aspects of it for the Dibellan sister, also revealed few things on Gwynolda's desires and taste in certain things like in women.

I personally think this ability of the evil spirit is more of making the target face its own darker sides and fears use it against them.

Now yes, the combat scene and the holy smite of the evil, Gwynolda finally can let out her divine justice.

2 hours ago, Tirloque said:

Malicia : « Gwynolda did very well to beat that meany skeleton. She who wanted her to kiss her pee-pee, but she didn't fell for it, no. Expert advice finally paid-off.

 

                Though I've got nothing against taking a nap, but I'm not sure she chose the best place for that, uh.  »

 

Well Gwynolda knew something was very off with the tricks of the meany skeleton.

She got exhausted using her powers, the curse is still on her.

wow... thank you this episode was incredible again i just hope it's going to be really ending well for her and Riften and Dibella  ?

Oh boy, somehow this entry was even more creepy than the previous one. ? The whole scene with Eliza's illusion was such an incredible combination of sensuality and revulsion. I'm guessing the apparition was sensing Gwyn's basic emotions and desires but couldn't truly reach deeper into her mind (otherwise it would realize that Gwyn's resolution and will are much stronger than they might seem). 

But now we learned something very disturbing. There are many more of these shades within the city and if they are suppressing Arkay's influence that means a whole lot of draugr, skeletons and so on can awaken and start attacking everyone. It also seems that the shades can take on any shape, which would mean that they can easily infiltrate any place, be it the jarl's manor, the guards, the thieves guild and so on.

In addition to that, it looks like whoever that being is, they might be after Gauis. That leads me to believe that it could be an old rival of his. Considering how powerful Imperator Magus is, I shudder to think of how strong that unknown "She" really is. ? Of course these are just speculations, but your story just keeps making the reader want to guess what happens next! ?

Really interesting and intriguing chapter. Thank you for sharing it with us. ?

P.S. This screenshot is so pretty, that I just keep staring at it ?

Really nice entry. It had an old school horror vibe to it like The Exorcist or The Shining, back when horror was more about creepiness than shock, very well done.

Great storyline

I like this dark setting of the tale.

By the way, my favorite picture is:

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Damn. Now it's getting hot in here ^_^ Really love those action scenes. But you know, there is a question about Gwynolda storyline that still troubles me...

48 minutes ago, Crw said:

But you know, there is a question about Gwynolda storyline that still troubles me...

Malicia : « You're being very silly, Mr Crw. There are no horse pee-pees, 'cause horse guys are being busy with horse gals, and so they're not interested in Gwynolda, you see ? »

10 hours ago, wilson99 said:

wow... thank you this episode was incredible again i just hope it's going to be really ending well for her and Riften and Dibella  ?

Thank you ?

Well, who knows how things end up ?

9 hours ago, Devianna said:

Oh boy, somehow this entry was even more creepy than the previous one. ? The whole scene with Eliza's illusion was such an incredible combination of sensuality and revulsion. I'm guessing the apparition was sensing Gwyn's basic emotions and desires but couldn't truly reach deeper into her mind (otherwise it would realize that Gwyn's resolution and will are much stronger than they might seem). 

 

But now we learned something very disturbing. There are many more of these shades within the city and if they are suppressing Arkay's influence that means a whole lot of draugr, skeletons and so on can awaken and start attacking everyone. It also seems that the shades can take on any shape, which would mean that they can easily infiltrate any place, be it the jarl's manor, the guards, the thieves guild and so on.

 

In addition to that, it looks like whoever that being is, they might be after Gauis. That leads me to believe that it could be an old rival of his. Considering how powerful Imperator Magus is, I shudder to think of how strong that unknown "She" really is. ? Of course these are just speculations, but your story just keeps making the reader want to guess what happens next! ?

 

Really interesting and intriguing chapter. Thank you for sharing it with us. ?

 

P.S. This screenshot is so pretty, that I just keep staring at it ?

 

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Ohh Im glad to hear that, creepy-ness and unsetttling, almost disturbing vibes were my intetion, thats what makes me for the horror mood, and if this was better then the previous one in these aspect ❤️

Yeah, I wanted add an erotic context scene, and thought why not make it this way, we keep the core aspect of the story and Gwynolda's character, and make it a twisted scene, very fitting one for the horror vibe, for Gwynolda and for the story ^^

In the end he may was right about she looking for a mother figure for her life and desire motherly love, but Eliza is very thing she want destroy and hate the most, making her go incestious and creepy just really pissed off Gwynolda even more. ?

Gwynolda's faith and zeal is stronger then ever, and due her new found resolve and goal, her will ain't gonna break, she really want get Dibella's favor at any cost, that something what was her strongest weapon against the shade.

Yeah, while the mystery of the temple is answered, we got new revelations and new mysteries as well. Temple of Mara was slain by one of this shades, and entire city has way more then one, and yes, these shades definetly can influence the city look worser then it seems, even making the worst one in all the Empire ?

Yeah, Arkay's influence and pressense strongly undervalued, especially when the lack of it can cause serious problems and menacing scenarios to be honest, hence Gwynolda's worry.

He was targered with a Reason.

And the mysterious "She", althought Riften is already a terrible city, so her acitvities and plans easily can be hidden from even the Imperator Magus himself.

3 hours ago, SpyVsPie said:

Really nice entry. It had an old school horror vibe to it like The Exorcist or The Shining, back when horror was more about creepiness than shock, very well done.

Thank you ?

I be honest, the jump scare, loud music and other lame stuff we get from horror is terrible, cause lets be honest from a jump scare and we affected for like a few sec til we calm and that was it.

Creepyness and Unsettling is where the true horror for me, such thing can make you think for days if a good movie made you feel that disturbed.

So I favor these elements and use them.

2 hours ago, worik said:

Great storyline

I like this dark setting of the tale.

By the way, my favorite picture is:

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Thank you ?

Me too honestly, this arc is my favorite so far ^^

And the sword blessing pic is one of the coolest pic in the entry.

48 minutes ago, Crw said:

Damn. Now it's getting hot in here ^_^ Really love those action scenes. But you know, there is a question about Gwynolda storyline that still troubles me...

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Were is the horsecocks? ^_^ Hmm? ? 

 

Thank you ?

Ahh yeah, action scenes, they weren't easy for me, probably hardest scene out of the chapter.

Good question, I think they probably in the stables ?

26 minutes ago, Jayomms said:

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On 9/23/2019 at 8:56 AM, Resdayn said:

Thank you ?

 

Well, who knows how things end up ?

Thank you ?

 

Ohh Im glad to hear that, creepy-ness and unsetttling, almost disturbing vibes were my intetion, thats what makes me for the horror mood, and if this was better then the previous one in these aspect ❤️

 

Yeah, I wanted add an erotic context scene, and thought why not make it this way, we keep the core aspect of the story and Gwynolda's character, and make it a twisted scene, very fitting one for the horror vibe, for Gwynolda and for the story ^^

 

In the end he may was right about she looking for a mother figure for her life and desire motherly love, but Eliza is very thing she want destroy and hate the most, making her go incestious and creepy just really pissed off Gwynolda even more. ?

 

Gwynolda's faith and zeal is stronger then ever, and due her new found resolve and goal, her will ain't gonna break, she really want get Dibella's favor at any cost, that something what was her strongest weapon against the shade.

 

Yeah, while the mystery of the temple is answered, we got new revelations and new mysteries as well. Temple of Mara was slain by one of this shades, and entire city has way more then one, and yes, these shades definetly can influence the city look worser then it seems, even making the worst one in all the Empire ?

 

Yeah, Arkay's influence and pressense strongly undervalued, especially when the lack of it can cause serious problems and menacing scenarios to be honest, hence Gwynolda's worry.

 

He was targered with a Reason.

 

And the mysterious "She", althought Riften is already a terrible city, so her acitvities and plans easily can be hidden from even the Imperator Magus himself.

 

 

 

Thank you ?

 

I be honest, the jump scare, loud music and other lame stuff we get from horror is terrible, cause lets be honest from a jump scare and we affected for like a few sec til we calm and that was it.

 

Creepyness and Unsettling is where the true horror for me, such thing can make you think for days if a good movie made you feel that disturbed.

 

So I favor these elements and use them.

Thank you ?

 

Me too honestly, this arc is my favorite so far ^^

 

And the sword blessing pic is one of the coolest pic in the entry.

Thank you ?

 

Ahh yeah, action scenes, they weren't easy for me, probably hardest scene out of the chapter.

 

Good question, I think they probably in the stables ?

Yeah, modern horror and its associated tropes are pretty shit.

27 minutes ago, SpyVsPie said:

Yeah, modern horror and its associated tropes are pretty shit.

I agree, they lack of creativity and vision or even depeer meaning and symbolism.

Using the genre actual strenghts is ain't a big thing honestly, all it need some creavity and the actual aspects.

first persons games kinda meh in horror for me, and nowadays movies ain't use any of the strenghts of the genre.

for these two chapter, all I did just used them due my mood for horror ?

Nicely done! I agree, you're doing an awesome job setting up the horror theme here. Even though the daedra/evil is gone, the mystery of its cause remains. Awesome work!

8 minutes ago, Collygon said:

Nicely done! I agree, you're doing an awesome job setting up the horror theme here. Even though the daedra/evil is gone, the mystery of its cause remains. Awesome work!

Thank you ?

Im glad you think that, this wasn't my easiest chapter, but Im glad it delivered my intentions and the horror.

Indeed, cause even she banished one, there are more from an unknown person.