By the Divines! I'm in love with every single screenshot in this chapter. ? Your Gauis is perfect - he's reasonable and determined, patient and efficient.

After the way that you showed Riften, even if Gauis is supposed to be the "bad guy", I am now kind of rooting for him. Evacuating the orphanage before the purge might be a good idea, but aside from that - just burn it all. Cities can be rebuilt, but people everywhere will learn not to mess with the Empire. ? (ok, in a historical sense it may lead to more problems, but massive destruction is so much fun!...ahem...sorry, I've been spending too much time writing Trinn's story recently ?).

I am still marveling at your character design for Gauis. You managed to make him look both intimidating and official. And this shot is just ideal.

Ok, ok, I'll stop fangirling over your Imperator Magus for a minute. Really great work, Resdayn. My sincere compliments. ?

1 hour ago, Devianna said:

By the Divines! I'm in love with every single screenshot in this chapter. ? Your Gauis is perfect - he's reasonable and determined, patient and efficient.

 

After the way that you showed Riften, even if Gauis is supposed to be the "bad guy", I am now kind of rooting for him. Evacuating the orphanage before the purge might be a good idea, but aside from that - just burn it all. Cities can be rebuilt, but people everywhere will learn not to mess with the Empire. ? (ok, in a historical sense it may lead to more problems, but massive destruction is so much fun!...ahem...sorry, I've been spending too much time writing Trinn's story recently ?).

 

I am still marveling at your character design for Gauis. You managed to make him look both intimidating and official. And this shot is just ideal.

 

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Ok, ok, I'll stop fangirling over your Imperator Magus for a minute. Really great work, Resdayn. My sincere compliments. ?

Thank you ❤️, Im glad you like it.

Yeah, it seems I managed showcasing him as I wanted ?

I wanted show Riften just as crappy place as it is, as we saw Markarth from Gwynolda's eyes, and Windhelm from Arilith's eyes, now we see Riften as well.

Riften is more or less one of the many bad places of Skyrim, corruption is almost equals and just as bad like Markarth, place has big crime organisation, drug trades, but seriously entire hold is full of literally every kind of criminal activity, from drug trading Vampires to Maven's personal Empire, Jarl is blind women who not notice anything outside of her fancy castle, while entire city is rot and suffer, along with the hold.

This is just slap Gauis to the face, that much visible to him, I mean he is part of the imperial goverment, he knows when things are bad, Bravil was Cyrodiil worst place, and I think Riften is actually very similar to that.

Destroying the city or doing the same what happened to Bravil in lore, is last resort, as you noticed he is efficient, he not necessary will burn the city outright, he has many things to uncover.

He is sorta the protag of this chapter, we gonna see his perspective a lot, Gwynolda is more side character in the Purge of Riften arc.

And, yeah not hard to root him :3

Well I tried make him having a good and cool look, Im happy to hear that was a sucess ?

Screenshot of this entry is perfectly good, Im happy with it and satisfied, the first part of the chapter is ended up as I planned. ?

Yeah, you can't hide it, he is pretty much your favorite char ?

thank you sounds very interesting startup , can't wait to see the next part i love your Gwynolda ?

1 minute ago, wilson99 said:

thank you sounds very interesting startup , can't wait to see the next part i love your Gwynolda ?

Thank you ❤️

Never felt like Riften was thaaat bad, but a nice introduction and set up, I like it.

1 minute ago, Alter Native said:

Never felt like Riften was thaaat bad, but a nice introduction and set up, I like it.

Thank you ❤️

Honestly Riften, Windhelm and Markarth is skyrim worst places, each of them has their own terrible ways.

Riften may not have racial tension, reachmen war, but it has massive corruption and crime problems, and sorta lawless. ?

Very good screenshots. I know a person who loves Riften too: @worik

5 minutes ago, EvalovesEP said:

Very good screenshots. I know a person who loves Riften too: @worik

Thank you Eva ?

26 minutes ago, EvalovesEP said:

I know a person who loves Riften too

? "love" seems to have it's ups and downs.

A kinda different chapter this time. I think it was a clever idea to introduce Riften through Gauis eyes, as it introduces us to his way of seeing things at the same time. The screens were mostly great, though I think some sequences could've gained being decomposed a bit more (Gauis talking to the guard is in fact already him launching the fatal spell ; the woman seems rather still while the guard is staring at her). But in fact, it's Gauis' character design which is great, and he radiates as much by his menacing outfit than by his dangerous composure. Grammarly speaking, I think you should try reading your sentences aloud when proofreading : if you can't do it in one go, then put a point and part it in two sentences. It'll help improve your style.

Anyway, awaiting for Gwynolda to make her move !

Malicia : « That Gauis grandpa is very meany ! He turned a guy into tiny ice cubs just 'cause he chatted with him ! I hope I've never got to talk to him, no !  »

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4 hours ago, Tirloque said:

A kinda different chapter this time. I think it was a clever idea to introduce Riften through Gauis eyes, as it introduces us to his way of seeing things at the same time. The screens were mostly great, though I think some sequences could've gained being decomposed a bit more (Gauis talking to the guard is in fact already him launching the fatal spell ; the woman seems rather still while the guard is staring at her). But in fact, it's Gauis' character design which is great, and he radiates as much by his menacing outfit than by his dangerous composure. Grammarly speaking, I think you should try reading your sentences aloud when proofreading : if you can't do it in one go, then put a point and part it in two sentences. It'll help improve your style.

Anyway, awaiting for Gwynolda to make her move !

 

Malicia : « That Gauis grandpa is very meany ! He turned a guy into tiny ice cubs just 'cause he chatted with him ! I hope I've never got to talk to him, no !  »

Thank you ?

General idea was making him sort of "protag" and put this chapter focusing on his perspective and him , showcasing Riften as it is also helped show his view on things.

Women with the guard, was sort of intentional, showcasing how they not bother do their duties when the trouble.

Gauis actually went there with casting spell, he actually not bother actually asking around, when he has tools at disposal ?

Well his fanbase is growing ?

Reading things loud is actually not helping a lot ?, I just feel like 1st grade student from it and stupid.

Malicia, you are on his list to talk ?

3 hours ago, Deso561PL said:

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Hulk Smash corruption! 

I would have a good use from him by my side with Silvano. Our city needs more man like him

Compliments for your story and screenshots.

Might as well just send a meteor down on the city, fast way to remove it.

7 hours ago, Resdayn said:

 

General idea was making him sort of "protag" and put this chapter focusing on his perspective and him , showcasing Riften as it is also helped show his view on things.

 

Women with the guard, was sort of intentional, showcasing how they not bother do their duties when the trouble.

 

Gauis actually went there with casting spell, he actually not bother actually asking around, when he has tools at disposal ?

 

Well his fanbase is growing ?

 

Reading things loud is actually not helping a lot ?, I just feel like 1st grade student from it and stupid.

You do not actually need to put a lot of voice to it, but just breath. It's a tip useful for people who aren't used to pace their sentences right yet, so that they realize it is absolutely impossible to enunciate their sentences without getting out of breath. So a confirmed writer should only use it when being in doubt. But anyway, as long as you find something to remind your to use "points" after on or two commas then it's alright.

7 hours ago, Resdayn said:

Malicia, you are on his list to talk ?

 

Malicia :

8 hours ago, Jayomms said:

Hulk Smash corruption! 

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7 hours ago, Elf Prince said:

I would have a good use from him by my side with Silvano. Our city needs more man like him

Compliments for your story and screenshots.

Thank you ?

His methods maybe questionable, but he knows how to make things less bad ?

7 hours ago, ther1pper said:

Might as well just send a meteor down on the city, fast way to remove it.

That just the last resort ?

3 hours ago, Tirloque said:

You do not actually need to put a lot of voice to it, but just breath. It's a tip useful for people who aren't used to pace their sentences right yet, so that they realize it is absolutely impossible to enunciate their sentences without getting out of breath. So a confirmed writer should only use it when being in doubt. But anyway, as long as you find something to remind your to use "points" after on or two commas then it's alright.

Malicia :

 

 

Ohhhhh, so thats what you meant, hmmm..

Also Malicia ?

I like it! Purge all the things!

6 minutes ago, SpyVsPie said:

 

I like it! Purge all the things!

Hahaha ?

I guess we can expect that a lot.

Ooooh, Gauis is badass! I loved reading this entry. His inner monologue gave me chills. Excellent job!

2 minutes ago, Collygon said:

Ooooh, Gauis is badass! I loved reading this entry. His inner monologue gave me chills. Excellent job!

Thank you ?

Goddamn that one of a hella great job. Love the way you represent this all dirt and filth that actually (should, but in vanilla game never) take place in Riften. And must agree with everyone - Gauis is pretty badass.

16 minutes ago, Crw said:

Goddamn that one of a hella great job. Love the way you represent this all dirt and filth that actually (should, but in vanilla game never) take place in Riften. And must agree with everyone - Gauis is pretty badass.

 

Thank you ❤️

I decided to took a lore-friendly, yet very accurate view of this city, this is Riften.

Hehe, Im glad you like him.